Luna's imprisonment is over. She's returned to Equestria and is starting to take her burdens and duties back on, but after so long away and with the looming regrets of her past she is finding such a task difficult. Seeking solace she explores her old chambers and confronts what she has feared to do since her return.
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Powerful work.
5133466 Thanks on every level! For taking the time to read my story and for the watch! So glad you enjoyed my work and look forward to entertaining you in the future!
5134366 Welcome and I hope my works does the same for you.
First (the bad): you need a proofreader to catch the tense-hopping; that's the only real issue I have with your writing. There are also a few typos and here and there it read as if there was an editing fragment (leftover word from a rewritten sentence, stuff like that).
Second (the good): your narrative style is strong; your characterizations are well done. The idea for the story is really good and the execution even more so. I very much liked how Luna put on battle armour and went to fight the Nightmare(s). Great imagery.
I think you are, have a green thumb.
(oh, probably the strongest sentence in this piece. Extremely fitting and atmosphere building)
5836536 Thanks so much and so glad you enjoyed it!
Thanks for the feed back. A lot of it is practice and a little imagination.
*squee* A good writen story.
5855678 Thanks! Tried really hard to capture the atmosphere in this one. Thanks for taking the time to read it
Well done! Visual and to the point. The end was really fulfilling!
"your skilled hooves"
Powerful horse words.
Luna in ceremonial armor must be sight to behold, but she should've put the sword back into the rack.
Tia's personal guards must've been close to a heart attack.