Mega Munchies

Stoner Twilight pays Donut Joe's shop a visit when she gets an extreme case of the munchies.

Contains Twilight Sparkle, high on magic weed, indulging on copious amounts of donuts and rapidly gaining weight as a result.

Chapters (2)

Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) · 29th Jun 2013 · 3,801 words
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The Bakery Heist (Edited 02/2020) · 1st Sep 2013 · 3,027 words
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Normal

Normal #1 · Jun 29th, 2013 · 2 · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

Nothing out of the ordinary here, nope!

Impress Me

Impress Me #2 · Jun 29th, 2013 · · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

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The Elusive Badgerpony

The Elusive Badgerpony #3 · Jun 29th, 2013 · 3 · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

Eh...

ShittyMKSound

ShittyMKSound #4 · Jun 29th, 2013 · 6 · 1 · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

I can masturbate to this.

ZealousAnubis

ZealousAnubis #5 · Jun 30th, 2013 · 1 · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

Wow...this story is just so...awesome.

I admire how there's a moderate amount of detail put into everything, especially in the first segment. The pacing's steady, and the stuffing part...can you become my teacher? As for the weight gaining, there's a certain charm here that I haven't seen anywhere else, and I look forward to the next chapter.

Learn for Life

Learn for Life #6 · Jul 13th, 2013 · · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

The only thing I have in the way of criticism is you mix up its and it's. You only used the correct one the first time:

“As always, it’s a pleasure doing business with you, a treasure of a customer, you are.” Zecora said as she stood up.

Every other time you used it's, it should be its. Please watch out for that.

Other than that, I like what you have here. You description is alright, your situation is good, the characterization is good. I look forward to another chapter, if you continue writing this.

Comment posted by D-APE deleted Jul 16th, 2013

thewaffler

thewaffler #8 · Sep 4th, 2013 · · · Donutcide (Edited 02/2020) ·

Sadly I've actually been that high. I once ate a bag of ten burgers, three large fries, three apple pies and about a gallon of Dr. Pepper. I felt terrible the next day, but at the time me and friends were having a blast. It was just an orgy of cheap fast food, smoke, Battlefield 2 and Toma films. I know where Twilight is coming from, the calorie nightmare is just part of the territory along with the paranoia.