We all know princess Celestia as a beloving and kind ruler, but she have a secret that she have kept hidden from everypony even from her own sister. This is just a build up story to future story
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Oooh snap. Au tag?
This needs work. Capitalization, punctuation and tense need several corrections to make the story flow better. Come on, you can do it. Polish it. Go one extra step.
5550606 well this was my first attempt on a one-shot so thank you for the comments and this is also kind of a prolog to a future fic of mine
5549264 Huh?
5551783 I mean to say where's the Alternate universe tag. I was also surprised at the origins you picked for Twilight.
5551790 Oh well that will be explained in the sequal story I'm planning
Sorry this took so long. Good work!
5551979 No what I meant is your story should have the Alternate Universe tag. Unless you can explain why Night Light and Twilight Velvet aren't there.
5552255 thanks, I'm glad you like it
5552345 I can and they are also there
You spelled "Celestia" wrong in the title.
6076087 I did?
6077000 Yep, and in the chapter title. You said "Celastia" instead of "Celestia".
6077393 Ok, I'll better fix that
thanks for telling me 
I added this to my 'Very Fanfictiony Fanfictions of fanfiction' library.
6227544 Huh?
6228965 This fanfiction. It's delightfully fanfictiony among other fanfictions.
6229635 Oh, it just confused me a little, so I take it you liked it?
6229655
In all the fanfiction's fanfictiony glory of fanfiction, I dub it to be a very fanfictiony fanfiction among other fanfictions so of course I enjoyed it!
6229780 You lost me there
This story has promise if you're willing to put in the work necessary to fix it. First, go here: The Writer's Resource Group. Click Forums then Internet Resources. You'll find a great deal of things there like spell checkers, grammar correction tools, composition, tense and syntax aids. Through these and a little work you'll be able to improve what you create. Good luck to you and keep writing!
6360783 I'm happy to hear that
6361062 Good story, it deserves more love
6361073 Have you read the sequal?
6361077 no...
6361398 Well, any question I might have left unanswered will be explained in that one and the first chapter is out
6361403 Ok I'll check it out, thank you