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keam


Neardy little fanfic reader who is trying to make her own. Love talking and you can allways feel free to send a PM.

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Sweetie Belle's parents have once more neglected their duties as parents and drop her off in Ponyville late at night, counting on Rarity to take care of her. When Rarity hears the story, she get enough. She declare that Sweetie Belle from now on will live with her, and her only. This decision, however, set all of Sweetie Belle’s world spinning until she's not sure what is real and not. Somewhere in this chaos, though, she meet somepony who can help sort things out. Berry Pinch's mother is as crappy as can be and Berry spend most of the time at her aunt's house. When she hear Sweetie Belle’s story she is baffled to know that she is not alone, and that there is more than one set of crappy parents in the world. Together they can contemple and complain. But most important, together, they can understand.

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Comments ( 35 )

It's shaping up to be a quite interesting story indeed.

One note though: The opening of this is listed as an "Epilogue." It should read "prologue" or it will be confusing to some readers.

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Nice start. Although the epilogue is the ending. Prologue is the begining.

Interesting story so far. I can't wait to read more.

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Glad you're liking it. I fixed the epilogue/prologue problem. More will hopefully come soon.


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Hehe, not really in this story...

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Didn't you read the chapter? It's not as bad as you think. If she'd happen to be sober for once, she'd be over protective.

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You already read it, but now you can favourite it.

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Oh, crap. Yes. Hope it didn't ruin the chapter for you.

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I Knew what you probably meant. could have made a whole different story if it was on purpose though.
Looking forward to reading this story

Good morning, Keam!

I reviewed this story for Olympus, and sadly it doesn't quite meet the standards I set. It does have some nice ideas, though, so it's a shame to reject it. I'd love for you to take your time with delivering the information a lot more, specifically.

Review is here. If you ever try fixing stuff, you let me know and I'll give it another look.

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It's gonna be continued one day but first I need to srop being lazy and edit/fix existing stuff.

Comment posted by ______1 deleted May 5th, 2015

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*looks at disclaimer ON HIATUS*
I am so sorry that this story has to be cut short so abruptly, and at a time when it feels like it needs to be told.

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Yes. The plan is that once I get the rewrote going, it will be taken down, and put up a bew once it is fixed

6368078 yeah. I got so much potential and I don't want old time sloppiness to scare ppl away

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