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Amazing writing, I really liked this. The detail was lovely, and I feel like it was the perfect length. Keep up the good work.
*cough*
... *clears throat*
...so is there a full image of that cover or...?
5817541 Maybe if you do something special for me I'll send the whole picture pinkie.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw11065-rdeye1.gif
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if ya want me to proof it ill do it
if i can get that picture. i couldnt see it in the artists gallery so im assuming it was a commision.
5818876 Nah. In all seriousness, it wasn't a commission. I asked if I could use it and the owner said I could, that's the actual dimensions of the picture, so theres nothing else, sadly
Holy cock.
So much
cumjuice... It was fabulous.I love it.
This was pretty passable, but I think it's a little bit dull. There's not a lot of pizazz to the prose and it ends up bringing the whole thing down.
I reccomend trying to emulate poetry and prose, because the way this is written is more like a docunentary. It isn't awful, horrible or poorly written, it's just kinda dull. Vinyl's character and personality doesn't shine through the narration, which seems to be in third-person limited. See, when something is third-person limited, it's still in third-person, but it's focused solely on one character's experiences. Think books like The Giver– the main character is the only source of perspective we have. Thus, if you're gonna use this perspective, you've got to let that character shine through like you would with a first-person fic.
Keep writing. You can do it.
5822781 Yeah I can see that. I'm not quite used to writing in third person, so I guess it's just from inexperience. Could you give a specific example, though? So I can better understand? I'm not saying you're wrong, I just want to see where I can improve.
I enjoyed this a lot. Then again, I love Vinyl. Maybe we could get an OctaScratch sequel? I'd like to see one involving those two "making up" as it were.
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Thank you!
can there be a sequel?
I like this story it’s sexy