Many, many years after Twilight became an alicorn, Equestria has seen miraculous advancements in science and magic,
‘Twilight’s Centre for Academic Progression’ (T.C.A.P) has rejected the plans of 'Tinker Track', a robotics engineer who feels his skills and talents are being wasted. He puts a plan into action to send a robot pony back in time to study the real story behind how Twilight Sparkle became a princess and an alicorn first hoof. Then when the time is right he plans to change the past to better his own future! Buzzbot is the result, a clever amalgamation of magic and machine which can learn and can assume the image of almost any pony. Buzzbot is seeded into Ponyville’s past to accomplish Tinker Track's schemes. Will things work out as expected or has Tinker Track made his new robot servant a little too clever?
(As my first story please bear with the many pitfalls a new writer stumbles into, anyhow hope you enjoy the tale!)
Hi every pony, having warmed up some what, have taken the time to fix some of the errors that I have found on the Prologue. Thanks for bearing with me as I have refined this chapter of my story. I think it will be a better read now and make more sense. Cheers for those who helped me spot them! As always if I have missed any bloopers please let me know!
Well it's done now, over half way through the planned plot. Buzz has gotten up to some crazy stuff and hopefully I gave you all a chuckle too. The one thing playing on my mind is what to class the story as. I have tried to make it a funny story but with some serious plot elements too. If you have any comments or ideas on what you would class this one as that would be really helpful.
Any who, thanks for reading and have a great day all!
It's well-written and more original than the average fic landing here.
But I don't like it, some major details of the story bother me too much, I can't find this enjoyable.
The tech level is just too high, even fifty years in the future, and the whole time-travel portal found in a book make no sense ( why Celestia/Twilight allow the publishing of a book about easy time-travel, it's totally irresponsible ).
Ponies don't need tech, a third can fly, a third can do magic and the last third is too pridefull to allow fancy machine to do the honnest and sweaty work. And that's why after a thousand years they're still using steel armor, spears, or gramophone, because why change something that's not broken ?
Thanks for your input.
Yes some things did change very fast it's true certainly after twilight's transformation. I don't want to uncover too much now, but the main idea is that in their time over Equestria that the know how of these sort of technical advancements have long been known to the Princess's but they have held off until the time is right (sort of an event waiting to happen that is triggered by events in the story). As the book on time Travel being a very bad idea. I am glad you spotted that with out giving too much away it's an important point and be assured it is to be addressed later in the plot.
Thanks so much for your input, sorry if you haven't enjoyed the story so far and I appreciate your honesty. Please feel free to keep on reading if you want, but I wish you all the best either way.
You repeated much of the prologue in this chapter. …and the final paragraph is also seemingly repeated from the prologue.
Huh. Her head didn’t explode, she didn’t spontaneously combust, the universe didn’t collapse, and apart from her initial foray into the past the space‐time continuum is unmolested…
5491007 It's was my first story ever and I freely admit that I was still finding my feet. Future meltdowns are a distinct possibility of course
Thanks for your comments and for reading my story
Enjoying the story so far.
Found two small errors.
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Aye, it's my first ever story published so it's bound to have a few that slipped through the net. I do plan to go back at some point and tidy the whole thing up. Thanks for pointing the evil typos out, I'll get on sorting them
5490313 I know this a mental long time for a reply but thanks for pointing out the massive cut and paste error there
I didn't truly understand what you were getting at until now, when I've had a proper look at the chapters again.
Hopping between current and past projects had left me a bit confused, but that is no excuse for sloppy manners in replying to posts so please accept my apology for letting it slip through the cracks
As for the world not imploding, the idea of all of Pinkie's crazy shenanigans (though utterly incomprehensible to us) have a very simple answer in the end. (Not that I claim to know what that is
) I was aiming for the sort of anti-climax that is so unexpected it just makes you laugh, a bit like the ending of 'Spore' or 'Hitch-hiker's Guide to the Galaxy'.
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6064231 Thnx again
The pinkie pie plot twist. I couldn't stop laughing at those five words
6180031 We aim to please
Hm, not too bad. It was fun and happy, whimsical and exciting at times.