After Screwball pranks Dan one too many times, he promises vengeance on the spawn of Discord...No matter how far he takes it
Dan has vowed revenge on Discord's daughter, Screwball, after she gets on the single nerve he has left with her cruel practical joke. But just how far will he go for revenge on a spirit of pure Chaos?
yep i think it works this way, after i read the part you planned to change, it somehow feels right to have Spike being kind of the killjoy for Dan.
And Shhhhh,,,,shhhhh, yep love that part too.
Hilarious as always. You write screwball perfectly.
number 207 on my read later list
Well i don´t like Discord being something like Fluttershys Coltfriend, i don´t rememberif you did that or not, but i like Discord and i like Discord even more.
By the way, do you know a nice Story with Screwball? I prefer yours the way it is right know and don´t want you to change the style, but i want a nice Screwball story with a motherly Fluttershy right now, even if i normally don´t want that pairing. It is not the worst, i just don´t like some of the obvious pairings, like Fluttershy and Discord. It is not that bad so don´t mind it.
This Chapter is good, i somehow want to laugh at the same time then Chrysalis, i have to thank my imagination for that but maybe it is really funny
Well actually i am somehow sure it is, i just don´t laugh that easy.
Screwball´s rival = Pinkie Pie....of COURSE, why don´t i think of that one This could really work even with her Chaos Power
Well good work, i am no one for a that clever comment right now but i think i have still written enough.
4708782 Although I support fluttercord, that shipping is not in this story. They're just friends here.
4708844 I don´t know why, i don´t hate it and to be honest i start to be ok with it, so i can say i half-like it right now. I really like Discord like i said, but i can´t image him with Fluttershy somehow, hmmm yeah i think ijust have to accustom with this pairing a bit more.
Sometimes i start to think i just don´t liked it, because she was her only friend and yeah ,,oh first friend i think i have to marry you!" I have it worse with Shining and Cadance, but that depens more on the one who writing the storys. Sometimes the people make it to write the ponys like the only thing they knew and even with all their intelligence they only want sex and more children. It is a bit weird and it doesn´t helped, that in one of the first fanfics i read, the only destiny Applejack had was to get more then 5 children in row (in order) and probably continue with it.
I think it really depens on how they write it.
PS: Now i like Cadance and Shining, it was only that i never saw this episode because the time i wanted to see it i don´t find the episode, and all the fanstuff i saw wasn´t the best i think. And if Cadance the princess of love doesn´t mean to be actually the princess of sexuallity like in some normal (not Clopfic) then i like them too since last time.
Yeah i hope i could describe it good enough. soooo you now a good Screwball fanfic not Comedy? I prefer yours at the moment, but i want one with different tags too.
I think i maybe forgot something, but well keep up the good work i look after your other storys too.
4709158 If you want to read other Screwball fics, check out the Screwball groups this story belongs to. A lot of them depict Screwball quite differently than what I do. I have yet to see a truly bad fic with Screwball in it. Although, most of those stories tend to be in the sad category.
Won't lie, normally I don't like any of the fics that have Dan in Equestria, but you sir have managed to grasp my interest.
4710647 well thank you, i had seen that you have a few more about Screwball too, maybe i look after them first, it seems that they can´t be really bad, i like how you write the storys.
4712037 glad you like my style.
he will turn screwball into a stress ball
I would actually very much like to see an emo Flufflepuff.