After a horrible, life-threatning accident during a preformance, Windy Scamper believes her life is pointless and begins to slip into depression.
Meanwhile, North Arrow, a cartographer, begins to wish for something more in life than just mapping out places he wishes he could be. He yearns for adventure, and secretly plans to quit his job one day and run away from the norm of society.
These two lives are joined together when a bulletien board is put up in Sugarcube Corner where ponies can leave short messages on sticky notes. As the Griffons begin to invade and many lose hope, it was meant for those who were beginning to lose all hope, as these two are. The two begin to converse over their lives, as their anonymous conversation begins a string of hope.....
NOTE; I usually do not like writing OC stories, and this will probably be my only. This was original a collab with TheaterCritic, but he was being a butt, so since this was my idea for a story, I am taking it and running with it.
well that was... fast
i shall now read it
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This is Cute
Interesting... You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention.
The idea is interesting, and the characters have a lot of potential.Though it is too early to say anything except keep writing!
Good so far. And now, we wait.
New chapter
Hi, this is a review from the Authors helping Authors group.
Name of Story: Sticky Notes
Grammar score out of 10: I'd give a solid 8 or 9.
Pros
- The OCs are well developed here, and there is reason to care for their problems. I feel bad for what both North Arrow and Windy Scamper are going through.
- The chapters flow quite nicely, and are a pleasure to read thanks to the good formatting.
- I really enjoy the overall concept of using a message type board to have the two communicate without actually knowing who the other is. Its a pretty original idea, and I found it clever and done well so far.
Cons
- Sometimes you tend to over do it when it comes to comma usage. Its quite alright to use commas and all, but don't be afraid of short sentences.
- Might be more personal preference on my part, but I would have liked some more insight into the relationship between River Shine and North Arrow. Would have made that scene of her discovering her death so much more powerful
- A couple of spelling errors. In Chapter 1 you misspelt souvenir and one other word although I can't seem to find it now. A quick spellcheck before submission does wonders
Other Notes
Overall it was enjoyable and I find a lot of promise in the story. The overall plot and ideas I can see so far are very good and I'm interesting in seeing where you'll take this. This is my first time reading and OCxOC story, so it was a pretty new situation for me actually. Just a little side thing, perhaps you could give the chapters different title names? To maybe give the reader a hint on what to expect perhaps? Just a personal preference thing
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