ButtonMash never really got romance. He was a big time gamer, and that seemed to be all he needs, or could ever want. But, a female classmate seems to be acting, different to him. In a good way. At least from most point of views.
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Nice short little story. I love young love... needs a little work though.
Yeah, i struggled for that 1000 limit XD
Dam, Buttons has an easier time getting girls than me
Hmm, I need a sequel!!!
Hmm.. If you expanded the details on this story, and less grammar issues, then this would be amazing! But because mistakes are semi-frequent, my rating is only 5/10 right now.
5550436 XD
5550437 I may just make one. This seceded over what i was expecting.
5550451 Thank you for your input.
5550493 well what ever you do grate story man.
5550515 I though this was going to be a flop to XD
5550525 Thanks.
Misspelled names and bad grammar everywhere. Good grief.
5550681 Fair enough.
I'd be more satisfied with a sequel with a couple thousand words and a grammar check.
5555287 Ok.
5557453 Thanks!
Whelp, I love myself a good ButtonBelle! My personal rating:
6/10, AKA Decently Written.
Now, let me explain my ranks.
10/10 is reserved for only the most BadAss of ButtonBelle, sorry.
9/10 is perfect in most sense. This was a bit short to go here.
8/10 is a flippin awesome story. This lacked detail and characterization for my liking.
7/10 is a great story, worth the re-read. This felt a bit rushed, and you tried to fit a non-cliche ending into 200 words. I too fall into this fail, but it is a massive one.
But everything else was awesome! It really is refreshing to see more ButtonBelle.
Errors that were noted:
You kept spelling it SweetieBell and ButtonMash when it is Sweetie Belle and Button Mash.
Rushes kept occurring, making the story much less readable.
Low characterization. We only knew half of what we should have about your take on Button Mash before we jumped right into the plot line.
Needs a bigger conflict. If it's "Oh, he gets the girl like that", then where is the climax? Conflict?
I am not picking on you. Just posting this so that people can see this, including you, and fix their own stories accordingly. Maybe you should get an editor?
5562540 Thanks for the advice!
5563507 welcome. Keep calm, And ButtonBelle on.
15 out of 11
Nice story.
~Button Mash was here.
5580094 My crappy spelling at it's best :D. But yeah, I think I need to use Microsoft Word or get and editor XD
5580094 Oh, and thanks for the fav!
Really? Mooncraft? When there is PonyCraft, MineLittlePony, HoofCraft, and more! I have been offended. Btw, this story seems kinda rushed......
kinda rushed and they both like each other duh
5598854
I think it's pretty brilliant!
6055475 :D
Will there be a sequel???
6089139 I was planning to, but I just don't have a story line for it.
6089463 Oh ok, maybe their wedding or something cliché like that?