When a single, pointless fight shatters the love of a lifetime, the story we all thought we knew changes in ways that nopony could have expected.
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Well, sixteen has been age of consent for centuries in a number of countries and often been the age when one was considered an adult, so I'm not complaining.
Magnificent. I applaud you! I can't wait for the next chapter to see where this will lead!
Consider me enthralled by this story.
I see no issue with this, since the show makes it more than a little difficult to be sure that the age gap is all that large. My personal headcanon has always put it at 5 year gap because that's the gap between me and my youngest sibling, and I can sort of conceptualize it.
That said, my impression of the situation based on subjective tone and the like is that you're so concerned about the issue that you cranked up Twilight's maturity and composure far too much. Her incredibly advanced intellect aside, one could be forgiven for thinking that in this chapter, Twilight and Cadance are the same age. I think you overcompensated in anticipation of someone trolling you with "OMG, statutory rape, sicko pedo", and if you were to ever revise this chapter, it'd be nice to see her apparent age dialed down to that of a socially-awkward book-smart 16-year-old instead of someone whose emotional state is so stable and refined (which is not characteristic of teens) that she treats the beginning of a relationship with the collected maturity of an adult.
Oh My Gosh! That sensual scene was beautiful! I only wish that it hadn't cut off so early, but what can you do, the buildup and the emotions were just so engrossing that I could feel my own heart move along and soar with them.
Bravo! Bravo!
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I can see where you're coming from, and I agree to some degree, but remember that she has been getting personal tutoring, from the Princess of Love no less, in the ways of society and inter-personal relationships. Even with that, she does act a bit more mature about a very non-standard relationship than I'd expect, but with that in mind, it's not nearly as out of character as it would be for the early socially-inept Twilight of the early show.
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Don't worry, there's more to come!
Also, the scene was brought short there because, well... otherwise, It'd have been a whole nother chapter.
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You say that like I'd view it as a bad thing.
Certainly if you keep up like this I have no dobt I'll soon be adding this to the High Quality Mature Fiction Group.
Okay Twilight, you just hopped on a bull named 'the Goddess of Love.' Let's see how well you can ride it(in the rodeo sense, though I suppose also euphemistically
Side note: name for pervy Greek hero: Euphemisticles)
It sounds an awful lot like Cadance is trying to make excuses to sleep with other ponies while pursuing a relationship with Twilight. Maybe I'm just being paranoid, but I really hope that isn't the case. It's one thing to say you aren't ready for a serious relationship yet because of something that happened in your past, however it's a totally different thing to sit there and say "I love you, and I know you love me, but do you mind if I go sleep with that random stallion over there?"
I know, I know, I'm jumping to conclusions, but as a procrastinator myself I know it's never a good sign when someone starts acting contrite and making excuses for future actions; it's usually the first step of someone building a case of "well, they knew what they were getting into," which I can say without reservation is total bullshit. Twilight could very, very easily be hurt here, and I don't want to see that happen.
3963897 I am going to say somthing that will get me downvoted to eterity... Less sex please.
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3963921 I totally agree, it does sound like she is trying to keep her sex life open. Unfortunately nothing in that discussion explicitly said that, so Twilight may not realize that. I can totally see her walking in on Cadence and some other pony and feeling horribly betrayed.
Where is my Shining Armor or for that matter, Chrysalis? I mean sure she altered time, but with that small altercation, the same distance of time is still the day she plans to INVADE Canterlot.
3964134 Chrysalis went way back in time - 12 years, in fact. We haven't even gotten back to the start of the actual series. Want to know what happened to her?
Want to know what ended up happening to Shining after Celly sent him north?
Read and find out.
Stories find a way. Stories want to be. Stories use others to perpetuate themselves, like a better class of parasite. Anybody who fits a certain set of characteristics may find themselves absorbed into a story and forced to act in whatever role is given to them, even if it ends with them being devoured by a Changeling or marrying a Princess.
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Yup. Coming up next, actually.
Amen to that!
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I... I kinda came to the same conclusion...
Also, is Cadance immortal in this story? There is a bit of debate about that in other stories...
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More like read further and never see them again. As the story and verse-wise demanded, SA be removed to keep Cadence from an emotional lash.
If anything, SA will become the Cure/Energy source of affection to Chrysalis as opposed to being a threat, YET, the story summary states that history wants to fix itself, so I have a feeling returning to normality will cause some HEAVY degree of awkwardness.
Very, very sweet. And despite what others may say, I think Twilight's mature enough for this relationship. At least, she acts mature enough for it.
Can't wait to see what (or rather, who) comes next!
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As I understand Twilight became Celestia's student before Chrysalis arrived. So the destiny-binding event of the bearers we know (the first Sonic Rainboom) has already happened.
I think that by nearly any reasonable interpretation of Twilight and Cadence's ages, Twilight falls pretty comfortably within the 'half your age plus seven' rule for Cadence, so the age gap shouldn't be much of a problem.
This is goddamned adorable. You win. All the favorites, all the thumbs up. And so fresh.
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Actually, that metric keeps the ages extremely close at that age. For that metric to work, Cadance could be at most 18-19 since Twilight is 16 (18/2+7=16).
3965569 Oh hey, you're right. I think I derped the math and thought seven was a smaller number...
Excellent chapter, as always.
I can totally see bad things happening when Shining Armor finds out about all this. I mean, he was sent off to a forsaken spit of land for having a lovers spat. Shiney isn't stupid. I'm sure he at least suspects Celestia of having a hoof in those orders. He could already feel some resentment to the Crown for that. Finding out about this relationship will just be another hard blow from 'The Mare'. He may feel that, like his sister, his life has been fucked hard by the Crown(Oh ho ho ho! Somebody stop me!...please? )
I expect a reckoning at some point involving Shiney.
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Is it Nightmare Moon time? Please say yes!
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Hoozah! Someone else missing Spike!
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I'm kinda thinking she wants Twilight to join in on her "activities" so to speak. She did mention she was going to introduce Twilight to her lifestyle...
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Will we be seeing Twilight's parents' reaction to this? We at least have to see Celestia's!
Thanks for the update, keep up the good work.
Sooooo, in the end, Twilight will get together with Cadance, and their power of love will end up defeating Chrysalis without the assist of Twilight's brother?
That's it, isn't it!? Holy crap, I'm physic!
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Well, if the original players have been swapped around it will go like this. Twilight and Cadance will have a wedding. Chrysalis will replace Cadance and enthrall Twilight. Shining Armor gets to be the one acting all pissed off about the wedding this time around and eventually unmasks Chrysalis.
That set up will be a blast to read too. I'm curious if it will be Twilight maintaining a city wide shield this time or will Shiney still do it?
3970212 You can't talk to me like that. I'm psychic. I. KNOW. ALL.
Ask me anything.
the day after tomorrow is tomorrow
it's a paradox!
3971500 Okay, Balrog Luna.
Great, now we need a Misery Celestia.
(seriously, I love your Icon.)
3972061 hmm now that would be interesting....
3972066 Since Clearly, Twilight is Quote and Dash is Curly Brace.
Of course, that would make Chrysalis the mad doctor....
3972106 and fluttershy can be tokoro ^^ .....
also no aj can be curly , sue suits rd more......
I am really enjoying this story. I like the way you have been characterizing Cadance/Cadence. However, I hope you don't drag out her "feelings for Shiny" too much more. I mean it has been what... six years since then? At least 4 years. Even though Cadence is the Princess of Love, and more sensitive to it. I feel her still carrying such a torch for what has been little more than an 'intense' high school romance this long after it ended, to be rather... pathetic for her.
You did make a point of showing us both Cadence and Shining in school uniforms when Chrysalis intervened after all.
Regardless, Twilight is awesome in your story, and I look forward to future chapters. I hope this one hurdle, known as Shining Armor, won't be the only or main part of their romance though. There really is so much more to it than that already, even as conflict potential if you are going for a rather dramatic romance.
I look forward to seeing this Twilight going to Ponyville, especially when Rarity finds out Twi is on good terms with Fancy and Fleur, had a lunch date with Sapphire Shores, and who knows what else the purple unicorn will get up to before the series actually starts. Especially with Cadence .
I have high hopes for this story. I have really wanted some Twidance, but most of it is more friendshiping, or sisterly relationship like in canon, but expanded. For the most part, this story is doing a good job of living up to those hopes so far.
I was suggested to this story by someone who said that once Luna comes back, She and Shining should have a thing. I approve
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I'd love to, really. But it doesn't seem possible at the moment. Please to be fixing quickly, yes?
More? I... I was looking forward to another chapter and it wasn't there!
3977348 New chapter tomorrow.
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
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Even lower than that. Despite how controversial it sounds, 13 has been the age of consent in dozens of countries for longer than two millennium.
3985834 I wouldn't exactly call it an age of consent because women didn't have the same rights they do now and men didn't think a woman needed to consent to sex. The past was pretty shitty to women is general.
You know what I really have a problem with here?
Their respective ages and Twilight's age of consent. Oh and the age gap.
3999243 Except havent you noticed in the show ther are more mares than stallions and the way everything seems set up Equestra looks to be a matrical socity meaning that females are the ones that are in charge over males
It's not the ages that bother me, it's their previous relationship. Getting together with your foalsitter just feels wrong, almost like incest. I kept reading after I figured out what the ship would be to see if you could sell me on it (it has happened) but unfortunately you did not. Sorry, but I'll stop reading here.
I am liking this very much, I am hooked.
Like Cadance said, the age gap nonsense is just a lot of hooey. 150 years ago, the average age for a girl to get hitched was 16; the average male would be in his late 20's. the whole concept of statutory rape didn't appear until the 1900's. Twilight is old enough to consent, and that should be the end of it.
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Feelings...how do they work?
Side stories?
Side stories?
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