here is some criticism on your story: scootaloo is a dumb character fuck u.

429946
here's some criticism of you're character: your'e dumb and should go die

430016
reported

430023
uh that's uncalled for
I'm going to PM a moderator and complain about your constant abuse now :)

430050
the joke ison u......... my dad is the moderater and owner of fanwords.web. u have made a powerfull enemy today.

430069
uh that's power abuse
I'm going to report you to the EU

430073
yeah, im abusing my power to get rid of a ANTI-CHRISTIAN on this websight. PLESE GO ANTI-CHRISTIAN SCUM!! my dad is gonna destroy yu.

430075
PM sent
enjoy your ban fucker

430077
no please my dad will kill me please unsend the pm seriously dude u have no idea he will be so mad please im sorry please please unsend that pm im begging u dude seriously please

430079
uh you can't unsend a pm retard
do you even use the website?

430080
no idont use it i just like to ban people pls no

430100
sorry knightly already knows about you man
I'm sorry it had to come to this

430103
Is it ok that I screen capped your entire conversation just in case he decides to remove his comments?

430103
PLEASE MAN IM REALLY SORRY ILL DELETE ALL MY COMMENTS AND ULL NEVER HEAR FROM ME AGAIN IM REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY SORRY PLS IM SO SORRY PLEASE DONT KNIGHTY BAN ME IM REALLY SORRY TAW PLEASE DONT

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430113
Thanks man, I owe you one.
430120
what is done cannot be undone

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THIS HOW I FEEL WHEN TAW PM KNIGHTY!!!!!!!!!!!

430123
No problem. Just keep on writing good stories.

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i made a rage comic of u this is u taw ur really mean man please unsend that pm!!!

430145
you're really le rustled

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fuck u taw u peace of shit i fucking hate u asshole fucker fuck u!!!!

430172
your le comic is le funny I le like the le way it le doesn't have a fourth le panel, you le fuckup

430172
430178
WHoa guys.

Lets calm teh fuck down and give each other hugz

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i22.photobucket.com/albums/b333/eleraama/hugz.jpg

Well I didn't expect someone to go into a war in a comment section on Fimfiction.
Sure Poultron can give criticism, but that was just childish.
TAW, don't take it so seriously, remember what bronies are about. Love and Tollerance!

Now if you will excuse me, I will read the story now.

the above exchange = LOL!

430178

Do not feed the extremely obvious troll please.

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Oh you guys.

Um, poultron and taw are joking, right? There's no way that exchange can be serious... Right?

Imma confuzzled

The chapters felt kinda disjointed. I suspect it's a side effect of jumping between sex scenes, but the time skips in between aren't well-defined until later in the chapter by which time it's a little late.

Now that that's out of the way, YOU GAIZ I TOTALLY SHIP TAWXPOULTRON NOW (TawTron?)

Also needs moar fillyfooling (who the fuck invented that word anyway).

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Now, now, brony and pegasister, love and tolerance! I'm sure by virtue of being on this website we know we are mature individuals! We should follow the example of the wonderful community!

Woah TAW. Stop being such a useless sack of crap writing these awful stories.

(USER HAS BEEN BANNED FOR THIS POST)

430573
Brohoof, brony
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430593
(\
le brohoof XDDD

The fuck is going on in this comment section???

I fucking love the conversations between Poultron and TAW, keep it up, guys!

430662

Hmm, I find it rather annoying since somepony (bet you can't guess ) is a total annoying ass troll.

430681

Dude, Poultron is a sitemod, and those two guys know each other too good, to take such a 'dispute' serious.

430684

Oh well okay, from what little I attempted to gather (just really don't care) it seemed like a real argument.

But whatever

430696

"I'm going to PM a moderator and complain about your constant abuse now :)"

There are three mods on this site, Wlah, knighty and Poultron (+- Wanderer D).
Contacting would be likely futile.

"uh that's power abuse
I'm going to report you to the EU"

HOW CAN SOMEBODY TAKE THAT SERIOUS?

430696 Thats why they broke up it was horrible more bans and clopfics than I could even count

Fucking. Scootaloo.
This was fun to read. Can't keep that Scoots down.

>poultron going on troll madness
>knighty auto-banning himself
>random rage comics with no sense at all
WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON HERE?

TAW, I'm sorry for getting into your problems, but you might as well not even respond to Poultrons trolling.

...um. You should put some tags on this story. o_O;

431111
like what
none of the tags are appropriate
what, pray tell, should I tag it with

None of them apply? How is that possible? Granted, I haven't read it yet, but every story has at least one of the tags that can fit. I can't imagine how any story doesn't fit at least one of the tags.

431129 clearly Slice of Life. Truly I think the Sex tag should be a full blown (heh heh, blown) tag. Because most clop doesn't fall under romance.

On to criticism. T'awwwweeeee yeeeeaaaaahhhhh!

431143
Romance? Only in a perverse sense.
Tragedy? Nope.
Sad? I guess if you're massively against teenage sex.
Dark? Some of the scenes take place at night?
Comedy? Nope.
Random? Nope.
Crossover? Not at all.
Adventure? I guess in one sense, but certainly not the one the tag is meant for.
Slice of Life? Nope.
Alternate Universe? Only in the same sense all fanfics are.
Human? Not a one.

But I'm sure you know my story better than myself anyway.

431176
Perverse romance is still romance. Just sayin'.

430120
Pardon me. Why don't we just give up, pardner?

431176

Hey, no need to get defensive. I never claimed to know your own story better than you. It's just that I can see no reason for a story to ever go without a single tag. If no other tag fits, then the Slice-of-Life should be used, I would think. That's my interpretation of the tag, anyway.

I just get irked when an author doesn't use any tags, because in my experience that usually means either the author was too lazy and couldn't be bothered to use tags, it's a complete trollfic, or they're intentionally leaving certain tags (particularly the Dark one) to lure people in with a story that seems nice at first, only to suddenly pull a 180 midway through and turn dark and gruesome or something. (Which is really just another kind of trollfic in my book.)

I wasn't nitpicking to be a pain, I'm just innately wary of tagless fics, and I know I'm not the only one. And since I know you've done good stories in the past, and there's a fair chance this is another of them, I wouldn't want it to be avoided by others like myself just because of a lack of tags. I can read it now, since you've assured me in your post just now that it isn't a darkfic or anything, but not everyone is going to read the comments. Had I not already been tracking you and known you've done stories in the past that I enjoyed, I wouldn't have even taken a second glance at this story, much less commented on it. I can only assume there would be at least a few others that would feel the same way.