It wasn't supposed to be these weird things that we brought here, but we were looking forward to making a new friend. But, he doesn't want friends. He wants to go home more than anything else. He says his world NEEDS them to be there. Problem is... I don't even know how THEY got here. I was supposed to be engineering a meeting between my human friends and my pony friends. And thanks to a mare who will not be named *cough*Pinkie!*cough* somehow I got these things instead... oops?
That's better than what was here before huh? lol
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Interesting. Do go on.
6450616 600 words into the next chapter. Gonna take a nap then write more.
I can tell this is going to result in weakened dimensional barriers.
6457479 huh... hadn't though of that one.
6458321 *raises eyebrow*
6459967 *Raises eyebrow back* No, seriously, I hadn't... wonder if I can work it in somewhere... OOOOOOOOO IDEA!!!!!
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6463580 I just figured out how to get a plot point to make sense. Thank you.
6464098 Glad to help!
Hmm... This is an interesting twist. Although it needs a bit of refinement, and the pacing is a little fast. It seems that the ponies are a little too trusting of the humans and vice-versa. But then again, it might be pacing.
But this is a 'Block' story, so I think my expectations are a little high :P.
6464908 Are they trusting? ... might wanna take a look at how it all goes down Fleetfoot seems rather skittish don't ya think? They are ALL scared. Also... what is a block story?
6464920 Writers Block.
If an 9' alien came to your door, complete with 5" fur covering all its body and a 400 watt blaster, how long do you think it would take for you to trust it. For me, it would be at least a week.
But if I said this was bad writing I would be the biggest hypocrite on the site! My story had a 2:1 dislike ratio, so I took it down :P That red bar made my eyes bleed!
6466333 I never implied trust. I implied that they needed help and she is there to help. Whether she wants to or not. Given that they haven't attacked her yet she might trust them somewhat. But she is wary nonetheless, also... where did you get the 5" hair thing?
6466791 Chewbaka. And the depths of my messed up imagination.
6466954 Ahhhhhh, someone was scared of Chewie when they saw Star Wars. lol