• Published 28th Apr 2012
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When Lacking Responsibility or how one moron's power leads to ruin. - AhopelessEndevor

Marcus was just another Brony who spends far to much time on the internet, he had few friends, and s

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chapter 5: The Party

'Oh my god this is so fucking boring...' It had never occurred to mark that being in a kids show, ponies would party accordingly. While he never expected ponies to have alcohol (although weak), it turned out that they did live up to his low expectations when it came to throwing parties. It was like a 5 year old's birthday...

Few had actually turned up to welcome the "Pottymouthed lizard" as he was now known as, in fact, only the mane six had shown up, and Mark suspected that it was purely for Pinkie's benefit.

He watched bored as a blindfolded Twilight stumbled over to a painted donkey, attempting to pin a tail on it, while in the background Pinkie giggled hysterically, they all had big smiles on there faces and honestly looked to mark to be enjoying themselves wholeheartedly. He didn't get it, 'It's pin the tail on the donkey for fucks sake!' yes he understood they were miniature pastel colored equines, but still, this was lame even for them. Beforehand they had partied 'ponyville' style with tacky music, dancing wildly for around half an hour. He would have been sympathetic, but besides Dash, they had not a drop of alcohol in their system. Therefore for Mark it was kind of pathetic. Very much so in fact.

So far despite the best efforts of Pinkie Pie, he had yet to partake in any party activities, instead electing to stand awkwardly just outside the area of activity. Yes he knew he was being antisocial, but dammit the games were just so lame.

Everypony laughed (Mark was not a pony) as Twilight managed to pin the tail on the donkeys forehead, it wasn't even funny.

"Ops, wrong spot Twilight" Laughed Pinkie, "I'm sure you'll get it next time!"

"Yea!" said Dash, "You were so close, you'll get it next time for sure"

Mark grumbled, 'Oh god they're setting it up again', this had been the 5th try, it was beyond stupid, boring and humiliating, he'd had enough. Mark sighed dramatically. Maybe he could sneak away or make up some kind of excuse.

Pinkie turned, slightly disappointed "What's wrong Mark? aren't you enjoying the party".

"Not really..." he replied. He was now getting concerned/irritated glances from the rest of the ponies present. He was aware he was being rude, calling a party in his honor boring, but he'd simply had enough.

Rarity was giving him a funny look as if to say please don't hurt pinkie's feelings, Mark ignored it the best he could.

"Oh... well how about you get to pick the next game, that'll be fun!" Pinkie was not one to easily depress, she bounced right back with a large smile.

But now the pressure was on Mark, he hadn't any clue what ponies liked doing at these kind of social gatherings, or at all in fact. 'Fuck it, I'll just choose a Human game' a grin spread it'self across his face, which considering his new features probably looked somewhat sinister.

"let's play Shots" he suggested giddily. He'd always enjoyed shot's while at collage, they'd drink every-time Pinkie broke the various laws of physics, suffice to say he'd woken up with ink on his face on more then one occasion.

"Shots?" pretty much everyponies reaction was the same, they hadn't a clue what he was talking about. "OOOO, sounds fun how do you play that" asked Pinkie enthusiastically.

"hm... well first of all you get some booze, secondly-" he was cut off by Twilight.

"Wait, why would we need alcohol at a party?" 'did she seriously just ask that!?' thought Mark.

*SIGH* "Because it's a drinking game..."

"I like the sound of that!" exclaimed Dash, "Am in too, sounds like a mighty fun idea" added Applejack. Rarity seemed somewhat skeptical but opted to listen further.


"Now hold on a second, you do realize alcohol has a plethora of detrimental health side effects that-"

"Oh common egghead, it's just booze, booze doesn't hurt you. besides I think it sounds awesome" interjected Dash.

"I must admit that this game, although brutish, has piped my interests" added Rarity.

Well if her friends were doing it it should be OK, "Alright fine, go on Mark?"

"cool, OK so everyone gets a shot glass" he snapped his fingers and several miniature glasses appeared before each pony, "and some shots" click* now they were filled with Jack Daniels. Pinkie drank her's straight away, coughing afterwards at the taste.

"dammit Pinkie... you're supposed to wait before downing the- OK whatever, so, whenever a unicorn uses it's magic, you down the shot, when ever Dash-"

"I feel funny" laughed Pinkie.

"Yea, so when ever Dash say's the words cool, awesome or any kind of thing like that, you take a drink"

"THIS GAME IS AWESOME" cried dash. Everypony downed their shot including a reluctant twilight, and then immediately started gagging. except Fluttershy who apparently didn't want to play.

"DEAR CELESTIA, THIS STUFF IS FIREWATER" cried applajack "what'd yer put init?!?"

"My that's the strongest drink I've ever sampled" added Rarity.

Rainbow Dash sat with a large grin on her face.

Twilight was grimacing and had her head in her hoofs, clearly having never sampled whiskey before.

Pinkie was laughing, the alcohol in her system beginning to take effect, apparently ponies had little tolerance for ethanol.

And Fluttershy was just staring at hers.

"Hey Fluttershy, aren't you gonna drink that?" asked Mark, he'd asked for their names at the beginning of the party.

"Oh, um... I-I'm not really so sure about this game... I'd rather not play.. if it's ok with you-" her soft voice was interrupted.

"Oh common, it'll be fun" if there was one thing he had to accomplish this night, it was getting Fluttershy drunk, what kind of Brony would he be if he didn't.

"Yea, common shy, it'll be awesome!" Dash encouraged, Mark silently thanked rainbow dash for peer-pressuring her into it, he refilled everyone's glass and causally said "drink".

"Oh um... I don't... really..." she squeaked.

Mark knew what to do, he raised his arm up and began chanting "do it, do it, do it, do it", just as he expected Dash quickly joined in followed by Applejack and Pinkie. Rarity and Twilight sat bemused at the display, somewhat disliking how this was going. But there judgment was impaired by an alcohol buzz common among first time drinkers.

To his surprise, Mark found the tactic working, Fluttershy was staring at her glass as if it had become animated and had stated to tap-dance, but clearly she was considering it. With a frown on her face, she slowly and self consciously lowered her head and grasped the glass in her jaw, the chanting increasing in volume and excitement. With her heart beat racing, she tilted her head back and drank the concentrated beverage, coughing slightly afterwards but smiling at the roaring overexcited applauds she received from Dash, Pinkie, Mark and Applejack.

'This is going to be a great Party' though Mark, and that's when it hit him, He had phenomenal cosmic god-powers, he wielded infinite creative power, 'And the only thing I've used it on thus far is booze and mattresses ...What is wrong with me', whatever. He'd do that later.





Equestria girls we're kinda magical
Boots on hooves, bikinis on top

Twilight stood on a table along with Fluttershy both looking a little worse for wear, the duet singing a drunken version of 'Equestrian girls'. Earlier Mark had summoned a karaoke machine out of nowhere when they started singing (because they might as well have music). She'd never had this much fun before, now Twilight understood why ponies went out clubbing, why ponies consumed salt and alcohol. She hadn't a care in the world, she wasn't worried about the upcoming wedding, nor the possible detrimental side effects of alcohol, right now all that she knew was that she was standing unsteadily on a table with her friend Fluttershy, signing karaoke. And she loved it.

"Hey Fluttershy..." she paused and interrupted the singing, "I thinck... I get it now.... I undershand why some ponies love getting intoxicated...and... what was I saying?" she sat down on the table swaying slightly. Fluttershy laughed.

"I think you've had a little bit to much Twilight" Fluttershy's stutter and shyness had been eliminated after the third shot, she too was swaying slightly.

"Alm finnnneeee.... wat were we singin again?" She looked to Fluttershy with a stupid grin, she hand't felt this relaxed in her entire life.

Fluttershy paused contemplatively, "I forget.." She held her hooves up to her face in a barely suppressed giggle, then they both burst out laughing. Twilight didn't even know why it was so funny, it just was.

*smash* Twiligh flinched at the noise, and relative quiet descended upon the room, "my bad guys" called mark glancing at the pile of now broken glass covering the floor.

Somepony could cut their hooves in that she thought, "Mark, go clean that up", he made a dustpan and brush and began sweeping.

"You didn't need to tell me, I was already going to, jeez", there was no need for that reply, she was just asking him to clean up a potential health hazard. She'd just ignore it.

She noticed Pinkie lying on her back atop a summoned couch wearing a lampshade, giggling hysterically as Applejack and Dash tried to best each other in an arm wrestle, Rarity sat sipping her wine nearby. She had to admit this was a pretty fun party, perhaps they'd introduce Alcohol into their celebrations more often.

Fluttershy had wondered over and approached the sofa from behind, she draped her forelegs over the back and smiled happily. "Hey Fluttershy!" cried Pinkie "HA, why are there two of you, bahahahaha" Truth be told Twilight couldn't find any differentiation in Pinkies usual behavior, she usually ended up in a state like this even without gratuitous amounts of alcohol anyway, so if anything she was actually slowed down.

Fluttershy began a long reply, she talked and talked about nonsense Twilight couldn't make sense of, although she heard animals mentioned quite a few times. "Twilight darling" her attention was drawn to Rarity, who sat opposite to pinkie on the couch, she trotted over and around to the Rarity's side of the couch and slouched over it, head buried into the fabric and her rustled frizzy hair covering her face. She didn't bother to look up.

"Twilight, I just had the most fabulous idea. while watching everypony at this party I was struck by inspiration, the wildness in eveypony's manes is simply intriguing, they contain a wild sort of beauty that seems to just exude a sense of pure freedom, why, I could make a new fashion line based upon these idea's" she paused looking at the ceiling in enthusiastic contemplation. "I've already thought out several idea's for each of our friends, I simply can't bare to wait until morning".

Twilight rose up from the leather sofa (ponies wouldn't even know it was made of leather, they don't do that kind of thing), That sounded like a wonderful idea, making her and her friends dresses. 'In fact, why don't we all go there now' That sounded like a really good idea, going out late at night days before a wedding, while drunk, to work with needles and other Sharp equipment. Twilight didn't even consider the risks, only focused on making her friend happy.

"Letsh do it, right now.... lets go to your boutique and make those dresses right now, it'll be great Rarity" she slurred enthusiastically.

Rarity straightened with happy resolve "you're right Twilight, we simply must procure these ideas while they're still fresh"

"Hey everypony! we're going to the boutique so rarity can make dresses for us" she exclaimed to everyone present. They all looked back with varying degree's of drunken stupor.

"yea, Sounds good"



"I just follow the crowd" said mark.

It never occurred to anyone present how boring making dresses would be, they just felt like going outside, that and it sounded like a really good idea at the time.




Back to marks prospective:

Mark walked out the door, So far it had been a pretty awesome party, they'd pretty much trashed Sugar-cube corner, what with all the extra furniture and trash lying around. 'I'm not cleaning that shit' thought Mark, he'd already given them a karaoke machine and extra furnishings (which included a sofa plus a table and chairs for the duo's little arm wrestling tournament) so he guessed that'd pay for any mess he'd caused. It was a good thing the cakes were out of town.

Mark and a group of heavily intoxicated ponies walked unsteadily down the sidewalk, not quite in a straight line. Everypony present was merry and babbling on about something or other that Mark couldn't and didn't care to understand. He got back to thinking about his powers ' OK so far I've made nothing of particular interest...' and it was true, he'd only made rather mundane household items thus far. What kind of god was he?

"Everybody stop!" he exclaimed suddenly. He now had everponies attention, "guys I-" he realized he'd not thought this out very well, he had no idea what to say or do now that he'd gotten everyone's attention, he cursed the fact that he never thought things through.

"What?" asked Twilight inquisitively.

"urrr.... sorry, I actually didn't think of anything to say before stopping you all"

Dash broke out laughing, as did a few others, "Whoa Mark, can't hold your cider?" she taunted.

"HA please, I'm Twice your size, there's no way I'm as drunk as you" he said swaying slightly.

Twilight felt fit to point out that "yes Mark, but you've also drank three times as much" She had a point, Mark realized he may have been more intoxicated then he first thought.

"OK fine whatever, anyway I remembered what I was going to do, stand back bitches!" He received many eye roles and frowns for that last part, but everyone did actually move out of the way.


And there stood a sports car.

He actually had no idea what make it was, he'd just wished for a cool car and apparently the magic filled in the blanks. 'Holy shit I love these powers!'

"whoa! What the heck is that!" gasped Rainbow dash. "Looks pretty awesome!".

"That, my little pony's, is a car. Get in!" he said insolently while jumping over the door, he slipped and fell head first into the gear stick, he now had a black eye "FUCK!", 'that's what I get for being a prick' he supposed.

The ponies ignored his pain with bemused expressions, possibly due to his language and hopped into the back of the car, while Rainbow Dash naturally took shotgun. "Hey dude, could you cut down on the swearing?" she asked.

*Sigh* "alright, sorry bout that". his ego had been hurt somewhat.

Rarity spoke up,"*ahem* well these are certainly nice seats, the 'car' It'self has a unique design and it looks very nice darling.... however, I don't see how this is going to help us get to the boutique"

"Oh ho, you'll see, just give me a sec to start this beast". he stared down towards the ignition, he had no keys. Sitting there for around 3 seconds before he thought to himself 'FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUU- wait, I can just make some'

Problem solved, he created a set of keys, inserted them into the ignition and- They didn't fit.... "what..." 'oh for fucks sake'

"Hey Mark, what up?" Dash glanced incredulously at him from the side, he imagined he was starting to look quite bad around about now.

'OK maybe if I thought about keys that fit this car', *Snap* He tried again and this time it worked, 'Finally', a loud noise signaled the start of the car much to the freight of everypony present. Various gasps rang out and everypony had flinched.

"What in th'hay was that!" asked applejack.

"That's the car, it, like, doesn't use magic and transports people'n stuff around at high speeds" Mark replied. The ponies gave him a few confused glances.

"Wow, that's so fascinating, it's like an automated carriage, and what are 'people'?" Asked Twilight.

'Oh god not this conversation', right now he just wanted to have fun, not explain the concepts of people to Twilight. "I'll tell you later, but now, it's time to.... I don't know go for a drive I guess..."

Calws gripping the steering wheel- 'Wait , I don't know how to drive...' It was true, He'd never owned a car nor got his driving license.

'... lol I don't fucking care' he gave out a small laugh directed at the sky and proceeded to slam his foot down upon the accelerator. The car jerked forward much to the freight and ire of everyone on board, heads flew backwards due to the G-force acting on them, startled, Mark tore his foot from the accelerator. This abrupt change caused the heads of everypony and chimera present to jerk forwards and slam off of either the back of the chair or in Marks case the steering wheel, which elicited a loud BEEP.

Everypony growled Irritably at Mark, "what the heck was that for?" Asked a flustered Twilight.

Mark grimaced "Sorry guys, my bad.... Ok look, chillax, I got this" Unsteadily the car eventually managed to go at a somewhat stable speed of 20 Mph which was well beyond pony sprinting speeds. He couldn't really go any faster in the streets of ponyville.

Everypony present was pretty impressed by the machine, especially Twilight. not so much Rainbow dash however.

"Can't this thing go any faster?"

"No, we're in a crowded area" replied Mark.

Ok now this was awesome, cruising around ponyville in a sports car, with an intoxicated mane six while in possession of god-powers. Mark had to admit, he'd never quite expected his life to turn out so well. He had an idea.

Clicking his claws, he turned on the music player, and set it to play a song:

what is love, baby don't hurt me, don't hurt me, no more.
As the opening verse ended Mark started bobbing his head up and down to the following beat. With a stupid grin on his face he turned up the music and leaned back in his seat.

Pinkie immediately followed Marks example and began bobbing her head up and down with a large smile "common girls, join in".

"Well isn't this a delightful song" said Rarity beginning to bob her head, soon enough they were all doing it due to the catching beat and being intoxicated.

Mark turned around to face them "hey guys isn't this awesome", he saw Twilight throwing up over the side of the car, after her heaving was done she sat back in her chair comfortably.

"yes, I suppose so" she said. Conversation between everypony present reignited.




Lyra was trotting home from work at 2:17 Am, she as exhausted from working the counter way into the night and just wanted to go to sleep. Having worked in a porn shop for what, 8 weeks now,(reference to Tripple X), the Mareborough, she'd seen her fair share of weird things, whether that be interracial griffin gang-bangs, or just the customers themselves, but what she was about to see would take first place.

She stopped and stared as she heard music approaching, it got louder and louder as time went by, the louder it got the more it piped her curiosity. There down the street appeared to be some weird kind of orange automated metal vehicle, it drove past her. There in the front seat was the creature she'd seen yesterday making a scene, he was brandishing a bottle and wearing sunglasses. It and six other mares which tuned out to be Twilight sparkle, Rainbow dash, Pinkie pie, ALL the Elements of harmony also chatting animatedly and bobbing their heads.

She stood there staring until the car disappeared into the distance and the music cease playing. It took her a while to get moving again.





"I gotta admit Mark, you turned out pretty cool in the end" said rainbow dash. He'd given them all more booze while on the trip and was happily drinking a bottle of hard cider. Life was good, he leaned back into the seat and closed his eyes bobbing his head up and down to the beat. nothing could ruin this.


"what's wr-" 'OH JESUS FUCK WHO PUT THAT TOWN HALL THERE!' he screamed in his head. The building was fast approaching and Mark had to react quickly. However in his haste he made somewhat of an error, just before colliding with the building, he slammed his foot down on the accelerator. 'oh goddammit'

*Crash* the front of the car collided with one of the support pillars, breaking though it completely and crumpling the front bumper, then they collided with the building and stopped a few inches inside the wall. Thankfully however no one was seriously injured, but they were all quite shook up and bruised all the same.

Dash face-hooved "nice going idiot..."

Comments ( 44 )

I lost it at the 'What is love' :rainbowlaugh:

lol I don't fucking care' best part:rainbowlaugh:

Hey they all don't completely hate you anymore! Up, nope. You just drove then into the Town Hall.

NO drunken sex? Pity.

Marks not a self insert. Although he does contain certain aspects of my personality (few of them).

:rainbowderp: umm wth just happened? did you drink before writing this

577081 no, it was actually good, the events were just very random

I have a random mind.

Anyway, anything you think could have been done better?

577093 hmmm nope

oh and here's a plot suggestion 'after the wedding discord breaks out' an imagination fight would be cool

That I was actually already planning on doing eventually. Although it'll probably never get done due to me being lazy, this story will be getting Grimdark pretty soon however (There'll likely be gore, blood ,guts ect. perhaps torture scenes (I don't know) and chrysalis).

577133 i like grimdark:pinkiecrazy:

When did you get so good? Now all you need to work on is your punctuation. Also, remember to put a period or something at the end of every spoken sentence, no matter what. Basically, just treat a spoken sentence like it was it's own sentence, even if it's already in another sentence.

I think that was done by iloveportalz0r (script for TamperMonkey or GreaseMonkey).

I was wondering when I was going to see something along these lines. I would have tried my hand at it, but I have no confidence in my writing skills. :yay:

Hey neither do I. But apparently it's turning out at least half decent.

Give it a shot and link it here so I can read it.

Speech in 'XXXXXX' is inner thought.

577133 Grimdark <3<3<3<3 I love grimdark.:pinkiecrazy:


all qurent reliesd chapters read and this was much better then i first expected, the songs so far and the pop culture references have quite fun.
the wedding also means the appearance of Chrysalis which i look farword to, and whit mark slowly losing his morals and becoming more insane per chapter it will be interesting so see what he dose at the weeding and which side he sides whit

Getting Fluttershy drunk. No... just... no.

Author was banned, Bahahahahahaha! Cool story bro.

"Who put that town hall there?!?":rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: BAHAHAHAAAAA

God dammit. You just had to go and get banned. Man, this was the first man turned to discord-thing fic I've read thats actually held my interest. Ain't that a bummer.

Any idea if he's posting it somewhere else, or just not writing anymore?

im liking it so far, but the story describes mark as a different draconequus, so maybe you could try and draw it to use it for cover image... if you can't draw very good, you could make a crude drawing, sent it to me (juan_algo_@hotmail.com), and i will do it for free. Although take in account, that im not that good, but my drawings are at least "decent", i mean, im kind of good, acceptable, out of the "bad" spectrum

god, this guy is a huge idiot, im sure he's going to get in a ton of easilly avoidable troubles trough ll the fic

........ Still waiting for the next chapter...... please give me more.....

....... Upcoming wedding? No. Nonononoonono. Twilight doesn't know about the wedding. Thats a major plot point in the episode! Shining Armor forgot to tell her!

Sorry guys, I'm not writing it any-more. It's just been to long. I did however do another fic where Celestia gets drugged with LSD and trips balls. You can go read that.

I'm absolutely flattered that you would do that for me.

Warning, I'm mildly dyslexic:
Anyway I'll tell you what would have happened next. Mark misses the train (the mane six go to the wedding and mark misses the entire thing) and ends up asking a bunch of farm animals why exactly they are locke up in a cage. Turns out they hate freedom and just want to be confined. Marks all like, "wtf dude". Anyway after a while A couple royal guards come (sent by Celestia after Twilight sent THE LETTER), again marks all like, "FFFUUUUU- I somehow completely forgot about that".

Anyway the guards try to apprehend him and he runs away like a little sissy. His stubby legs and lack of coordination don't do him well so he learns how to teleport and ends up in the middle of the forest. Once there he begins wondering about the limitations and nature of his powers, and if he could somehow create life. He dicks around for a little bit and ends up think how much he misses video games. Which brings him to dead space, his favourite game, "hmm, wonder what necromorph ponies would look like"

And now we're back to where the beginning of the fic was, mark getting chased through the woods, if his attackers get him he'll die. He's being chased by horribly deformed necromorph slashers (who are also ponies infected by the marker), anyway he eventually runs back into town, his perusers throw the town into chaos and every-pony panics. The guards eventually kill the slashers, Marks goes to appologize but they think he turned the ponies into the creatures with his magic (he actually just snapped then into existance so they were always like that), they proceed to attack.

Mark holds his larger draconian arm up (which he secretly took to calling his wanking arm) ad tries to stop them, only to discover that it is fireproof when a unicorn guards hurls a fireball at him. Fight scene ensues, throught which he gets his arse kicked and constantly begs them to stop and that it wasn't his fault (Mark doesn't really fight back but rather runs away). He gets chased through houses and he masters his teleportation. Then he gets pinned down, slightly injured behind an overturned wagon. He goes through some inner dialogue and ponders his powers and comes to a realization. Getting up he screams "FUS RO DAH" and dragon shouts the guards, sending them hurtling backwards. "HAHA take that you motherfuckers", he is overcome with a new sense of power and promtly starts abusing it to fight the guards (which is totally irresponsible).

He points at an attacking guards and scream "HAXXX", guards gets smashed by computer screen.:rainbowlaugh: Another guard attacks and he deflects a fireball with his mind, picks up another with telekinesis and smashes him into a hay-bail. He dispatches the guards in wierd and wonderful ways, then when all is done he's pretty happy with his new powers. Unfortunately he forgot another guard who runs up behind him and stabs him a with a spear, mark screams and turns around. Without really thinking and by some instinct he will the guards away. And the guard simply disintegrates. Mark realizes he'd just murdered a pony.

So now Mark feels pretty numb, he'd have though he'd be feeling grief or horror but instead he just feels numb, as if he can't comprehend what he has done. He looks around, the guard hit with a computer screen is heavily lacerated and bleeding as he is now wearing the screen because it smashed over his head, The glass has cut up his face badly and he isn't moving. Mark realizes he's seriously injured the guards and feels terrible. He notices one is stirring and runs up to the guard who has a pair of broken legs and most likely a smashed ribcage.
Mark tries to help him, he manages to create a green healing aurora (like in Naruto lol) around his had and presses it to the guards legs, unfortunatly it does the job unexpectedly, not only does the guards leg heal wrong and is bend, but it also fused to his chest in a rather grotesque display of body horror.

Mark is absolutely horrified, but then " Halt foul beast" Luna turns up. 'oh so that's where she was during the wedding'. Luna sees mark over the crippled guard, he looks around at the others then back to the enraged luna "I=I....ah, AWWWW-" he groans, knowing this will ultimately end badly. Luna attacks and epic fight scene ensues. Luna dodges all attacks because of her skills and thoroughly wipes the floor with mark, breaking his small arm, and knocking out several teeth and inflicting several spell burns. Mark gets thrown through a house and into a cart after coming out the other side. He's badly injured and Luna is approaching like a predator upon trapped prey. Mark attempts another leap with his powers and positions his unbroken arm so that from his prospective it's bigger then Luna and then flicks his finger. It collides with Luna as if it were from his view point and knocks her careening end over end into a building. marks like "Bitch got pwnd" then he's all "Ow fuck, everything hurts" (My memory is a little fuzzy at this point, it's been a while)

Luna emerges from the rubble and confronts mark, Mark drops an ice-cream truck on top of her out of fucking nowhere. He freaks out and runs away thinking he's killed her, but really she's just unconscious.

Then after Canterlot is saved from the changelings Celestia confronts her sister and learns of the horrific beast with discords powers that injured her. She decides she must put an end to it herself, for her people. And that it's too dangerous to send Twilight.

Anyway Celestia confronts mark in the middle of a field, Mark tries to explain but Celestia has made up her mind, he is simply too dangerous. She traps him in golden chains (which are runic and he can't teleport out of) and calls down a solar flare with precision accuracy, Marks going to die. Celestia ignores his pleas and is extremely remorseful, saying there can be no other way and that she's truly sorry. She closes her eyes as she doesn't want to watch.

Meanwhile mark is freaking out because there's a fucking equivalent to a overpowered hammer of dawn coming towards him, desperate, he does the only thing he can think to do, he grips the entire planet with his telekinesis and begins to turn it. The planet turns and Celestia feels something is amiss. She opens her eye's and looks up, Then she burns. (she'd have opened her mouth in shock before the blast hit)

The beam is only focused for a few seconds before disappearing but it is incredibly destructive. Mark wonders unsure of what he'll find through the smoke before eventually coming to the charred corpse of Celestia. he breaks down and freaks out again thinking he's killed not one but two princesses. She's actually still alive, just horribly burned. Luna come to find her and there's some really emotional bullschitt I'm not going to get into. She gets taken back to cantalot for emergency medical aid.

Meanwhile Mark is depressed and wonders what will become of the world now that the princesses are dead. He goes through some emotional bullschit which again I'm not getting into, and this to his great surprise is confronted by Luna, who screams at him and calls him a monster. He apologises. After running away he figures that if he doesn't raise the sun Luna would have to do it, making her too weak to come and finish him. He does exactly that, theres also Twilights and her friends on a quest to stone him, he grabs the elements of harmony and slaps then in a box, turns the box into a Nyan can and launches it at the moon where it flyies towards emitting the signature tune and rainbow trail. Twilight is seriously pissed off and hurt that mark did what he did and thinks he just deceived her. Everyone hates him.

Meanwhile Celestia is hospitalized and Luna is too weak to do anything, so naturally chrysalis capitalizes on this opportunity and captures Cantalot again, this time for good. She puts the princesses in the dungeon and plans to kill Celestia (she may or may not be tortured despite her condition), Now it's up to mark to save the day once he hears about the news. The rest of the fic would deal with him taken back cantalot and saving the day, how eveypony would be confused and eventually how they come to accept it was all an accident. (I've mused over having Mark beat chrysalis to death with a materialized shovel (which probably won't happen, just imagined it for the crack lol)).

Celestia finially understand and tells Mark at the end of the fic, that his powers are too great and that he should let her seal them until he can use them properly or until he is responsible enough, he looks around at all the ponies affected (who are all hopeful) and says loudly "HA, Fuck no!" and teleports off to parts unknown. The end.

Now I highly recommend you go read my other fic, you'll probably enjoy it.

Oh and I forgot to mention, because I forgot about it. Mark takes down Luna and makes her uncoordinated (and therefore bringing her down to his level) by throwing flaming balls of burning marijuana at her. eventually she gets too high to fight (read: beat the crap out of him) properly allowing mark to actually fight back, at which point he drops the party van on her head.

969807 i can say just one thing: what the actual fuck

hey, it's sounds a lot worse then it actually is, that was just a very poorly described outline of the story (or what would have been), it would have worked out better when i was actually writing it. So did you like what was going to happen or was it too much?

(I was thinking about changing it from a dark fic (like the currant ending) to a light-hearted one like it is up until this point. With mark getting the princesses stoned in order to escape from certain stoning and whatnot. Would you have rather I had done that?)

So you didn't respond and I was wondering what you thought of what the fic would have become?


Oh, sorry. Maybe too violent? yeah, at some point it definetly became more of dark humor, with the real hruting in cartoonish ways i mean

I was considering continuing this, but with a lighter storyline where he instead just fucks everything up and becomes a wanted lizard. He'd go through a couple emotional troubles and shit, still fight Luna (although it would be allot more PG rated and mark would still defeat her by flinging balls of flaming marijuana at her).
Also in this version I'd have him fuck with the nobility and accidentally swear in front of snobish high class ponies. Hilarity would ensue.

Basically I'd do the same as before and pull the plot of of my ass as I go along. What's your opinion on this?

Author (me) got banned 15 weeks ago, do you live under a rock?

that sounds good, specially the part about swearing in front of the nobility, that would be really hilarious!

Hey a while ago you offered to draw the OC (which was pretty humbling), can you show me some of your art purely out of curiosity?

1183789 alright, just check out my deviantart: http://shirokusakabe.deviantart.com/, but don't watch too much the oldest because they don't reflect my ability anymore, which has gotten better by the way, altough im still as lazy as always. If you still wan't to take on my offer, its(I will still need a sketch by you. No matter how bad and crude the sketch is, its still more useful than just a writed description, the thing with the writed description is that what I made of it could be very different from what you had in mind).

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I got banned. I don't know if it's too late or you guys have lost interest. But if you still want to read this crap, I've started rewriting it on my new account. And this time it's going down a much lighter path then the original story-line I posted here: 969807

Apologies for the 20+ week wait.

Link To New Story

oh god YEEEES!!!!

This story didn't age like fine wine but rereading it took me back to my "epic chaos powers are so awesome lel" phase

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