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i hope yall injoy this fan fic i promise to give a new chapter on this one every two weeks that way you guys will have a story to enjoy over the time.
I have no words to comprehend the amazingness...thank you for featuring my oc in this...
...clop...(could not help but say that)
Anytime sweet heart I'm yours and nothing will change that. So make me a better man everyday of my life and I wodnt have it any other way baby I love you spooge298! I always will!!
2636428 he he now im blushing
For those who dislike I recommend you leave a commen before you click the dislike button please and furthermore if you were expecting sex in the first chapter like two of my other stories your dead wrong. Love comes over time you doofuses and yes the guard stallion released him but you'll find the real reason why later in the next chapter. Also if you believe a pony and a changeling can never be together then read this story when I post new chapters its not the looks of some pony it's the heart and the true pony within not the gruesome features on the outside. And even then this was a story for my love spooge298 if you don't like I made it for him then you don't need to read this story now do you. furthermore I made this story as a gift to him because I was recently in the hospital poisoned so when you love someone and your organs want to fail you the first thing you think about is what should I have done before I ended up like this and I realized I should have done more for him because he is there for me and I need to know he would be ok if I left. I couldn't leave him I fought tooth and nail in. That hospital many a times cursing my organs telling them they better not fail because a man out there finally found me and all the love I have to offer and damnit I wasn't going to leave him. I told myself when I get out of this alive I'm going to write him that story he wants and I'm going to make his life wonderful as long as I live. I made it through both organs were damaged from the poison but still functional. My liver and kidney had pulled through but now I'm on 6 different medications to help them heal and regulate. I now have to pee like a bucking race horse for 8 months until the doctor decides to take me off the meds. My mom is getting a new well dug so that we may have some water that doesn't have fertilizer in it and nitrates that tried to kill me. So I would appreciate it if you would not unlike unless you leave a good reason why.
Try not to worry about the downvotes they happen to nearly every story. Coltcuddlers is not a topic liked by all to begin with. I can only agree with your opinion that love developes over time. The best part of romance fiction is watching relationships form and blossom and for love to grow ever deeper.
I'm liking your concept for this story. It'll be most interesting to read how the relationship will develop between a pony not knowing love beyond sexual attraction and a changeling requiring love to feed off. It's a nice approach to the romance genre and I'll be looking forward to reading future chapters.
I did notice some sentences that didn't flow, for lack of a better term, as well as they could. If you'd like some help in the form of proofreading, feel free to let me know.
2641467 Yes please but how do I get help proof reading do you need a password or something or what ever it is. Please help I really do need it and yes I thought it would be a really nice concept but the main reason was because of spooge298 my boyfriend and hopefully future husband. We are both far away from each other and can't have the sexual attraction that people think that all love is about but we depend on the love for one another and we grow closer everyday. He likes changelings and I'm a royal guard pony fan to begin with and so what better than to write something we both will enjoy.
I have to admit I kinda rushed the story's first chapter because I was poisoned a couple of days ago and the doc said I was lucky to still be alive and all. Well all I could think about was spooge298 I won't say his name on here that way people won't torment him. He is my true love and I couldn't leave him so I pushed myself and told my body not to fail me because there is someone out there that finally loves me for me and I'm not going to let him meet me in a casket for our first time meeting face to face. So I'm out now but the meds are like horse pills that are all designed to help heal my organs that took damage. But we had talked about a story like this and I promised I would do it as soon as I could and well I figured its time I write at least the first chapter because what if this happens again and this time I don't make it. Well my boyfriend has my password and username so if I die he could finish it if he wants and if not thats fine.
But yes I would love proof reading and all um first I need to know how to let you proof read cause again most people see Mac as dumb and all and well I'm dumb out the wazoo. But if you could message me with directions on how to get you to proof read by golly that would be great!!
Thank you so much,
BigMacintosh1
I would normally read this, but I look at fics, especially here, like a store, or perhaps even like a job applicant. If I see a storefront covered in broken glass and graffiti with lots of inarticulate signs I am disinclined to enter. Or if I see a job applicant with no shoes, a mullet, face tattoos and piercings stumbling around drunk that is not a likely candidate for hiring. Sometimes a book can be judged by the cover if the cover is meant to be an ad for the book or is even part of it.
Sweep up you description, fix the grammar, tidy the phrasing, spruce it up in general. Take some pride in your creation.
I really don't mean to sound offensive but, you really ought to have an editor take a crack at your work before you post it. This isn't a bad story, it's got the potential to be a really unique and fun colt cuddling romp with cute O.C.'s and a heartfelt premise to go along with it, it's just...kind of held back by spelling and grammatical errors.
The pacing is...really rushed, but, overall I think it's a pretty decent starting point. I'd recommend finding an editor, giving him your rough drafts, having him do what he does and then posting it afterwards?
Anyway, I really don't mean to sound like a dick and I can tell you really care about this, I'm jsut trying to help you tell the best story you can with this.
2650455 well I hate to be a downer but if anyone ever read any of my blogs you'll know this story will not be continued because I am going to take my life once I finish building my casket. Thank you for the concern and all but a story I made out of love especially this story is sour and bitter to me and I know I'm not wanted so the hell with it if you would like to take this story as your own go ahead and that goes for everyone too this story isn't worth the time to read or the love that started to make it. There is nothing left for me on this earth and no one wants me around so I'm gone and no longer will I have to worry wether or not my life will get better. This way I can go peacefully and not have to worry about somebody else who doesn't want me around or wants to push me around. Moral of this comment is I'm gonna kill myself and anyone can take my stories and make them theirs for all I care. Have a nice life.
2651865 no. suicide is never the answer. i know that first hand. please be ok and see this. think of your boyfriend/ fiance/ husband. do you really want to leave him after so much? its clear to me you love each other. i ask that you live. for him. as long as you love each other he is all you need. i hope im not too late. please be ok sir. i know how your feeling a bit. ive been there... please live on *hug*
2660127 I'm ok. Does anypomy read my blogs though like seriously I told people in my blogs I won't gonna do it anymore cause I found a friend named Mach who really made me realize what I was doing and what would happen to those I leave. But me and spooge298 we no longer with each other his parents said they never want me to talk to im again. And then to make things worse one threatened to do some mean things to me and told me never to speak to them ever again so I'm trying to abide by their wishes. I am a gentle person I don't hurt nobody and I try to be as nice as I can but what ever I do I get a punishment left and right and well it feels like the first day my pa whipped me wih the horse whip cause I won't pulling the plow fast enough. It's just difficult I won't get into my life story but if you want to talk let me know ok just message me and I will respond when I get the chance.
2661040 i dont have a problem with hearing your life story friend. just PM me the whole story and ill listen. listening is my own talent. i like to help others. i hate seeing people sad or angry or depressed. i listen and talk them through it all as best i can. Dont worry a thing about anger or hate or any negativity from me friend. im a safety like i wish i had... i hope to hear from you. i will help where i can *hugs*
Ok. It was good, but I could use a bit of background story, personally. And LOTS more detail!
2670334 I haven't posted another chapter yet have I? believe me when I say this. what do most people do on the first date? They talk about each other and well after reading about what to do on a date from some online sites you always tell each other about yourselves. I should have a new chapter by the end of this week.
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OK ^^ good luck
Alright ya'll the next chapter is coming up in the next few days i finally got my laptop back and i shall soon post a new chapter YAY!!!!!!
My advice to you. LEARN PARAGRAPHS, and perhaps even more important, do not spend so little time on details. It gets painful to read after a while if you continue to write it like this.
2905395 sory posted from my ipod i was lucky to get it that done and details i will scale back a little and thank you for the criticism!!! panzi.github.io/Browser-Ponies/ponies/big%20mac/big_macintosh_standing_right.gif
Great chapter
3578859 oh hush no it aint!!
hehe dude glad you like it
Read the words disco stick..
LMAO...(just cuz I'm forebidden to talk to you do sent mean I can't comment and read along...right?)
3720108 eenope no rule in that.
you should keep going with this fic it would be so good
3764485 well of course I will does anyone read my blogs. February I will update everyone of my stories and well this one will be about 10 chapters or more and my others will either be completed or have more updates coming also. Also if you think chapter three was amazing wait till chapter 4 where things will literally become hectic for the two.
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yay
THE WAITING
Eyyy mac u shud totaly continue dis...
MORE!!!!!!!!!
