I approve of this fic.

2946511
It's not my fault... I had no choice!

Applejack and Vinyl! What is this craziness? (starts reading)

2946714 You should join our chat.

2946714
Haha, very clever
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That was gloriously fucked up.

For the record Breath, this is my fetish. Thank you.

2947083
She'll be having a fun afternoon.
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2946947
Oh cool. How about that... I had actually never heard of a shipping fetish before and I had to have the guy this was for explain it to me a few times. Hopefully you'll find it a fun read.

2947141
I certainly did, though in my opinion she should have been in much, much stricter bondage.
Also, Kaidan's the reason I found your story in the first place

That's it? It's over?

WHAT. But.

Is there more...?

~Skeeter The Lurker

Any chance we could get some more of this please, Breath?

2947127
That, good sir, should probably be documented for posterity.

2946947
Wait...this is a legitimate thing...?

2947698
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Uhh... well truth be told, there is more story I had planned but there isn't any more written at this moment. Thing is, this was supposed to just be a short little one-shot and it kinda got out of proportion before I realized what was happening as it is.

I talked to Kaidan about it, and he said he was interested in picking up where this left off. It was his present after all, so I figured he could go ahead and get the views if people wanted more.

I guess if this gets featured though, I'd look into doing another clop short in the same setting, perhaps.

2947881

Wait...this is a legitimate thing...?

I was as surprised as you are actually. It was a challenge to capture the fetish right, that's for sure.

2947901
Ah, wonderful.

2947917
You know, I actually thought it might be a fetish unique to me and me alone. Though, now I know Kaidan shares it.

A whole new meaning for 'going postal'

Exceeded all expectations.

Paragraph size: 8/10
Letter kerning: 9/10
Sisterly love: 10/10
Number of letter 'e' in story: 5/10

I really hope you write me more clop soon, because you have a real talent for it. It's not often people can skip scenes and make it still so enjoyable to read. Reminds me of some other stories where they never actually show the character having an orgasm, but it's just as good because they build such a lovely image up to that point. I can picture her crying out for help in the warehouse after Derpy turns off the lights, before falling back asleep with the invader up her butt.

wow that was ummmm ... crazy hot nice.

2956724

Actually. I know this guy.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2950901
Who down votes this stuff? IDK, maybe it was just because your rating system was so silly.
2956724>>2956728
@Skeeter,
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Who are you again?

2956806

Hardy hardy har....

PATHOS

~Skeeter The Lurker

2956806
I wanted to sound sophisticated... if Vinyl weren't spiking my breakfast too and shipping me across the country, I could have focused!

You wrote clop? Wow.

2973294
I don't have any issue with clop, honestly, and the idea of trying one bounced around in my head for a while. I kinda didn't want to because ponies really aren't my fetish, but I really have no moral values, so a friend asked and I just kinda did it. Haha, but yeah, I don't really have any real excuses. It's pretty damn filthy and it was fun in the end anyways. Probably never doing this again.

2974316
What counts is that you enjoyed or had fun writing it. I mean, why write something in misery? Anyways can't wait to read!

2947127
Dear god, I hope you or Kaidan can flesh that out

2984282>>2984182

Awesome that you stopped in to give feedback. Stuff like that makes writing feel rewarding. I felt like my wording on that one part meant what I intended, but yours was clearer and I took the suggestion. Thanks for that.

As far as Apple Bloom's...situation, it was more or less just something there to be really screwed up and incestuously kinky because I thought it was fun. Though, when I finished and handed priority on this to Kaidan, I thought about a storyline for that. It's vaguely planned out but I've kinda put clop to the side for a while. I'm probably going to use it when I get really stuck on my serious stories, but I do in fact look forward to it also. It's just too fun to pass up really.

Very good plot... No pun intended. Never even knew there was such a fetish.

BTW: Loved the fact that Vinyl Scratch put pears as the label. They must have been some wet pears. XD

2994579
Whos a silly pony? Pearljack

That moment when you're in bed, scanning your E-Reader for any good unread clopfics, and the only thing you find is a three-chapter fetish fic with an extremely unusual ship. Said moments makea you pretend you are taking two shots and say "Because why the fuck not" between them.

Was it worth it? Lemme ask my dick.

...

It said "Fuck you. But say hello to Right Hand for me later! Was a lovely evening."

Self-explanatory.

Funnily, despite being one of the most talented editors I know, you still have some it's/its confusion and missing commas. :P

3008468
And now that Selbi's dick told me to fuck off, I can die happy.

I appreciate the compliment on the editing btw, but yeah, I have my own weaknesses. On the commas, I wouldn't doubt I messed a few up perhaps but I'm a big fan of 'screw the rules, this sounds good' type thing. Even with my nazi-ism I can appreciate that mantra for what it is, and I often do the wrong thing by choice. I feel that if you know the rules, you can usually break them smartly.

On the it's/its thing though, I just suck at that. I don't really know why. I never see it.

What? I thought Vinyl was a girl?

2951369 You're spanish?

2947083

WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAT?!?!?!

3091494
What the fuck are you talking about?

3093469 I think you represented Vinyl there as a stallion! In reality it's a MARE! A SHE! You know what a SHE is?!

3094617
Unless I accidentally called Vinyl a 'he' somewhere, nothing is wrong. Girls can be comfortable with their sexuality, and Vinyl's fannon personality paints her as a party girl usually, of which sex is a big part of. Besides, just because she's extra flirtatious and casual about sex doesn't mean she's written as a guy.

3094836 What's that now?

I have a dream.... a dream that one day, all males will be treated equally by the fairer sex. We will all have the oppurtunity to be wrapped up, packaged, and shipped in a box with vibrating toys. I have a dream... that one day my children will grow up as ponies, with two loving pony parents, and United Derpy handling all their shipping needs.

3095501
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i enjoyed this

i approve. for someone who does not write clop this is actually pretty good.

Handle With Care: Chapter three: Return to sender:

What else does Derpy notice that nopony else does?

Everything. She can see in two directions at the same time making her able to notice twice as much as a normal pony.

3008564 Read it aloud. I-t-apostrophe-s is "it is." I-t-s means whatever you are talking about belongs to the it.

The finale was hilarious. Here, have a poem, it is a parody of the Beetlejuice summoning spell:

Though I feel quite like a creep,
Still I cannot help but peek;
At the pony with two backs...
VinylJack, VinylJack, VinylJack.

Too bad it does not work like it does in Beetlejuice...*sigh* Anyway, because you deserve it for making me laugh and... enjoy myse- this story so much, have one last Applejack ahegao.

3520114

There should be a comma between "Vinyl" and "she."

Normally yes, as it would be a separation between an intro participle and the main clause, but since the intro participle is only two words in this case, I choose to omit it for flow's sake.

Glad I could interest you. I also don't favor AJ clop but this was a birthday thing. The characters were picked to be as difficult as possible to realistically ship.

3520270

Good catches. Thanks for the point outs, though a handful I meant as is. In general, I follow comma rules as best as I can, but I feel that said rules can be overridden when something like flow comes into play.

3520389

Thanks a ton for the feedback. It's nice to come and go through comments from a person who enjoyed something I put together. Glad you thought the ending was humorous. I had a lot of fun putting AJ through torture so I figured it would be good to lighten the tone and just go crazy with how over the top all the cumming was as a form of self satire.

PS I will never be able to see as anything but ahegao now

3522117 Here are the ahegao of the rest of the mane six:

3522162
>Pinkie's cross-eyed face is her ahegao face
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>Pic can never be viewed the same for all my natural born life. The same goes for anytime she derp-faces in the show.
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I'm okay with this.

Thank goodness Derpy realized they were playing games or Applejack would've been in a giant shipping warehouse for who knows how long.

Honestly it's great. But that's also the reason why I'm saddened to see it end that abruptly. It honestly feels like a chapter is missing. A chapter with juicy clop and following epilogue of the future of the naughty three mare couple.

This was fucking insane!