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Ninja No Theme


Ninjas shouldn't have theme songs, they mess with sneaking. PM me if you want to chat I am a huge fan of people.

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Pinkie Pie did not like pies. This was strange as it was in her name. She could make cupcakes, pumpkin cakes, pound cakes, rainbow cakes, and the highly dangerous and experimental ultra cakes, but she did not like pie. What was its point? It was gooey instead of crumbly, fruity instead , of chocolaty, and it had no icing. On an average day, Pinkie would not think of pies at all, but then Sparkler blew in, drenched in rain

Edited by ErraticOverlord

part of a pi day speed run

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Comments ( 8 )

I thoroughly enjoyed these horse-words.

I even like the way you've set out the dialogue it gives it this, weird rhythm that adds to the comedy.

Thumbs up.

5740919 wow thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it I had a good time writing it :yay:

5741157 ha, thanks glad you liked it!

Due to the very wooden and awkward dialogue and lack of descriptions, I'm afraid I'm going to reject this from the Goodfic Bin Submissions folder.

Details are here.

That said, this wasn't actually too bad, it's just that the dialogue really throws me, and could use a lot of work.

5742181 yeah I understand this was my first work and I did as part of a contest I thought I would try any way thanks for looking at it

5742478 No problem. If you do have it looked at and want me to take a second glance sometime in the future, be sure to give me a call.

5742563 thanks and thanks again for looking at it

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