Hi. If you're reading this it's most likely that you were also just out and about in the woods taking a stroll when you were suddenly taken off the beaten path. If that is the case and you're not just some monster that's wondering what this parchment is and if it can eat it, then please read on.
If you have continued reading and not eaten this then you've passed the test! Congratulations! Now I probably won't remember where I put this in the damn forest of Hell. I'll just begin by telling you two things.
One: You are not on Earth anymore. I found this out when I stumbled upon a dragon's cave. Yeah.... Not one of my best moments. Also two: I do know where we are. In the fuckin' magical land of Equestria. It was awesome when I just watched this at home, but now...I realize it's not some walk in the park happy, adventure time to have. It's a dangerous place where you don't know where Civilization is.
Anyway that's my two pieces of advice for you. I hope you can survive until I can actually see you. Good luck and godspeed.
This is a story about a guy names Mark Hampton that takes place at the beginning of the fifth season. He was just an ordinary brony. He liked the show, the people, and the stories. His life changed the one day he decided to go camping in the wilderness. Now he's stuck in the Everfree Forest surviving with skills and luck. May Celestia help his forsaken soul.
MLP is owned by Hasbro and Lauren Faust
All music used is owned by their respective bands
YES RWBY I LOVE THIS SONG
Sucks. All HIE stories where the human likes them blow chunks, now anyways. The same shit has gotten on my nerves long enough and you can shove that type right up your asses.
5717180 Dude. I get that you have a lot of rage right now, but can you please not hate comment.
Not bad, I'd like to see where this story goes :)
5717542 Cool.
Honestly, this is bad. Your OC is a brony, combat and survival master, understands geology and primitive anthropology, and other skills.
Just no.
Don't even get me started on the survival bits.
Beyond that, you have a severe need for an editor.
5718068 He's not a combat master per see. He just gets really strategic about where he places sharp pointy objects. I don't get where you got the geology bit. If you could tell me where you got that I would be able to fix it. Anyway all he knows is how to camp in the wild, what he learned in college, and about mlp. Pretty much it.
5718082 Lets take wolves for example. They rush more than one at a time, so unless they guy is swinging like a panicking maniac to keep them off, it just isn't feasible. Same with the rest, your OC comes out as the victor with nary a scratch and a high body count. Fights never go like that. Statistically or otherwise without major skill.
The geology was in reference to the stone tools and the like. It takes specific types of stone to make passable tools out of. If the guy managed to make a basic trough to hold water, it makes the tools even more specific. So geology and anthropology is a given as well.
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Duh. He was literally swinging his spear around. As I said he is no combat expert. He just knows how to avoid death. Oh. For the tool thing you mentioned, I was just thinking that he literally tied stones that he found around his cave house to sticks via rope vine. Also, the only reason he wasn't seen being hurt at all during the battle was because Twilight was viewing it and she was hiding behind some bushes while the whole thing was going on. I even mentioned the battle scars he got in some fights in the last chapter I did. Also, his water gathering skill.....I actually might need to explain that one in the story actually. I'll be right back.
5718136 Fixed it. It now explains trials and tribulations of the makings of the stone bowl. Is there anything else wrong in your opinion with this story because I will do only one more fix before I begin on the next chapter.
5718068 I honestly do agree on the editor thing though. It took me at least three weeks to write this stuff out because I was paranoid that it was filled with mistakes. Now that I got it published, people are still telling me there are mistakes. Do you happen to know a good editor? I can't really rely on you the whole time to point out all of the inconsistencies and the mistakes.
5718222 There are a couple of editor groups on here. They should be able to point you the right way.
.... and thus you gained a follower...
ing BEAR
and Fluttershy would be the most ok with him eating meat...as long as it isnt SAPIENT..
she feeds A mother
and kills fish to give to otters...
and theres the whole vampiric jackalope thing...
5724450 jackalopes don't drink blood!
...they drink booze.
you need to start a new paragraph with each new speaker.
5733412 Alright I'll deal with that little issue. Thanks for telling me about that.
5733412 There you go proper paragraphing. I think.
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they do in the comics
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5741556 It isn't just teleportation. It's-----
Sorry guys. We can't have any spoilers, so I had to interrupt the dear author here.
*Maniacal Laugh*
great chapter as usual
I get the feeling that you're really into science and stuff. There's nothing wrong with that (science classes were consistently my best and most favored classes when I was in school), but I'm having a hard time seeing how the protagonist stopping and trying to summarize the quantum theory or explain what modern humans know of teleportation, actually adds to the story at this point.
In this chapter, for example, the protagonist stops Twilight to ask her, in pictograms, what sort of teleportation she's planning to use. She can't adequately explain at that point and he just goes along with it anyway, so the entire exchange is largely pointless. You could have cut the entire chapter length by half if the main character had simply let Twilight do her own thing which would have inevitably led to her coming up with some sort of translation spell.
There's also one inconsistency I noticed this chapter. You seem to be simultaneously implying that the main character is both immune to and affected by magic. Specifically, the protagonist is able to disrupt Twilight's levitation spell by simply touching the object she's affecting, and prevent her from properly channeling her magic by touching her horn, but is able to have his atoms split apart and reformed just fine?
Overall, the story seems to ramble on too often. As in, you could have gotten your point across using less words. As an example, I'll try to re-word the first 2 paragraphs of this chapter:
Traversing the Everfree Forest was always a huge risk. Thankfully, Twilight Sparkle was at least a decent guide. Contrary to popular belief, she wasn't always in her castle. Like her fellow Princesses, she spent the majority of her time after gaining her title going on adventures. Due to the delay before she formally receives her royal duties, she spends the large amount of free time she has exploring and studying more about magic. As she was already well-versed in the magical capabilities of ponies and dragons, she would often visit her friend Zecora for more information on the abilities of other species. Unfortunately, Zecora's peculiar way of speaking left many concepts lost in translation. Despite this, Twilight continued to visit her friend weekly.
As Zecora lived within the Everfree Forest, Twilight eventually became one of the best guides of the infamous forest. Unfortunately, she was currently in an unfamiliar area, causing both Twilight and her odd companion to become hopelessly lost. Every turn she made through the overgrown forest led straight back to where she began. It was like the forest was deliberately keeping her trapped here. The situation frustrated her to no end. She desperately wanted to simply teleport the both of them to her home and be done with it. Unfortunately, as a result of her encounters with non-unicorns and their reported discomfort after the fact, Twilight felt as though she had a moral obligation to somehow tell her companion what she was about to do. Luckily, she had an idea of how to get her message across.
5754188 Yes. I know what you're talking about with the magic situation. I did this on purpose. Unfortunately, I can't really explain why. It would kind of ruin the future chapters of the story. Also, the rambling is because of his personality. What would you do except explain the basics to yourself while you're stuck away from any semblance of civilization? Other than that I will try to fix my stuff accordingly.
5733594 that's VAMPIRIC jackalopes.
Damn. This has intrigued me.
This is interesting to say the least.
Read that, actually read what it says instead of what you meant.
Now try not to be amused at what you actually wrote.
5807578 I have to admit, some errors are dealt intentionally.
I'm glad somebody actually noticed. Now that someone has though, my little prank must be erased. 
5807646 Aw... but why? Just do what I've seen some other authors do and "forget" to fix it.
DARN IT RAINBOW!
RAINBOW!
tails
met
his
shifting between first and third person is a no-no.
pick either British or American.
it and her in the same sentence. Does not compute.
spacing, spacing.
scorpion
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Whoa. So many errors. I...I can't even comprehend why my writing sucks so bad. Anyway thanks Natan for the little editing column. I took the liberty of fixing all of the mentioned mistakes. Hopefully my writing is perfect now. Sorry for making all of you guys go through horrible writing. *Ahem*
Princesses
for non-unicorns
servant
this part is differentiated from the rest of the chapter by some kind of dark undertext layer. That looks way off even on dark theme.
spacing
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spacing
So far the amount of cliche in this story is over nine thousand!
5864733 Why?!?!?! Why are there so many errors?!?!?!?! Sure it's not really impeding on the story, but it's still affecting my credibility as a writer here. Anyway I fixed all that I could ,but I couldn't find one of the errors you were talking about. It was something about how dark the writing looked. I don't know man. It could be just your computer freaking out. Anyway I did all that I could to fix the issue. Hopefully this didn't ruin the story for you.
5865465 "the conversation" chapter, appears on both Chrome for Android and Firefox for Windows: i.imgur.com/PRWSmvN.png
I think you mean approached.
Well done, AvidSeason... Setting aside the mechanics of writing, you've created an entertaining little HIE fic here. You've introduced your character, and provided interaction with two others along with assorted wildlife. I like the effort you put into human vs Equestrian magic comparison; instead of the usual "humans have no magic" you propose "humans have incompatible magic." That's interesting stuff.
I look forward to seeing what Twilight has measured in Mark that she recognizes as magic.
Yup "This Be The Day" is awesome!
Annnnd... Rainbow should get Arrested for Assault/Murder on the Poor Human.
I like to see more Chapters. This looks good.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=RPBboNoTPV4#
I vote Bob for his magic's name.
The black part is still there. It looks awkward. If you tried to accentuate his flashback then you should've placed flashback in it, not the flashback's interruption.
I vote for إطلاق النار
Just because there isn't enough Saddle-arabic names in this fandom.
5991949 Alright, I may have solved the problem. Can you check for me?
Vote Bob for... uhh... like.. Mana ... president?