Ten years in the future, Equestria is now a post-apocalyptic world ruled by a dark entity. With Princess Celestia and the Mane Six gone, there was no pony left to stop this threat. Applebloom; now a grown mare and leader of the resistance, has decided to travel back to the past to prevent the catastrophe from happening, even at the cost of not returning to her own timeline.
Author's Note: I had the idea of this story based on a dream similar to this plot. And to avoid confusion with the two Appleblooms, I'll nickname the main character of this story Future Applebloom. The story also takes place between after Season 2 and before Season 3.
Chapters (9)
I am surprised there are not many comments here
I think the story is fairly interesting and will fav and like
I notice you are only part of one group
If you join more groups it could increase the number of chances others will read this story
The only constructive critisim I have regarding the story is the name of the bad guy, and that is only because you could have used the name of the G1 evil guy who is tailor made for the role.
He uses the rainbow of darkness, uses dragons, and is a cruel demon like figure.
Details like that can really make or break a story for someponies
Either way I find the story interesting and I hope you continue
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Thank you for favoring my story and being the first to comment on it. I am a new member of this site and I am looking for some groups to post this story, just haven't found the right ones yet.
And to be honest, I never knew the name of the bad guy in the G1 series, simply because I never saw most of that series back then. My friend was the one who came up with the name for him because it relates to the devil. Funny thing is that I was going to name him Hades but the name Lucifer felt more fitting for him.
If you watch the pilot episode "escape from midnight castle" it should give you a good look at "Tirek", and if nothing else it can give you ideas if you want to continue with more time travel stories.
I love time travel stories
They have a group for that by the way if you want to check them out
Interesting Story - goes to my favs.
And now i am waiting for Updates
Please update. There are more people reading than commenting, and I know I was one until it took too long to bear. I need an update, this is a good story, and I want to see it end.
Iceshadow
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I'm currently working on the next chapter which right now is half done.
Update: Chapter 8 is now up.
One of My favorite stories. I hope that this doesn't end any time soon. If it does please make a sequel. Also i had a sleepless night after reading the river scene (eyeless pony and all) but i was awesome all the same
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The next chapter will be the final one and as for a sequel, I'm not really sure about it. Though I am thinking about making a one-shot story taking place after Hope from the Future (Can't go into details without risking spoilers) or maybe a prequel about Future Applebloom's struggle in her timeline.
I would personally like to do that because I want to show the readers of the hardships Applebloom and her friends had to face after their entire world fell apart. I am opened for ideas since my mind is kinda blank on that part.
Oh and thanks for the comment =)
Poor Applebloom.
More please.
3508603 More please! This is a great story so far and as for a sequel, I would do both ideas! Keep up the good work! I might review this when it's completed!
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Thanks.
4130070 This is the first thing to be reviewed after the story list is completed! Great work! Really loved the story!
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Thank you very much, It was a lot of hard work completing this chapter and it was worth it!
4130334 And I bet you made many people happy with your effort! I know you made me happy!
That was amazing. It's sad that things must come to and end. It was a great read.
You have a little problem with past and present tense, but otherwise this story is pretty good.
you missed the big D at the end.
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fixed
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I've been thinking about rewriting the first 3 chapters of the story because of the length and grammar errors but I would like someone who would help me on it so it would be a little easier and faster.
It's a good story, but if i can ask... In the horrible past-apocalyptic future... They did not think to free Discord? at least is not like Discord kill everypony like Lucifer
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I really didn't think about Discord at the time of writing this, since the time line of the story takes place between after season two/before season three where he was turned to stone and he was not release until the episode Keep Calm and Flutter On in season three. Plus I really couldn't find a role for him in the story, i wish I could have though.
If I were to guess what might have happened to Discord in that timeline while still in statue form, Lucifer could have either used him as a decoration at his place or he destroyed him completely.
make sure future pass apple bloom meet if time travel movie tuat me that ones future and past meet mean big time mess of timeline.
Where's The Doctor when you need him?
He can explain what a paradox is much better
*runs around, searching everywhere frantically* MUST FIND MORE LIKE BUTTONS. ONE LIKE BUTTON IS NOT ENOUGH FOR THIS STORY.
Seriously, this is an amazing story. I loved it to the very end ^-^ fantastic work, absolutely fantastic. I give this story nine and a half muffins out of ten~
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Thank you very much for the comment and favoring my story, I really appreciate it.
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No prob ^-^ Question, though - Are you planning on any sort of sequel/sister story?
(For example, a short story on what happened to the rest of the CMC and Zecora after Apple Bloom left, or something like Future Applebloom still sort of existing, but is stuck in Limbo)
6797029 I am thinking of making a sequel to this involving a new oc of mine but I haven't got to work on it due to personal issues in real life that prevented me from writing. Plus want to change some things and writers block can be the worst @___@. But I do need to get my motivation back into writing and I may need help on that.
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Well, hey, if there's anything at all that I can do to help you out, just let me know - I'd be happy to assist ^-^
The pros: An interesting and addicting plot, funny moments, an epic battle written well and a satisfying ending with great resolution.
Cons: in the beginning and middle of the story, all the way up to the second before last chapter, the pace was too fast and it was hard to get emotionally invested with the characters. And the transitions between scenes were poorly executed.
The last two chapters were your best chapters, showing improvement in your writing. While the plot was predictable for the most part, it was still enjoyable for me to read. Two thumbs up.
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Thank you for the review. I do admit I'm not the best writer out there, as there were some errors within the story due to the short lengths of some of the chapter and how some scenes were poorly executed. Mostly it had to do with my inexperience as a writer and that I wanted the last chapter to be the longest as well.
I think setting a page limit for the first and previous chapters may have not been a good idea as I first thought it would. I'm more of an artist than a writer to be honest but story telling was something I want to try out. If I had someone with more experience with writing than I have, I could have fixed some of the chapters. But I am glad with your honesty and I approved of your review.
Oh my God I love this story I allready read it three times but future Applebloom's final goodbye is so sad I cry threre everytime.
BTW it's pretty hard to make me cry
Damn it, you made me cry with this, it was so worth reading. Cant wait to see more from you.
Possible boss theme fights against Lucifer:
First round: Ratchet and Clank Battle For Time battle theme
(After future Apple Bloom's sacrifice): Ratchet and Clank Heroes Collide theme
Or:
First round: Xenoverse 2 Time Rift/Demigra final theme
(After future Apple Bloom's sacrifice): Xenoverse 2 Planet Vegeta/Broly theme
ill read this tommorrow