When Fluttershy tries to help a pony in need she gets lured into a cave deep within the everfree forest.
The cave however is not harmless , it is filled with an ancient poison which intoxicates who ever it encounters for too long . Its consequences are severe .
Luckily Dash is there to save Fluttershy and the mysterious Pony who was inside of it aswell . But it may be too late .
Can they find a cure for the Poison before Fluttershys time runs out?
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THERE ARE 2 ENDINGS FOR THIS!
Chapter 9 is the OFFICIAL! Ending.
Chapter 10 is for people who want to be sad!
Chapters (11)
Premise is good;
Execution notsomuch. I'd advise getting yourself a prereader or an editor or something. It's just plain hard to read, what with the awkward dialogue, the poor grammatical structure and the all around difficulty to follow.
The seeds of something great is in here, I liked how you described
and 
's relationship, but it just needs a lot of work.
6522 Thanks ill try to find one asap.
I noticed a lot of punctuation and capitalization errors, like "ill" instead of "I'll". Be sure to remember to capitalize your "I"s.
As for the proofreading, I'd be happy to help out. Just let me know if you want any help.
BTW, if you kill Fluttershy,I will hunt you down...
LOL, jk, but I will be P.O.'d.
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Still? q.q I really suck at punctuation.
Your help would be greatly appreciated, if your okay i can give you the google doc link and allow you to edit it , feel free to tear it apart there.
Im not sure what im going to do with Fluttershy , i have 3 endings in my mind . Not sure which one ill apply.
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Go right ahead. I'm happy to help
im kinda confused, here it has 6 chapters on DA it has 3 ,can someone explain it or am i going crazy?
Or its a story with similar names for both the story and author,but is different stories
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It is exactly the same Story , the people at deviantart just dont like me making so much chapters because they are kinda lazy I guess.
In fimfiction however you can easier split up the parts of your story becaue of the tracking system etc they have.
But its exactly the same , i just compiled some chapters together over at deviantart.
Do you have an ETA on the next (last?) chapter?
Sorry for asking, i don't want to hasten you, but i'm really looking forward to the end of this.
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It could take some time, I have some rough ideas on how the next chapter is going to look like.
Probably will be up around next saturday. But no promises .
The whole story is going to end in 3-4 chapters . So in around 3 weeks?
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Thanks for the fast reply, keep up the good work
In the second last paragraph, "A lost friend is not nearly as bad as a pair of broken wings". I think you may have those the wrong way around.
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OH crap! xD Damn Im gonna fix it right away
thx for pointing that out
aww dats sad i am going to cry
Great story so far!
She defeated an Ursa Minor
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oh damn thats right xD gonna fix it , thanks for pointin it out
Ooooo i cant wait till the next part!
Pleeeeeeease for god's sake, NEVER EVER EVER stop a chapter like this again. It can be a good thing, if and only if the next chapter is accessible already. But it's not, so the next time you encounter a situation like this in a story, please be kind enough to release a longer chapter, or two chapters at the same time, even if it would take more time without release.
I seriously just can't wait for the next one!
What the person above me said
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Tension is a powerful tool ;)
Anyways i just realised that all my comments were more or less about "asking for the next chapter", sorry about that.
I think it's time for me to write something more... relevant.
IMHO this story is great, and also the way you handle it is absolutely notable.
When i read the first 6 chapters, i thought this story will have one more chapter to sum the things up with a "save the girl, save the world"-ish ending. (or maybe a sad ending, it's a tragedy after all)
I couldn't really think about much more than that. But then, you made that twist to not fully cure Fluttershy. It was interesting. Quite sudden (i mean, why didn't they think about that earlier?), but interesting.
Then i tought that finally, i really know where you're going, you want the story to last longer, while curing Fluttershy slowly. OK, it's still interesting. Fluttershy's cute, Rainbow Dash still has her untold feelings, and we still lack a little bit of information about what the hell is really going on.
Twilight's worried, well that was expected, and is absolutely usual for her. But bringing in Celestia to undo everything?! Now that was unexpected! (for me at least)
Well, these were just some of my feelings about the story. I thought i should tell them, because this topic should have much more feedback about what people actually think. (and i need to stop begging for more)
"BTW, if you kill Fluttershy, I will hunt you down..." <- agreed! so be careful! i have an eye on you...
don't know which one though 
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Thank ya kindly, I think the next twist will catch you guys pretty much offguard aswell
Cant await to release the next chapter in 1-2 days!
All i got to say..
the sadest ending ever. i want to throw up my heart right now. that is no exaderation, it is ligitly how i feel. : (.
You cannot imagine how much i hate you right now. THe happy ending felt forced. The sad ending felt stupid. AND SAD.
14166 Well one of the tags is SAD
Man, this was so scary! I was really afraid of flyshy, and then... Celestia get stoned, just like in that comic with Discord haha. You are really good writer!
That's me again. Holy shit! Happy ending was really good, even if a bit weird. But this? This was something totally needless! This isn't even working with rest of the story. I'm not sure what just happened to Flyshy? Did Luna done what Celestia wanted to do? Or did Luna un-petrified Celestia? Man, you just ruined your own work. I'm not even sad with this ending. I am disapointed...
14808 thats because this is an alt ending.... that means that just one of those ending applies, its an alternate version for people who want to be a bit sad.
Chapter 9 is the official ending of the story
Chapter 10 is an alternate one
Got it ? :)
Yes, I got it. My apologize, if I sounded offensive. But You still didn't answered my question about Celly. Or is it supposed to be the mystery?
Sorry for wasting Your time, but it's just sign, that i liked Your story :)
14823 Oh nono, you are by no means wasting my team. I am really happy about any kind of feedback I recieve!
Whats going to happen with Celestia? Well, I am going to write a sequel to this story which will play in the same universe and Celestia will play a big role, so yes currently it is a secret what is going to happen with the petrified body of Celestia!
I must say I havent shed a tear, even if I wanted to, I'm now depressed, but I respect what you did, I wont be a hater, because of a sad ending, you did what an author had to do, and sincew I'm a brony, I must tolerate and love, even if I'm feeling sad, I'm not dissapointed, I dont hate you, I hate myself for not being able to cry.
But you are a very good writer, and I'ld love to read another story of Flutterdash from you
PS: If you can give it a happier ending, and a happier situation, not death-close, it would be great, but it's up to you to decide that :)
16609 Well chapter 9 is kind of happy, well not really happy but happier xD I understand that some people not like sad endings but thats just how I am and how I wanted this story to end. Im not a fan of "everything is fine at the end", but you know, different people different opinions
You are a champion of story telling. I loved this .
18151 Thank ya very much ^_^
Very nice!
I'm gonna finish the rest of them tonight, though, being the grammar freak I am, I noticed a few small errors, I hope you don't mind if I point them out. Note: I may not have found all of them, since I only thought to write down errors after I finished reading it. Okay...
* "Her mind tried to think of an solution." Should be "Her mind tried to think of a solution."
* Same thing with "She stood before an huge cave."
* "It was Saturday and every Saturday Fluttershy and her would meet up to practice together." Should probably be "she and Fluttershy"
* Also in "A pair of borken wings is not nearly as bad as a lost friend," borken is misspelled...
Regardless, this is still better than most other fan fictions I've read and I don't mean to troll.
25618 Okiedokie thanks for pointing this out, Ill fix them asap
Well... I had some questions but you said that they'll be answered in another story...
Let's see how fluttershy doomed the world for just being alive.
Or maybe she just doomed celestia's sanity
10535 some what she put it asleep and shoved it in a cage
i didn't know rainbow dash was a he lol jk.(that was a hint that you have called rd and a couple of the mane 6 he's through out your story so ya)
you no myb you should read your stuff out load it might (as in it'll help a lot just sayen)help before you publish it.
nice story tho
you've done better with your writing mishaps. I also think this is a superb cliff hanger
trixie is blue not purple
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well she did get it to stop terrorizing ponyville which was more then trixie could
26176 thanks, I always read it before publishing but you won't believe how hard it is for me to find mistakes in my own story :P
26227 thx, fixxed it
8959 WHAT?! PEOPLE DON'T LIKE YOU WRITING TONS OF CHAPTERS?! I LOVE CHAPTER BOOKS AND THIS IS ONE OF MY FAV BOOKS! :D : D
there should be a tag that says "you will cry and cry alot" and it should be on this story.
42973 Haha, crying can be refreshing sometimes ;)
Now they can just wait and see what Celestia was soo afraid of.