Melody is a singer from the Crystal Empire. Wolf Spider is a changeling that took part in the botched invasion of Equestria. Under normal circumstances, these two should never have met, but their circumstances are anything but normal. This is their story, one of love, loss, and more than a little bit of laughter.
THIS IS MY FIRST ATTEMPT AT WRITING ANYTHING THAT ISN'T DARK. PLEASE GIVE ME ALL THE CRITICISMS THAT YOU FEEL ARE NECESSARY
Proofread by: damandust11
Rated Teen, just in case. Will update ratings as necessary.
Chapters (4)
No comments?!
This story has a decent start. I don't write so don't expect anything critical.
The Crystal Empire seemed like a good setting for an innocent introduction.
Please continue!!
4217483 Thank you, I'm glad you like it. I'll try to post more chapters soon.
Can't wait for the next chapter, this is a good story.
Good start
A little bit to fast, but still a lovely story
A lovely story that doesn't shove romance right in your face from the beggininng.... I will follow this.
Itz a good story, yes
looking forward to the next chapter
Um.......... how do we know that she doesn't know?
..... How do we know that she's feeling this way?
Well, clearly!
Again, how do we - the audience - know how this? What is there to show for these feelings? How am I supposed to picture these scenes?
..................... You know the drill................ My brain hurts............... I'll just keep reading and hope it gets better.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaand the same problems progress from the last chapter, so I'd rather not repeat myself. But here it is anyway: Thoughts; Feelings; Memories; Exposition; - Please, show, don't tell.
This would have been interesting if it was part of the conversation.
They've only known each other for that day, what's with all the blushing? And when did Wolf get his own room?
On the subject of rewrites, I would also recommend overlooking the previous chapters, as my problems with this story come back to haunt me.
5294332 Thank you for your input, I will certainly try to address the issues, and if you have the free time, would you mind shooting me a PM? As you can see, I desperately need an editor...
5296969 A PM, what's that?
5297191 Private Message
does the comment below me have no idea how stories work?