Hi, reader. I'm no storyteller, but I'll do my best to entertain you with my writing, and to improve as a writer. Thanks for reading!
When Twilight runs into the newly reformed Trixie, she discovers that Trixie has never had a friend before so she takes it upon herself to teach Trixie about the magic of friendship. But the magic of friendship just may become something more.
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Wait... How?
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How what? How everything progresses? I don't want to leave anything unclear for anyone who reads this.
Started reading because I hoped against logic that this would at last be a TrixiexSpike romance. But nope. It's just another Twixie story. Guess I'll keep this in my RL list on the off chance there will be some interaction between Spike and Trixie (which is ridiculously scarce, despite how important Spike is to Twilight and how often the fandom pairs her with Trixie). I'm also interested in seeing what you have in mind for filling in the mystery and ambiguity that characterizes Spike's origin.
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All wil be revealed, keep your hopes up!
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Changed it. Thanks for the suggestion.
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This was really good. For a novice writer I am thoroughly impressed with your skill. Feel free to place this ribbon in the long description of this fic. Also from myself a like, a favorite, and a watch. I really hope this does well
I don't mean to be rude, but I feel like this story has been done at least 20 times before on this site.
I liked the jokes about the interviewing book, among other funny bits, but the eating part felt a little overdone. And I'm not just talking about Trixie- she's naturally over the top. Twilight's reactions to a peanut butter cracker go a little far.
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It's been approved? I didn't really expect that to happen, thanks!
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I'm sorry I wasn't able to make this story more unique for you.
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I may have made her reaction to it a little too strong.
But it was a really good peanut butter cracker.
It started off pretty good, and I like how Twi eats food in a perverted manner.
I love how Twi completely forgot the whole reason she went to Trixie's show at all.
This has been approved and will be added to my IRL library, Brony wing when completed.
Here's a twist for you!
Yeah... this is a Ship or Clopfic, isnt it?
3117006 Shipping is magic, sometimes. No clop.
3117047 Awesome, I always love a story with no clop in it!
I might just read this later and see how it turns out *Clicks the Read Later button* there!
Next update? it's interesting... Love Trxie and Twilight~ X3
3117322 Next update won't be too long from now. Classes come first though. I hate college.
3117362 same here... It's a Night mare! (Badum Tss)
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I feel your pain.
3117398 But nevertheless... I need to endure it since it's my last year... hopefully~
3117403 Endure for one more year, it will be worth it, I think. I've got a long way to go.
3117430 Thanks~ you too... take care and good luck~
Trixie has Peanut Butter Crackers!? "The great and powerful TRIXIEEE, needs some peanut butter crackers."
You have the makings of a great writer. The tools, the talent, you have all that. You just need to spend a bit more time “sanding the rough edges”. Specifically, I’m referring to the way you present information.
Too much information was posed in narrative form. Remember, any time you as the writer give information narratively, the immediate story is put on hold. This exposition, if not used correctly, can ruin an otherwise perfectly good scene.
To overcome this, the first thing to do is to look for information that is not necessary. Cut it. Next, look for information not critical to the moment. Delay it. More important information can often be stalled and later “hidden” with crafty dialogue, cleaver word choice, and the occasional thought of your central character. You’d be amazed how long readers are willing to be deprived of vital information, as long as the action keeps on coming (“action” referring to anything: from hair washing to car chase scenes).
Other than that, this piece was pretty impressive. I love the overriding concept, and I think as a whole, you could really have something here. Something that, with a bit of polishing, bronies and pegisisters alike will thoroughly enjoy.
3114965 this. Also, while Twilight loves the pursuit of knowledge, she hates burdening Celestia with anything at all. She'd probably scrounge bits from her library or become a street beggar before troubling Celestia over money.
3120247 the progression of story made perfect sense to me, and just about everyone else reading it if the comments are anything to go by. While the concept may have been done best in It Takes A Village, I liked the writing and the jokes actually made me smile. In other words, keep up the good work and don't let detractors get you down just because you're writing a familiar pairing. TwiDash gets away with more recycled scripts than you can shake a hoof at.
This has the making of a very fun down to "earth" story. Which is dificult enough for some about mlp.
I need more of this!
"Do not deny the power of the peanut butter crackers!" ....... >.>
just have all my like and my Fav!
hehehe can't wait for more of this.
Interesting first chapter. I like the story so far but I must read more of it! Hopefully you have a second chapter coming out soon.
It seems Twilight got caught up in the show and talking to Trixie afterwards. She forgot her original plan to find out about the entrance exam, and if Trixie went to the same school. I hope she finds out soon I have always asked myself that same question, and would like to see your take on why there aren't more baby dragons around. I also like Twixie a lot and want to see where it goes in this story.
Pretty good for an early work. Spelling, grammar, syntax and such, it checks out well.
The premise is interesting - Twilight wants to know how other unicorns fared with the egg test, and gets caught up in Trixie's excentricity. The storyline tends to meander quite a lot, though, and it's hard to follow the characters' line of thought a lot of the time, and they tend to act rather irrational a lot of the time. For instance, Twilight spends a ton of money on the deluxe tickets to ensure that she gets Trixie for herself (
) while ignoring her hunger, but then decides to drop the whole thing because she wants to eat. There's also the bit about her 'farewell tour' that is made a big deal of at first, but not mentioned at all later, although that may be explained in later chapters. And there's also a lot of dialogue and thoughts that, frankly, sounds very convoluted. Makes me think "Do people really talk like that?"
All things considered, could do with some improvement, but seems interesting and intriguing. I would like to see a continuation.
3120068 OMG! Yes! I'm not the only one who thought about that!
I loved loved loved this story; however, I'm completely confused what exactly happened during the show. How did Twilight miss the whole thing like that?