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Fluttershy discovers she has feelings for Twilight Sparkle, and once she confronts and accepts them, she decides on a plan to express them to her object of affection. A simple, yet effective plan. But as Spike tries to control his new found magical abilities, chaos over takes Ponyville and Fluttershy's "simply plan" becomes more and more complicated as she strives to let her loved one know how she feels.
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I'm not done reading yet, but one thing I notice after the first section is that you seem to have a lot of issue with showing-not-telling, and you also seem to be rushing the narrative along. The first section could do very well with more description of the scenery, Fluttershy's mood, etc. while not being stated directly as "Fluttershy was happy". You need to work more on descriptive language.
At the start of the second part you also seem to have an issue with Fluttershy being a bit OOC. If Twilight tackled her to the ground like that, I doubt Fluttershy would just jump up. Twilight also should at least acknowledge Fluttershy and apologize.
Regardless, I'll finish up the reading and keep an eye on the fic.
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I thought so after I re-read it which is a problem I hope to rectify with future chapters. I'm behind on "Gridlocked", at least with getting it to my editor and through him, but I simply couldn't write for it until this idea got itself out.
in your description of the story, it's accept, not except
a clop scene would be nice
Mah Boi, clop scenes are what all true warriors strive for!
This seems very interesting. Please continue!
This is an interesting chapter. I like that Fluttershy is uncertain about her feelings. It could lead to some interesting scenes between her and Twilight. I look forward to what happens next.
I love it! Please continue! I never considered TwiShy before, but it's so cute!
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I hope to begin working on it again soon, but right now, it isn't going in my mind, unfortunately.
504807 It's ok. I know the feeling.
Damn, I like this story. TwiShy...I like that, honestly hoping to see a bit more Spike/Twilight romance though, just a little bit if anything. Other then that I'm down for this stroy and will read each and every chapter bro, clopfic? What the hell is that? Is it a lemon? I'm down
On hiatus?
Good story though, really want more.
Moar ?
Whenever you get any time can you make another it is pretty good!