Wanted: Pipsqueak The Pirate, Dead or Alive

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rarerarity

rarerarity #1 · May 31st, 2014 · · · Day 1: The Flyer ·

Raising a hoof to knock on the polished oak doors, Silver Spoon fished out the letter she had found in the mailbox."Who's there?" Her father's deep voice made their way out of the closed doors."It's me, papa! I have something to discuss with you."

Try starting a new line every time someone speaks. I know sometimes even I miss out that hint, but it makes the story look neater.

The pony, now that se had a good look

*She

Apart from that, I LOVE IT!!!! Seriously, there is nothing bad to say about it so far. The description is brilliant, the storyline so far is fantastic! I really can't wait for the update!

SageBrony07

SageBrony07 #2 · May 31st, 2014 · · · Day 1: The Flyer ·

This seems like an interesting story. I will give a more through evaluation and review when more chapters are published.

LtMajorDude

LtMajorDude #3 · May 31st, 2014 · · · Day 1: The Flyer ·

Interesting...
Can't wait for more!

Relevant Heavy Metal

Relevant Heavy Metal #4 · May 31st, 2014 · · · Day 1: The Flyer ·

Running Wild - Ballad Of William Kidd

OC Beats

OC Beats #5 · Jun 4th, 2014 · 1 · · Day 1: The Flyer ·

WOW! I like it so far! You keep this up and keep it interesting and unexpected, and it will go in my favorites.... no, you know what? I'm gonna gonna favor it now! It's just that damn good. I LOVE IT!!!!!!

LtMajorDude