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DirtyApe


Me bruddahs, i know da wae.

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Stoner Twilight pays Donut Joe's shop a visit when she gets an extreme case of the munchies.

Contains Twilight Sparkle, high on magic weed, indulging on copious amounts of donuts and rapidly gaining weight as a result.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 12 )

Nothing out of the ordinary here, nope!

I can masturbate to this.

Wow...this story is just so...awesome. :pinkiegasp:

I admire how there's a moderate amount of detail put into everything, especially in the first segment. The pacing's steady, and the stuffing part...can you become my teacher? :twilightblush: As for the weight gaining, there's a certain charm here that I haven't seen anywhere else, and I look forward to the next chapter. :moustache::twilightsmile:

The only thing I have in the way of criticism is you mix up its and it's. You only used the correct one the first time:

“As always, it’s a pleasure doing business with you, a treasure of a customer, you are.” Zecora said as she stood up.

Every other time you used it's, it should be its. Please watch out for that.

Other than that, I like what you have here. You description is alright, your situation is good, the characterization is good. I look forward to another chapter, if you continue writing this.

Comment posted by DirtyApe deleted Jul 16th, 2013

Sadly I've actually been that high. I once ate a bag of ten burgers, three large fries, three apple pies and about a gallon of Dr. Pepper. I felt terrible the next day, but at the time me and friends were having a blast. It was just an orgy of cheap fast food, smoke, Battlefield 2 and Toma films. I know where Twilight is coming from, the calorie nightmare is just part of the territory along with the paranoia. :twilightsheepish:

I know it took me forever to read this, but it's magnificent~ Thank you for writing it :3

Even better than the first~ Bravo, good sir!

4408508 Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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