Tonight, I quit reading a story because it was retarded.  Was the author retarded?  No, I don’t think so, but the author clearly stopped thinking about the consequences of the world he or she was writing.  I don’t even want to beat around the bush tonight: I was reading what was supposed to be porn, but it was not arousing because the author kept avoiding sex.  

A note for all of you porn authors out there: when you advertise something as porn, don’t skimp out on opportunities for the characters to fuck.  Furthermore, porn is about sexually arousing the reader, so the characters should want it and enjoy it and even when they are enjoying it, they should still want it.  Robotic and stoic descriptions of sex is a porn sin.

The story I read contained a brief robotic description of sex every eight chapters or so, with opportunities for sex every three chapters.  This was a cruel tease.  Right when I was about to give up on it, there was a hint of a story concerning magic.  In case you didn’t know, I LOVE stories about magic, so I gave up on getting off and tried to read to get into this new story, which followed The Cutie Re-Mark a little too closely, which isn’t the end of the world, but the main character saw her closest friends committing suicide in that alternate reality then a few chapters later after setting things back, she tried to kill herself.

There are things in life that are powerful enough to change how a person lives their life, and this is one of them.  For a character to be so wishy-washy after experiencing what should have been a life altering event is just stupid.

There are a few more gripes that I have about mistakes that most people won’t make, but here is one that I consider a big no-no: in the story the author mentions a place having magic wards, but before this there was a crime committed in this same area that would have been monitored by these wards.  Whether you are writing about technology or magic, you have to make a choice: high or low.  Low Tech and Low Magic are not going to include things like security monitoring systems, fast indexing systems (computers), or cool toys like that, but High Tech and High Magic IS going to have all-seeing security systems, know-everything computers/devices, and an array of make-life-easier toys.

Whether you pick high or low, there are consequences.  Let me give you an example of one of the greatest fuck-ups of all time: Harry Potter’s Hogwarts school.  This magic school is supposed to be guarded by the most advanced magic in its world, yet due to the lack of any monitoring system what-so-ever the school has suffered losses from both external and internal sources.  When Rowling was writing for children, this was almost forgivable, but authors who even claim to be writing anything that even remotely classifies as adult (such as porn), a higher standard is required.

To back track a bit, I cannot tell you how many books, movies, and series I have quit because the author or authors were not faithful to their worlds.  I am damn near driven to tears by the sheer amount of betrayal I feel when an author ruins a story by not staying true to the world and characters’ emotions.   By the way, in case you are wondering, this is why I will leave heavy-handed critiques on any story that does this.  I want this garbage to stop!  And the only way for that to happen is to educate bad authors about what they are doing wrong.  

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