When a single, pointless fight shatters the love of a lifetime, the story we all thought we knew changes in ways that nopony could have expected.
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Not much to say, still excellent.
Ehhhh.. 'open relationships' not my cup of tea, especially not in a story which is supposed to explore the romance between two characters, ah well c'est la vie. Kind of strange she is still masquerading as Love Beat and not herself to the main six as well when I'm pretty sure they've had lessons on honesty thus far.
hum... before I keep reading.... can I ask one VERY IMPORTANT question?
seeing as how the previous chapter was at the "Return of Nightmare Moon" which officially happens on "Summer Sun Celebration" which is the first day of summer.... wouldn't 3 months later be somewhere in Fall and as such, Winter Wrap-Up is WAY the buck away still (being on first day of spring)
I dislike such massive errors with a passion....
More adorably, lovey stuff! Huzzah!
This Twilight is a lot more evenly balanced than canon Twilight. Makes for a good contrast.
4011608 First, we have NO Idea when the "Summer Sun Celebration" actually takes place. No one ever specifies that its the first day of summer, only that its supposedly the "Longest Day" of the year, which would actually make it much more likely to be the Summer Solstice. However, we have absolutely no clue as to the actual date because we've got no idea how long seasons are in MLP Verse, nor how long the sun-cycle works given that its controlled, supposedly, by Celestia.
Second: The series' dating and sequence of events things are incredibly difficult to get a handle on sometimes.
Fourth: The Amount of time that's really passed isn't terribly relevant to the story.
Third: I've edited it to "Months Later" in order to prevent confusion.
Thank you for your time.
It's kind of funny to see these things that were big issues in the show get resolved almost before they start thanks to Twi's relationship savvy. It makes me wonder how Ticket Master must have gone since Twilight only receiving one ticket, her friends would naturally assume she'd bring Cadance. I find it amusing to think it'd get resolved before it had the chance to start something major like.
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Mmm, It is fun. Of course... That doesn't mean this won't have consequences of their own.
Mwa.
Ha.
Haaaaa.
I like where this is going. I also like any scene that puts Cadance and Fluttershy together. So cute!
I wonder how cadenced missed out on the spa for so long? events with Zecora either haven't happened yet or really went different from the show. I'm hoping for the former as seeing what poison joke does to her would be interesting.
Also I'm starting to wonder of Hoity hasn't got himself in a cycle of sorts. While he was likely always a jerk all the blows to the head can't be doing him any good. It's likely scrambling his brains. He may not be getting a shot to the head every day. But well being knocked cold like that is bound to do some damage even if it only happens every few years or so. There's a reason armature boxers wear headgear after all.
... And now my brain has gone and turned hoity into Glass Joe. This is why I wouldn't watch Lets Plays of Punch Out and chase it with Fim fics it gives me weird trains of thought.
Anyhow and interesting chapter. I like how Cadance and Dance have a running rivalry going. It just fits so well given Dash's ego issues. Say what you will about Mare Do Well Dash kinda needed that ego break, granted the moral of that episode could have been handled better. ANYWAY. I also really enjoyed the way that Pinkie acted in character but not so wacky that she grates the nerves.
I see what you did there.
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ok, I fucked up with the "Longest day" meaning first day of Summer....
HOWEVER, we know how long seasons are in the MLP-verse, I present to you my proof:
"Three months of Winter coolness and awesome holidays"
which means winter lasts 3 months and the same can be extrapolated for the remaining 3 seasons for 12 months.... BUT even if it ain't the case.... you can still expect at least 5 months to get from summer to spring
Second: Yeah, the series dating and events was hard in season 1 since they had planned to make the show have no chronological link whatsoever except for the premiere and finale, but from Season 3 onwards, episodes are pretty much chronological
Fourth: Yeah, not terribly relevant except for those like me who have troubles with faked times
Third: Thanks for that, still not perfect but it'll make due.
So, it sounds like Cadence has had sex with a couple of the Mane Six, but Twilight doesn't want to, that's so disappointing. I hope Cadence and Twi can work out their issues, they seem so close to being a fantastic couple. It is a bit strange though, I kinda got the impression that they were a couple but now it seems like they aren't quite a couple yet, bit confusing.
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Relationships can be confusing things as they evolve and change.
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I'm more confused as to the character changes, initially Cadence was scared to bed Twilight but in this chapter she is happily 'being the town bicycle', and when Twilight was at the party Cadence wanted to shield her from the others to claim her as her own even though now she is more then happy to have everyone use Twilight.
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The Town Bicycle crack was Dash insulting her in a challenging and, to her, funny way.
Also - Cadence's feelings on how she and Twilight's relationship are changing rapidly, as she's trying to sort out her own heart on things.
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That... doesn't really clarify anything... well thank you for replying anyhow.
Fun chapter. Lots of cute stuff going on.
Glad that Cadence realizes that she's not being fair to Twilight with this whole kinda sorta relationship thing going on. Time to start making some choices and taking some chances.
Actually, the first give away should have been the rope burn.
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That's...a good question. I would have thought Rarity would have shown it to her a long time ago.
That scene with Fluttershy made her feel like a shut in...which she is not. Whenever she's been out and about in town in the show she hasn't acted uncomfortable. By the very nature of her work she is almost always outside. It's not being around other ponies that makes her freak out. It's when a large amount of attention is zeroed in on her that she starts to freak. Which is different from hiding yourself away from the world.
I'm not really sure what to think about Hoity Toity. In the one episode we saw him he wasn't really a bad pony. He made crude comments on Rarity's dresses, but those were some bad dresses. He then made very positive comments on Rarity's good dresses at the end of the episode. Not really sure why he's such a douche now. Unless Chrysalis' time shenanigans changed him somehow. If that's the case then that is some hardcore Butterfly Effect going on.
Oh, have we missed Griffon The Brush Off? Cadence's reaction to Gilda would have been fun to see.
Is Twilight getting any letters from Shining Armor at this point? Is he still in training? Is Celestia taking the 'Army Of One' motto to an extreme conclusion?
4014489 Shining Armor IS Captain Equestria! :p
Anyhow Is the whole point of the butterfly effect that a slight change can have implications that reach far further then expected? as for Hoity though, Between the Gala episode and Sweet and Elite plus knowing how bad the upper crust of real world nations can be it's far more likely for the majority of the nobility to be at best jerks then more akin to Fancy Pants and Sapphire Shores.
As for Fluttershy, I didn't think she came off as a shut in. More shy the normal maybe but not a shut in. After all she likely wasn't expecting visitors and Cadance's thoughts hint at her trying to prompt her out of her comfort zone fairly often even in a gentile manor. so while She'd like Love beat she might be a bit guarded around her because of that.
I hope we didn't miss That or Bridle Gossip. Though Boast Busters should be interesting too given that Twilight knows Trixie somewhat and would be even less include to show her up but far less likely to flee the seen as well. Also I wonder what Cadance thought of Applejack's bet with Big Mac? I mean I'm shocked the show got that line on the air, Cadance however may have helped AJ out just to see if Mac Really would go out in public like that.
I am literally clutching my ass cheeks in rabid anticipation of 'A Canterlot Wedding' and "Magical Mystery Cure'. I can't wait for more of this story! Please keep up the good work!
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Or he'll be Iron Stallion. Equipped with the latest in magitech personal body armor. Able to take on three Nightmare Moon class opponents before needing a reacharge.
As for Fluttershy:
Thing is when Fluttershy's friends come over to her house she's never talked to them through a crack in the door unless something was going on(like hiding a pet phoenix, faking sickness to not participate in cyclone day, or avoiding a dragon migration).
I mean she has to know Cadence pretty well by now. She's inviting her to the spa for one thing. Plus Cadence has been involved with all the crazy adventures shown in the show up till now.
Fluttershy just seemed to act rather odd...
I agree that the upper crust are usually jerks. I was just pointing out that what was originally shown of Hoity was that he wasn't a bad pony or even a jerk. We can assume that the time spell did in fact change him but I wouldn't mind some reinforcement of this fact.
This story gets more and more disorientating because the character called Twilight Sparkle seems less and less like her...
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Well, with no Shiny and constant attention and lessons from Cadey, Fancy and Fleur, would you honestly expect her to turn out exactly the same?
4015376 Somewhere in the same zipcode, at least. This version just doesn't feel... Twilight-ish. She seems too normal to be the fundamentally same character to whom some social graces and a long-term romantic relationship have been added.
4014684 ... Ah but could he handle Kefka Plazzio? Sorry whenever I hear 'Magitech my mind jumps to Final Fantasy Six, my fave RPG.
She's also not above screaming through her door either if Nightmare Night and Putting her hoof down are any indecation. Though the latter actually GIVES her a good reason to be a shut it. Good lord the ponyville market place is full of jerks. And like I said before. While she likes Cadance and is friends with her Cadance seems to be constantly trying to nudge her out of her comfort zone. it likely doesn't upset her enough to make her avoid her, However it could make her a bit more unsure of her then her other friends even if she's still up for going to the spa with her.
You've got me with Hoity though. he may not be as bad as the majority of the nobility is portrayed. However he does seem to have a bit of an issue with tact.
That was a great chapter I love how you have been referencing the episodes So I guess Cadence has had Pinkie, and if I understand the message at the end there she had some fun with Applejack Rainbow still hasn't taken the leap yet obviously I also am sure Rarity will never be a partner to Cadence until after the Blueblood incident if any time at all IWANT MOAR SIOON! If that is alright with you
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it's the same character, and markedly so, but the events that preceded the series have added aspects to her that aren't there originally. Honestly, I think she's a more dynamic and interesting character because of that. She's not just the shy booky recluse anymore, there's now been more to her than that for longer, but that doesn't change her need for structure, scheduling and just curling up with a good book.
I will admit that I wouldn't mind a bit more of Twilight pulling Cady into a nice quiet reading session to balance out Cadance's pulling Twi into PRINCESSDOM, though.
4016329 Well for me, that's the issue: the things added have sort of "de-Twilight"-ed Twilight Sparkle for me. She doesn't approach the new things like Twilight Sparkle, but like any other girl (7 years older than she is, which is another issue for me) does. There are nods to her being bookish and having the same qualities as before, but they're all just that: nods, the author telling us that this is Twilight Sparkle but not really showing it.
Another issue that's still sort of poking at the back of my brain is that, except for the relationship stuff, there's no indication of why Shining Armor being out of the picture caused such a dramatic change to the relationship between Cadence and Twilight. The implication is that if the two were still together, Cadence wouldn't make any effort to coax Twilight out of her shell and learn how to move in polite society and have fun outside of her library. Well, why not? This question isn't ever really answered, and for me feeds into the issue of an OOC-feeling Twilight.
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For me, that's a bigger problem with the original cadence than with how Twi is in here, but beyond that, I understand where you're coming from.
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The answer is in the series, Twilght makes no mention of a relationship with Cadence outside her being her foalsitter when she was very young.
Instead, in this instance, she glues herself to Twilight as a bastion of stability in her world turned upside down, and thus has much more intense, close interactions with her over the course of many, many years.
Who our friends are, and what we do with them, is a massive impact on who we are as people, especially when we're very young. Previously, Twilight only really 'hung out' with her brother, who was a career driven guy and unlikely to enjoy girl-centric pursuits, and likely had to focus on his career as they got older, thus leaving Twilight without anypony to drive her socially in the original timeline.
Unlike in this timeline, where a highly social and sociable Princess is now her primary friend, and does not have other career motivations or goals to cause a separation.
Given that i established VERY EARLY ON that this one change would have a huge impact, I find it a bit obtuse to complain when those changes have a massive impact on a character's fundamental abilities and outlooks.
4017672 Actually, you established very early on that "the universe will find a way to turn the story back on a proper course" , as you put it in your story's description. In other words, that the actors and details change but not much else does, the general description of something called a "second-order counterfactual" in "what if?" history.
All that aside, there is only so much alteration one can do to a character before they cease to be that character. I think you've taken a very large step beyond that line and intend to keep going in that direction. As you can probably grasp from the fact that I've commented on multiple chapters to this effect but keep reading, however, Twilight being not Twilight is enough for me to comment on but not enough to stop me from coming back for more.
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Crap! I have readers in france!
Thanks for the fixes. I'll go in and fix them up. Obviously, my french is incredibly rusty.
This relationship is getting confusing, are cadence and twilight polygamists, is twilight the only one who wants to settle down into a full relationship whilst cadence wants to screw everyone?
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The relationship can be difficult to figure out, especially if you're just reading it for the first time. They both want a committed relationship with each other, but they also have other partners that, while they have a physical relationship with them, they don't share the same intimacy and love that Cadance and Twilight have with each other.
Oh Celestia, they're gonna eat each other out in the middle of the street. I... I can't do anything else but watch, for science.
I bet she will!
Rough sex in the future?
Jeeze, how can these ponies get anything done if they are constantly fucking each other?!
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I think you need to familiarize yourself with the theories surrounding parallel universes. You seem to be unable to grasp the effect one change can have on the world. For example, what if Adolph Hitler's Father had worn a condom rather than not on the night Adolph was concieved? That would change history. But it also might change current events. Many innovations came from the Germans during World War II. Who is to say that we wouldn't have comercial airlines yet, due to the Germans revolutionizing the Jet engine? Or maybe the Russian dictator Joseph Stallin would have gone crazier faster, as his opposition to Hitler's regime was one of the noted things that kept him focused away from capitalism. Maybe he would have inspired the russian people to nuclear potential earlier on and wonthe cold war. Who can say?
You wonderful tease you!I'm really REALLY loving this new Twilight especially when she knocked Hoitys lights out(again seriously how many hits does that guy gotta take before he gets the point even Bluebutt ain't that bad)I am really loving this story so far!
I know the story is already over but I might as well say my piece. This is the chapter I clock out. I've have come to realized that this is a Twidance story in which I dislike this Cadence so much I don't want her to end up with Twilight. Everything after the three year time skip in regard to their relationship is awful. Not because it is an open or polygamous relationship, but because it is Cadence sleeping around and refusing love and intimacy in order to futilely fill the whole in her heart while programming the young impressionable and desperate Twilight that adores her and wants to be with her more than anything to act just like her.
Twilight's talk and feelings with Fancy didn't come off as "I want a polygamous relationship with Cadence as long as she commits to me" it reeked of "She can fuck whoever she wants no matter how I feel as long as she finally returns even the slightest bit of my feelings for her". Cadence using promiscuity as a drug to avoid dealing with her emotional problems while stringing along and twisting about Twilight's is egregious to the point that both Celestia lost hope in her as the alicorn of love and her OWN POWERS turned their back on her.
When she embraced her love and fought off nightmare moon for even a second that was her chance to turn it all back and try to help Twilight and her have an actual healthy relationship but the fact that she immediately turned heel again and started whoring around ponyville while stringing Twilight along means I don't care and I don't want her to have a happy ending. She got every chance to do the right thing and she failed. For fuck sake you have TEN YEARS with the love and support of everyone to work through your problems but instead she constantly faltered and failed and pushed all of her pains and burdens onto Twilight so she could have a couple dozen more flings.
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Good sir I need to address several problems I have with your statement
Just because Cadence had a moment of insecurity where she wonders whether or not she is rubbing off on Twilight doesn't mean that she is mind bending Twilight into being promiscuous. And nopony seems to mind their promiscuity so I don't know why that would be a problem.
I have to disagree with this too. It came across more as insecurity about whether or not she was "good enough" for Cadence. Also a spoonful of frustration at how skittish Cadence is being.
While I won't argue that Cadence is avoiding the issue, I completely disagree with the rest of your statement. Show me where Celestia lost hope in her. I would really like to hear your rationale behind that one. And where do you get off saying her powers "turned their back on her". If you had been paying attention in the first chapter you would know that the only time her powers have ever not worked was when Chrysalis, a creature that literally derives sustenance from love energy, was gobbling up the love magic she was trying to use on Shining Armor. Until you have some substantial evidence of her magic not working or turning against her I respectfully ask that you shut your cake hole.
In a moment of stress she finally admitted to herself that she loves Twilight deeply (a confession later pulled out of her by Celestia). I don't know how you keep getting "whoring" from friends-with-benefits and I would really like to know. Also by Twilight's own admission she has also had multiple partners, so you can't call Cadence an whore and call Twilight a poor misguided soul. That's called a double standard and it completely undermines your credibility. And before you try to say that Cadence turned Twilight into a promiscuous whore during their time in Ponyville there were hints dropped that Twilight has had other partners (Spitfire being the prime example) long before that.
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