Rhythm and Harmony: The Octascratch Prompt Collab

by lyra_lover777

58 3rd Date by Ratsenkio

3rd Date by Ratseknio

“Coming” said Rarity at the pony on the other side.

Rarity opened the front door of the boutique to find Octavia on the other side.

“Why hello Octavia, darling.”

“Hello Rarity. I’m sorry for this unannounced visit. I need help with a little problem of mine.” said Octavia.

“Don’t worry about it. Now, what seems to be the problem?” asked Rarity. “Come, take a seat. Tea?”

“No, thank you. I’ll try to be out of your mane as quick as possible.” said Octavia, “The problem is, do you remember Vinyl?”

“If you mean the mare that you were having lunch with the other day, then yes. Can’t say I talked much with her though.”

“Well, you see. Tonight is our third date.” said a red faced Octavia.

“And what is the problem then? To me it seems like you are doing well on your own.”

“I’ll repeat myself. It’s our third date” said Octavia again, making emphasis in third date.

“So, you need a dress? I’m afraid I don’t follow, darling” replied Rarity.

“Isn’t one supposed to have semhmmhm” tried to speak Octavia but found impossible because of a pink hoof in her mouth.
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“Hi dashie! Want can I do for you today?” asked Pinkie Pie behind the counter of Sugarcube Corner.

“For me the usual and for Twi… Pinkie?” asked a confused Rainbow. All that was left of Pinkie was a little folded paper saying “Be right back!”
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“Pinkie Pie! What did I said about appearing out of nowhere?” asked Rarity in a stern voice.

“That is wrong and sometimes it scares ponies.” said Pinkie with a little frown. “Either way, Tavi you can’t say that! There are kids watching!”

“What? What kids? Pinkie?” asked Octavia to the air. Pinkie Pie was already gone.
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Pinkie appeared from behind the counter.

“There you are Pinkie! Where were you?” asked Rainbow Dash.

“Sorry! I was preventing a disaster” said Pinkie with a grin.

“Sure… Either way, I want the usual and Twi… Oh come on!” cried Dash. Pinkie once again ducking behind the counter and disappearing.
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“That was weird” said Octavia.
“No, that was just Pinkie. You were saying?” said Rarity.

“Oh, yes. Tomorrow is our third date and isn’t it supposed to be when you *looks left and right* do it?” finished in a whisper.

“Not really, it depends on each couple. I mean look at Twilight and Rain… Forget that last part, please.” said Rarity.

“Alright... I mean, I like her a lot, I’m even willing to say that I love her. And we’ve known each other for a long time even before dating. But I’m not sure I’m ready.” said a red cheeked Octavia.

“Look darling. As much as I would love to help you, that’s something that I really can’t help you with.” said Rarity, “this is something that you should talk with her. The only thing I can really say is that I’m happy for you and I hope everything goes well with her.” finished with a smile.

“Thank you, and don’t you think you didn’t help. Just talking to you has done wonders for my nerves.” Octavia said as they stood and trotted to the door, “Thank you for your time. Now I got a date to get ready for. Goodbye Rarity.” finished Octavia as she left the boutique.

“Goodbye, Octavia darling. Hope everything goes well.”

Rarity closed the door.

“Now Pinkie, I swear that I didn’t intend to break that Pinkie Promise with Rainbow.” said a frightened.

“I hope so...” And with that Pinkie vanished in the shadows.

Comments

[Divine Path]

It seems Pinkie knows when an episode is airing. Intriguing.
I can see either of the two despairing on this. Tasty dialogue~

[FoolRegnant]

I found the jumping a little disorienting because of the shortness of the scenes between the cuts. The most major grammar error is that you still need to put commas instead of periods at the end of your dialogue when the dialogue doesn't also end the sentence.

[Arctic Inferno]

Well, perhaps aside from the rather sudden changes from scene-to-scene, I honestly did quite enjoy the dialogue of this one.

A few missing words, though. Be sure to carefully proofread!

[Ratsenkio]

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Let's say that rule 63 opens a few doors that are closed when you think about lesbian ponies.
5252967
Of course! Pinkie knows everything!
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5255469
Thank you. I'll have that in count next time.
And regarding the jumps, at the time they seemed like a good idea. I suppose they would have worked better with fewer jumps with more content.

[Divine Path]

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I see then.

[Arctic Inferno]

5256120 Oh, really! I meant nothing wrong by it.

I just think you have a whole lot of potential, and it's just a bit of a shame to see it spoilt slightly by a simple failure to check spellings.

[Ratsenkio]

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Even so, it's still nice to know and learn from it. Even if it's a small error.
Thanks for the compliment either way!