"Leave now, Twilight Sparkle! Leave and never return! For I do not want to see you ever again."
Twilight Sparkle was a new princess, learning all there was to be about being Royal. After a big mistake she did, Twilight gets banished from Canterlot and Ponyville. On her journey, could she find something more valuable than Royal Life?
This story (keyword) was written for the Exiled Twilight Contest. I never got to finish in time for the dead line. :)
Disclaimer: I do not own the cover image!!
Rated Teen for minor language and some gore.
Attention! This story is now up for grabs. If you wanna keep this story going, please PM me! More about this is in my blogs and account. Thank you!
Chapters (6)
That's the Element of loyalty for ya....Always there for her friends in their time of need.
hmm..interesting beginning. Points out something strange occurring in Canerlot with the headaches and Celestia's piss poor attitude. By the lack of a Spike tag I have to assume there will be a reason he does not go with Twilight in this banishment. This story has me curious based on the character and description tags. Though she may not be a main part of it, any story with the romance and Trixie tag deserves a chance from me, and this beginning chapter opens up alot of interesting possibilities. Looking forward to more!
This is interesting. I expect to see an explanation for Celestia's out of character behavior... eventually. And the cast setup as seen by the tags intrigues me.
Hello. I'm in the exiled contest too. I'm just wondering. What category are you going for in the contest?
Not much to say on this, since nothing much happens. Still, short but quick chapters are good too.
Thank you all for your comments!
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I did not tag Spike because he's only going to be in Ch. 1 and the end chapter.
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Yeah, you won't be getting one for a while....
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um... I haven't really decided yet... To tell you the truth, I didn't know there was categories...
Ok, so Twilight and Dash got their deservedly 2k chapter, AJ managed to get a little over 600 words, more than she prolly deserved. Now if Trixie is gonna be brought up next, I can only assume a pony of such magnitude and amazing powers will get somewhere around 5-10 thousand words. Anything less would assuredly be an insult to her.
Since when Celestia is a neurotic bitch?
There`s author`s liberty and there`s just plain hackish. This one? Firmly in the second category. Have yourself a well-deserved thumbs down.
As far as I'm concerned, you did just fine with Trixie's personality. So it's all good there.
There's only one way that you messed up with her. And that is that she's a unicorn, like Twilight once was, not a pegasus. Other than that minor tribe-flub, you did just fine with her.
I see what you mean by the contest rules. I only heard about the contest at the beginning of March, but I still like stories that are related to it. This story just so happens to be one of them.
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good luck with that! I can't even write more than 2,000 words in one chapter!! But thanks for the comment!
I'll make sure to answer that question! 
don't you worry!
thank you so much for pointing that out! I don't know why I wrote that she was a pegasus... 
I fixed it!
I'm glad you're enjoying my story so far!
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It's kinda hard to explain until later chapters....
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Thanks!
4175885 You're quite welcome, hun! I generally like to help out wherever and whenever I can.
As for not knowing why, I've done that, too. In one of my older (still unfinished) fics (can't remember some of it, but........), one of the main characters was a centaur OC of mine that I wound up making into a totally different species (and trust me, the Muse that was he was not what you call very happy with me about that!). I wrote him that way for about 3 or 4 chapters before he finally brought that l'il flub to my attention, which, at that point, had me going back and re-writing him in his proper character species.
Neither of us could figure out why I did that, either, but, from his point of view, all that mattered to him was getting him back to what he was supposed to be. And that mattered to me, too, as I tend to stress over something like that til I get it right. Fortunately for me, all of my various Muses are pretty understanding about things when I occasionally flub things up.
Whether story or character-wise.
Although my Raphael of the TMNT Muse...not so much at times.
And believe me, you do not want a sai-wielding Mutant Turtle (who also coincidently just happens to be a highly-trained ninja!) after you...especially if he's in a bad mood for some reason or other.
hmm, they were oddly civil towards Trixie.
It was really pleasant.
You probably don't need to clarify that the dream scene is a dream. It's fairly clear as is.
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It is very kind of you to help me since I'm not a very talented writer...I hope to get better with each story.
you are very helpful
Well thank you.
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Yeah...i was trying to set the tone that they were all so sad about leaving Ponyville they really didn't want to have a fight with Trixie...
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I thought it would clear up saying it was...but maybe it would make it more mysterious....Thanks
When does Twilight start being badass? Where did you get the cover image?
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The hint that she ISN'T in her right mind was pretty obvious...
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No. You don`t get the easy excuse. TOO hamfisted. Even the dullest of the dull ponies would have had guessed something`s really wrong with Celestia, if she suddenly started behaving this way. Given that ponies are all too well aware of changelings now, acting like this would`ve very likely ended up with every single unicorn in the court throwing stunning spells at her - because it would be rather obvious it`s a changeling trying to pass itself as Celestia and fluffing it up badly.
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Good questions!!! You have to forgive me for my dragging out parts thing that i have sometimes. Please be patient! I hope to write her 'badass' part in maybe around 2-4 chapters...As you can see, I don't like writing huge chapters. :P Also, I got it off of Google Images...As I state, I don't own the image and I don't know who the author was.
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Um...Maybe?? Maybe not... Ya never know ^^
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You do have a point, and really I guess I missed that in writing...I'll try to add a chapter that might make a better understanding of why Celestia did what she did. Please, again, be patient! This will be, probably the longest fanfic I've ever written.
~ Big news! I just noticed I got featured in the Badass Twilight = Total Domination AND EPIC!! Thanks everypony for your support!! I was actually going to put this fanfic in the BT = TD Exile folder when I was finished, but it looks like somepony added it for me....so thanks! You are all awesome!! Thanks a whole bunch for your kind/harsh words that keep me writing (hopefully) better~
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I`m afraid that just won`t cut it. The presented scene is entirely out of character for Celestia - there`s simply no way to justify it, regardless of what have had transpired before.
Enjoy the exile fics and this seems to be an interesting real interesting read.
So outta character... *Shudders*
5219784 Thank you! I'm trying to get the next chapter out but I've hit writer's block. I wanna get this out before I go on my leave....
5229185 Yeah...Maybe if I wanna stick with this Celestia I either have to write why (which is going to be explained the upcoming chapter hopefully) and/or add the Alt. Universe tag into this....
5210249 As stated to discordeddiscord, I'm trying to clerify everything. Maybe it'll help adding the Alt. Universe tag. Besides, I hope everything gets cleared up after adding the chapter...after I get out of writer's block.
~ Thanks everyone for your patience! It means so much that you all have been enjoying this story. The next chapter is about 40% done, but, as I stated before, I hit writer's block. I hope to get this chapter out before I take my leave. Again, thank you all for your support! It means so much! /)
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I don`t think you grasped the point made earlier. I`m not questioning the possibility of Celestia acting so grossly out of character - I`m questioning her ability to get away with it. Yes, it`s entirely possible that she would behave in unusual manner for some reason, but there is no way everypony else would just stand and accept it - not with changeling scare so fresh on everyone`s mind. Even if Celestia were proven to be Celestia, that would give her enough of a pause to go "Ookay, I just got jumped by everypony because they thought there`s no way I could possibly say that. Probably that was too rash, I gotta rethink things, take more cautious approach."
6922249 Ooooh ok! I understand! Alright yeah! That might help actually with the story line. Thanks so much for comment and I hope to clerify things in the next chapter. :P Thank you for your patience!!
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...I meant in first chapter. The rest of chapters just shouldn`t have had happened, as the reaction in first should`ve been quite different. You can`t clarify the mistake that already exists. Any hope of salvaging this is a rewrite of first chapter and altering of consequent ones to meet the changes made in first.
6922493 Oh ok! I'll see what I can do to fix it then...but I don't wanna take a full rewrite and take from the story itself. I'll try my best to clerify everything. :) Thanks
Nnope.
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Well this is an Exiled fanfiction, so course they will be out of character.
Why must everything on the planet be out to torture Twilight for...
Okay 2 theory's 1 something was influencing them 2 Celestia severely overreacted.
Also why does Spike not seem too bothered by this?