Hector Salvator is not your average human. He was smart, talented with computers, handsome and charming, very well built, and successful. He had the life he has always wanted and worked his butt off to get there. He had the girl of his dreams, a well paid and respected job, a nice car, a wonderful house, an angelic girlfriend who cooks and cleans for him. Everything was perfect till one winter night on his way back home. Now all he has left is his book bag, the clothes on his back, and a strange scar on his forehead he can't remember ever having. To make matters worse, something has left his mind, and he just can't figure out what exactly he has forgotten.
So yes, your everyday, simple human in equestria story. I've done my research and found a small way to make things a little different from the rest of the other ones, I might find more ways but for now here it is. The picture for this sucks but I promise I will find a new one. You have my word. If you are new to my stories then know that things aren't always what they appear to be, and for those who know me, hehehe, have fun. Sex is on there for sexual themes and rare naughty scene, that's it. (P.S Yes Discord is in here but not that much, I didn't know if I should put him there or not, so I did just to be safe)
4816711 I knew I forgot something, I didn't put those two together, thank you
interesting
Darn. At this point, I just wanna see him get back home. I feel WAY too bad for him to have this continue.
I'm lovin this.
More baby more more.
interesting chapter
You mis-spelled 'damn', repeatedly.
'Dame' is a semi-derogatory term for 'woman'.
4822086 I know, don't worry. It's a life long thing that I did, so instead I decided to misspell it on purpose
tomato tomato right? 
4821473 I see this doesn't please you very much
4824712 ill be honest, this really isn't my cuppa' tea. but i like it enough to stay.it has an interesting plot to it. here buy yourself something pretty (hands you
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if you need any help with proof reading/editing ill gladly help. i have a keen eye for spotting grammatical errors / rush-i-ness. Just PM me and ill look the chapters over and report to you what i find. (umm you know if you want to...
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4824709 You say that to someone who genuinely does say to-mah-to rather than to-may-to.
One of my favourite pieces of philosophy:
You could put three human in a room, ask for their opinions and get six different answers.
5205316 Hmmm, interesting. I am not sure what that is supposed to mean though. I kinda get it, but not fully
5205395 It's a coment on human nature, specifically our tendencies to make contradict opinions for the sake of making a point involved in the contradicted opinion, all of which revolve around an individualistic desire, while conversely maintaining a desire to be a part of something.
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Holy shit, I have no life.
5205449 . . . .
dame, that was really freaking deep. I wish I had followes like you commenting on my stories. You just blew my mind! To think some one on here could think so powerfully deep! 
4825246 I usually got it covered but I'll tell ya what. For my big stories that are important (Not my free lance stories like this one) I would like to double check my chapters before publishing. So why don't I give you a holler for that?
Not a bad story but there is one thing I dislike about your writing style--you keep having one character talk to another, but use the other character's name immediately after the quotation marks.
It comes off with implying that the person being addressed was the one talking. Just odd.
6366074 Really? Hmmm. . . how odd. Would you mind either showing me one of those pieces or show me an example of what you mean? If it is a flaw in my writing then I can fix it, but if it is just a misinterpretation then maybe I could try to shed some like. If it is a mistake on my part then I want to try to fix it asap. I am always looking to improve!
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Then Hector tells Lyra:
Lyra responds:
Hector quips:
Hector explains some things:
Hector falls down and Lyra says:
These were the examples I found going back and looking at it more critically. If you want to have a different character react, don't end the speaking part of the sentence.
"It shouldn't look like this," Spike heard Twilight say.
Instead end the speaking line with a period and quotes and start a new paragraph describing the reactions. This lets the reader know that its not part of one another. Helps to improve comprehension.
"It should look like this."
Spike nodded understanding what she meant.
Hope this helps.
6366203 Yes. . . this is indeed a flaw on my part.
Wow, thank you so much for showing me this. I have never realized it! For real, thank you. I will try to break that habit as fast as I can and update my writing style. This was very helpful, thank you so much! 
So happy you managed to continue writing on this story. Thank you and please continue to update when you find the time.
6366604 Well this story is my "I got writers block on all my stories" kind of thing. If I am stuck on something, I write this one to keep that creative juice flowing. Although it's funny how more people ask for this one than my big time story, Button Mash and Sweetie Belle Love!
It's my most popular story I have and biggest. . . yet more people comment and privet message me asking for me to write more in this! 
This is just so funny! 
6366473 Don't mention it. ALL writers have some sort of flaw in their writing (me, I'm way too wordy).
If you don't use an editor, try letting the story sit a week once you're done writing it, then read it again yourself. You'll look at it with fresh eyes.
As an artist I can tell you that after seeing any work of art, you're brain thinks, "It's suppose to look like that."
So you need to walk away from it to get a clear perspective. With visual art you can look at its reflection in a mirror (should still look balanced), but with written work, you just need time. See! Wordy.
6366752 Well thanks again. You have been a real help!
Hey, while you were at it, did you find anything else that you may think I could improve on then? Like, idk, the combat interface or. . . . really anything else? I would LOVE to hear your opinion! 
Why doesn't this story have a human tag?
6796889 There is a human tag?
Hello, this is Hector Salvator,” said Hector as he flipped his phone open, answering in his usual business tone in case it was work.
So you mean to tell me that a super successful business guy has a flip phone 0/10 not immersive
We don’t literally eat horses
Unless you're Asian
7462126 It was because it wasn't up to date with our time zone. This time zone is further behind
Will this story be continued or is it dead?