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There were a few grammatical issues, but overall this story grabbed my attention and i had a real blast reading it.
Most Excellent.
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Thanks for the notice, I'll fix it.
Some more corrections:
I may have missed some, though.
And like most other people here, I wish for more content!
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Yeah, sometimes my fingers don't like to write. My fingers be hating on words.
Even though they're transformed ponies and maybe not biologically compatible with real humans, USE PROTECTION, KID!
5403393 I do.
It's not a bad story (as shown by it's ratings and views) but there is still a number of grammar errors and/or incorrect use of a word.
I don't think we'd buy a door to make it open so it interrupts our thoughts, but I think we'd be interrupted by a door opening yes?
There are a bit more, but it's Christmas Eve (or whichever holiday you celebrate) so I don't want to make you bored on this fine day. Though might I recommend getting a proofreader as a precaution for future chapters and stories? (They DO tend to save stories from possible grammar/punctuation disaster, if they're good proofreaders...)
Marry Christmas Eve/Hearts Warming Eve
Of course it is. EVERY guy loves a little lesbo action
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I'm sorry. Don't be mad. Please. Sometimes I'm not a good speller.
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That's a good question. It's usually because of all the stuff the girls can do to him, like say... giving him a make over, or paint his finger nails pink-ish. Something like that. I know it'll be amazing to be at a girls sleep over. But this idea came to me.
You need to change than to then in all of these.
Overall review Its pretty good, I did enjoy it.
The ending does seem very sudden, It feels like the party is just getting started and thats the end It feels like it could use a follow up chapter explaining if he ends up in a 3 way relationship with both of them or does he end up with just sunset?
The spelling is a little rough in some places but I have seen worse. Get someone to edit this and polish it up a little and it could be very popular.
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Yeah. Everytime I look at my feed it'll say so and so had added this story to their favorites. It's one of my most popular out of all the ones I've wrote. And btw, the word "Brutal" is what you say if you listen to metal. Metal is like my thing, and my little pony. Heh, I get carried away with that type of music when I write stories. LOL.
well the spelling is hanging out the window, but what the hell, good story
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Whoops. Thanks for that. I hate to say this. But I'm dying right now.
The characters and story were more bland then cut out paper ducks.
The grammar was awful too.
this doesn't seem complete
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It does to me
5979173 Wow no need to be a dick about it. I didnt say I was perfect did I.
Awww yeah!
Some of the errors aside, this was a good read. I shall fave this and follow you.
This is an alright read but the mane 6 are way out of character. Please try and work on that.
So... where's the second-person tag?
This has completed on it, but after reading it, it seems like there is at least one more chapter in this story. Are you writing any more or is this it for this story?
He must have gotten a lucky rabbit’s foot from angel.
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Fair enough. XD
Though I don't really feel pain from simple feelings. Physical, but due to my mentality that I should be above pain, whenever someone actually has the gall to cause me physical harm and the feeling of pain itself drives me into a mindless beast/berserk state. When like that, you could probably blow my arm off and I wouldn't even be self-aware enough to notice it, much less feel it.
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I feel pain randomly.
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Ah, I'm sorry to hear that.
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It’s ok, it was actually sarcasm, but thx. I was gonna say I feel pain while writing these types of stories as well as looking back at them. Yeah, I’m embarrassed by my own work.
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Oh, I see now. I sometimes don't pick up on sarcasm very well.
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It’s fine