Hi my name is RainChaser, but i prefer to be called RC. im the middle child of three and the only pegasus. need aid, call me or eather of my sibling and the guard will help you. let the night be free
as shining and cadance go through there honey moon and prepare to travle towards there new home they are faced with a hidden and unbetold truth, shining is not who he seams on those friday nights when he travles to a bar. now an old enemy is back and the chaser siblings must aid there present troubles with there new frends and jorny.
i am a terribel multichapter story auther. Im just gonna do one shots after this story.
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whelp here goes.
You need an editor or two ...
Hmm...A Shining Armour is Vinyl fic. Has promise, not to mention original. And stories with promise cannot have bad Grammar in my opinion. Need an editor?
Wrote this before reading the story.
Jesus fucking Christ, you're actually illiterate.
Seriously, have you ever seen the English language in written form before?
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SECREAT.
and seriously,no line breaks?
so little words?
Cool idea, toons of spelling errors though. Try using a spell checker, either in Word or in a browser like Chrome or Firefox.
For one, you should fix the title: "secreat" should be "secret", so the whole title should read "the secret life of shining armor"
You'll only get better with time. Consider this practice. So far it seems like everybody dislikes because of the grammar. But do try to improve it.
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Im typeing this on a tablet. Deal with it. I can but i can spell worth a crak. But i got potrie out the wa zoo.
I cant help whow i write. Its hard when the keypad takes the last letter presed without placing grammar in it. And the microphone to words dosent understand my way of speaking. And i get short tearm for what i say.
Like the idea a lot but I have to admit, it's time to find a new editor
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3802492 my editor is my english teacher. She 65. And the human mind understands what someone types and makes the mental changes befor you relize it. Its hard to understand.
3802485 Never said anything than. But might I suggest that you write it on something with a keyboard? Might get a better first impression that way.
I was also complimenting you...
3802485 See, that might have had some effect if it was /at all/ legible.
You are literally illiterate.
The fact you're using a tablet does not have any bearing on the fact that you're an incompetent.
The only real problem I see is the grammar and structure. there were a lot of names that weren't capitalized when they should be and everything was kinda jumbled together, but the idea has potential. It would probably be a good idea to add detail, as well as seperated the different speakers into their own paragraphs, so that your audience can easily tell who is saying those lines. Welcome to FimFiction.net, and I wish you luck on the story.
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I would like you to take a look at all of my stories. Look at the ratings. Read the words that are actually written in the stories. You see how they are legible and written correctly? Guess what? That is completely unedited. And I wrote it on my phone. Typing on something that isn't a computer is no excuse. A phone is much harder to type on than a tablet. But guess what? It's even easy to make mistakes on the computer. In fact, I just made three typos about three sentences ago. But it's not that hard to look back on what you wrote and fix it. That's what I just did. And now my reply is legible.
3802550 do you have sausage fingers with little to no control? Oh and if you do im sorry for the coment. But i have no spelling or littrary skill. I have the ideas but i dont have the abilities.
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No, I don't have sausage fingers, but I do excessively sweat. It's actually worse because instead of pressing letters next to the one you want (which are easily spell checked by your tablet or phone), when I press a key, it presses something on the other side of the screen. I would like to see you try to type an "N" when what you get every time is a "Q". But it can be fixed. You can look over in whilst or after you type it. Half of the time the spell checking program on whatever device you have places a red line under whatever word is wrong. You even said that you did have an editor, though I doubt that is true when every other word is wrong. And half of those misspellings are common sense.
3802597 i dont have a spell cheak. I sweet the same amount as you. And i am not skiled.
3802668 there are thousands of free spell checkers online that's no excuse for spelling mistakes.
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Yeah, it's your call. I like the concept quite a bit, so good job there.
3802668 See, here's the thing.
You're an incompetent, and you're lazy.
You don't have spellcheck, you don't have this, you don't have that.
What you DO have are excuses. It's everyone and everything's fault but yours. Blame the tablet, blame your software, blame whatever. The only one or thing at fault is you.
Know what would fix each and every issue you have here?
EFFORT.
You don't have spellcheck? Put the effort in to find out how to spell above a deer tick level of literacy.
You're using a tablet? Pay the slightest fucking bit of attention to what you're doing.
Your fingers are too big? There's this lovely little key called backspace. It lets you fix the mistakes you're too lazy to bother with.
Your problem isn't any of the things you've whined about in the comments, using as an explanation of why it's everyone's fault but yours.
The problem is that you're lazy, you're whiny, and you're not willing to try to fix it, opting to whine and expect everyone to treat you like that nice lady that the special ed office sends to follow you around all day at school and make sure you don't bite the other fifth graders.
Welcome to the real world, you little shit.
Hi! this is an interesting idea. I never would have thought of that. Cool connection.
Do you mind feedback?
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i clestadamn fixed the issues on my computer just now. happy?
3803014 Apparently not, because you couldn't even go one sentence there without fucking up.
If you have no spelling or literacy skill, you should not write a story. You also shouldn't be writing one on a tablet, and if the effort it takes to write an acceptable story is too arduous or painful, there's a simple solution. Don't write a story.
P. S. I typed this on a PHONE
You know guys what I kind off find funny. When I first posted a story, I was immediately threatened that if I wouldn't change the structure that it would be removed.
And not to say that I didn't make mistakes, I did. Being dyslectic and having an non-verbal learning disorder but I at least got most of the spelling and grammar correct. Now 4 months later I see this story. It just makes me go "WTF is with this site?".
3803105 i understand. But i canot help how i am. I am trying to make it better.
I'm surprised this was even approved. I mean, not having a concept of proper writing rules is one thing, but completely failing at capitalizing almost anything? No.
3809193 What the fuck has this got to do with bad spelling???
Edit: 1D as in 1 direction??? Wow that post was the most off topic post Iv ever seen in my life
3811218 you put Iv. Its spelled Ive. And y8u insult me on spelling.
3811419 You're funny. If you want to get technical its actually I've, I missed I single letter in comment. You wrote a fic that seems to consist entirely of spelling mistakes and my point was You said you don't have a spell checker even though there are thousands of free spell checkers online.
P.s I think you meant. "You put Iv, Its spelled I've And you insult me on spelling."
I made one mistake, You made several mistakes pointing out my mistake so yea.
P.P.S I just noticed even the god damn title has spelling mistakes. Its a shame because the concept of the story is pretty original but all the mistakes that you are not willing to fix, will be its down fall.
What is with all the negativity? Whatever happened to constructive criticism? Pinkie would be very disappointed in you all.
So what if there are grammatical errors everywhere, spelling mistakes, and the chapters are a little short. This story is based on a good concept, and well written and correctly spelled are not synonyms. I thought our motto was "Love and Tolerate" not attack anyone who uses incorrect grammar. I for one like the story and will continue to read it, and remember you don't have to read any fanfics that you don't want to.
3818424 The problem is its full of errors that people are constructively pointing out and instead of fixing the problems hes just blaming things like having no skills and not having spell checker. People tried to be constructive but for some reason the "author" is unwilling to make any effort to actually fix them.
3818875 ok, this is true. But i trying to do better at least! Im typing it when im on the computer, so i am using spellcheak and asking my teaxher to cheak the grammar.
3818875 Yes I concede that the first couple of comments were constructive, but after that most comments were just blasting the author. And last time I checked, in real life it doesn't make someone want to become more industrious if you just yell at them a lot, it just makes them resentful and/or crushes their drive to do better. I'm glad we can talk about this like gentlemen and/or ladies about this without resorting to blasting on another.
3820596 thank you for commenting in such a way.
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3819354 If that's true why is there STILL spelling mistake in the title ...
3822166 Yea but It has nothing to do with mlp Im not willing to read something just because its bad. Its about 1 direction it defaults as bad. I was reading this because the story was interesting but it was ruined by errors.
I remember back before Christmas when I saw a fic identical to this one. The premise was the exact same: Shining Armour is Vinyl Scratch...
I mean no offense to you, but seriously, don't just steal a premise like this. It's bad manners.
Thats it I give up on this story props for FINALLY fixing the title sort of.... Still no punctuation but better AND now there is a spelling mistake in the title of the latest chapter
USE A SPELL CHECKER!!!!
Shining Armor- WHY do you guys keep on writing stories of me as Vinyl? I mean, I am twice her size, let alone I have a few parts that everypony is bound to notice. Largely cause we don't wear pants!
Vinyl- at least they don't ship you with Octavia. Love the girl, but the last thing I plan to do is end up under the covers with her. Not into Earth Ponies.......... Kay that sounds rascist, let me clear it. I am not a fan of going to bed with something that can toss me around like a doll.
This will be interesting. Best of luck with this story. Seems like it will be a unique story.
3833380 Do you happen to know what's it called?
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I'm afraid not... Try search for a story with Shining & Vinyl tagged.. I think it's slice of life.
The cover art is Vinyl staring at the viewer with her glasses lowered and eyebrows raised ((S)He looks unimpressed by something)
3834192 This one? The Fan
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Just looked myself, and yes, that's the one.
3834203 Okay
Please run this through a spell checking software. Its butchuring the human language.
Its a good story though. But really get someone to proofread it and heavily edit it.