Chapter 1
Love is Abloom
A ‘My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic’ Short
Note: Italicized text is a part where my friend helped me out as I am horrible at writing fashion so she write this out for me and allowed me to use it.
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Apple Bloom strolled alongside her big sister as they each carried a cart of apples into town for delivery. She was not required to go, since she was still just a filly, but she enjoyed helping out her sister with her chores every now and then.
They come to one of the residences on their list and Applejack knocked on the door with a hoof. The door opened and Applejack greeted the resident Pony, “Mornin’! We have a delivery of apples fresh from the farm for y’all.”
“Oh! Was that today? It had totally slipped my mind! If you don’t mind, can I have a few minutes to prepare your payment?”
Applejack nodded. “Of course, take all the time that y’all need.”
The resident pony thanked her and shut the door. Applejack then proceeded to sit on her haunches so as to relax for a spell. “I tell ya, these carts seem to get heavier and heavier every season. It’s great for business but a strain on the limbs. I’m glad y’all came to lighten the load Apple Bloom.”
Apple Bloom smiled at her sister and opened her mouth to respond, but was interrupted suddenly by a familiar voice shouting towards them, “Applejack, Apple Bloom, good morning!”
The two of them swerved their heads to notice Twilight Sparkle walking down the path towards them with Spike on her back.
“Well if it ain’t Twilight Sparkle and Spike! What brings y’all two into town today?”
Twilight stopped in front of Applejack and started chatting with her. Apple Bloom didn’t really pay attention to the conversation however as she was busy staring at Spike with her heart all a flutter. She always had a thing for him, ever since they first met. However, she’s never had the courage to tell him about it, mostly due to fear of being ridiculed for liking someone who wasn’t even of the same species.
It seemed that Twilight was in a hurry to get somewhere as her and Applejack’s conversation did not last very long and she started walking away.
Apple Bloom, who was usually able to maintain a form of composure around spike, couldn’t seem to help herself this time around, and was unable to take her eyes off of him even as he started to shrink in the distance. Not even a wave of a hoof in front of her face by Applejack was able to snap her out of her apparent trance. Of course, this caused Applejack to become suspicious, and so she glanced in the same direction as Apple Bloom’s dazed expression. It took only a moment for Applejack to make the connection, and she smiled in response. “Well I’ll be… Does my little sister have a crush on Spike?”
This snapped Apple Bloom out of her trance and she immediately became defensive. “What? No! I was just admiring Twilight’s cutie mark. I hope mine turns out as pretty as hers!”
“I might believe ya if y’all weren’t speaking in such a squeaky voice.”
Apple Bloom didn’t even notice until just then. She cleared her throat immediately and reiterated in a far more normal tone, “I DON’T have a crush on him!”
“Fine, if y’all say so. I just thought it was cute is all,” Applejack replied.
“Wait, cute? You mean it doesn’t bother you?”
“Aha! So y’all DO have a crush him!”
Apple Bloom bit her lip and replied in a soft voice, “Yes…”
Applejack chuckled and wrapped her hoof around her sister’s neck; pulling her in close. “My little sister is growing up! It brings a tear to mah eye,” Applejack said as she made a mock-gesture of wiping a tear away.
Apple Bloom was flustered. “Do you mind?” She insisted as she pulled away from her.
“Now don’t be like that! I think it’s wonderful, I do!”
“Even though he’s a dragon?”
“Love is love little sis,” Applejack said bluntly.
Apple Bloom wasn’t sure how to respond to that.
“So sorry to keep you waiting!” The resident pony said suddenly as the door opened up again.
Applejack turned her attention back to her customer. “That’s quite all-right,” She replied in a polite manner.
Meanwhile, Apple Bloom returned to staring off into the distance where she last saw spike as she pondered her sister’s simple-yet-profound words. If her own sister didn’t see a problem with her infatuation, then maybe there was hope for a relationship after all.
Once Applejack and the resident pony’s transactions were complete, they headed off toward the next residence. Along the way, Applejack asked her sister, “So, are y’all going to tell him how you feel?”
Apple Bloom stared at her. “I… I don’t know.”
“I reckon y’all should,” Applejack said with a smile.
Apple Bloom was skeptical. “What if he doesn’t feel the same way?”
“You’ll never know unless y’all try,” Applejack preached.
Her sister was right. If she didn’t tell Spike how she felt about him, then her dream had no hope of ever becoming a reality. “I’ll think about it,” Was all Apple Bloom said, yet her mind was already made up: She was going to announce her love for him, of that much she was certain. It was simply a matter of figuring out the best way to go about doing so.
The rest of the evening went by without any further discussion on the matter.
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The next day, Apple Bloom had decided how she was going to propose to Spike: She was going to do it looking her best. And to look her best, there was only one pony that could help her: Rarity. And she was already on her way to see her.
When she came to her residence, she inhaled a nervous breath and knocked on the door with a hoof.
“Just a minute!” Rarity’s voice said from behind the door.
As Apple Bloom waited, she pondered just what kind of makeover Rarity would give her, but all of her ideas came out silly and horrifying. She never was a pony of fashion.
Soon enough, the door opened and Rarity peeked her head outside. When she noticed Apple Bloom, she had a surprised look on her face. “Apple Bloom? What are you doing here?”
“I was wondering if you could give me a makeover?”
Rarity’s eyes lit up. “A makeover? I LOVE giving makeovers! Come in, come in!!!” Rarity stepped to the side to allow the little pony inside.
Apple Bloom entered Rarity’s residence and glanced around. As expected, her house was not only finely decorated, but it was as tidy as a house could be. But she expected nothing less from a pony who put fashion and beauty above all else.
The door closed behind her and Rarity trotted over to her work station saying, “I must say, you are the last pony I expected to want a makeover. Whatever brought this on?”
“I’m trying to impress someone,” Apple Bloom replied.
Rarity looked at her with surprise. “I do declare… Is Apple Bloom in love? Who is the special steed? Or should I say stud?” Rarity inquired with a laugh.
“It’s actually not a stallion at all…” Apple Bloom found herself speaking softly again. Apparently, she was still a bit shy about admitting who it was she had a crush on.
“Oh no? Who, then?” Rarity was more intrigued than ever.
“It is…” Applebloom took a deep breath. Then, she exhaled the words that she thought she would never say out loud, “Spike.”
Hearing that name made Rarity all a-flutter. “Well isn’t that just darling? A crush on a dragon. How romantic!”
“It is?” Apple Bloom asked in surprise.
“Of course! A love story between a pony and a stallion are as frequent as the clouds in the sky. But a pony and a dragon? It’s like something out of a fairy tale!” Rarity said with sparkly eyes and a dreamy expression.
Applebloom waved a hoof across her face. “Come back to me Rarity!”
“Oh, sorry! I got a little sidetracked there,” Rarity said with a giggle. “Now let’s get started, shall we?” She picked up her brush and comb using her special magic and stepped toward Apple Bloom.
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“There! All done! What do you think?” Rarity asked as she turned her to face the mirror.
Rarity'd gone for a design that matched Applebloom's personal color-duality of yellow and red, accentuating the pale shade of her skin with lustrous gold in the form of a solid necklace draped along the front of her tiny chest. On the other end of the duality, a large ribbon, also accented with gold, dominated the back of her head, it's shade of red intentionally less saturated than Applebloom's natural red to bring out the deep crimson shade of her freshly-conditioned flowing curls.
The small hoof-shoes of the same shade left her feeling slightly awkward, wobbling with the inexperience of a young lady as she lifted a hoof to admire tiny cut sapphires gracing the front, the omnipresent little stones impishly ignoring the dual color-scheme throughout her outfit from her ribbon to her earrings to keep the outfit playful.
“Don’t you look absolutely ravishing?” Rarity inquired.
Apple Bloom smiled at her reflection. “I can’t believe how different I look! You’re amazing, Rarity!”
Rarity tipped a hoof curtly at her as she held the other to her chest. “You flatter me!”
“How can I ever thank you?”
“All I ask in return is that you don’t let it go to waste.”
Apple Bloom turned to face her. “I won’t. If this doesn’t win Spike over, nothing will!”
“Then, good luck to you!”
Apple Bloom hugged her suddenly. “Thanks again!” With that, she hurried off – albeit somewhat sluggishly as she was not used to running in booties – to show herself off to her dragon love.
Rarity hugged her back with a single hoof and then gave her a wave good-bye as she disappeared out the door. “I do amazing work if I do say so myself,” she said with a quaint laugh before going back to work on some clothing designs.
Apple Bloom pondered what she would say to Spike even as she knocked on the door of Twilight’s residence with a shoed hoof.
Many thoughts ran through her mind – most of them being about how Spike might respond to her confession. Of course, such rampant thoughts only made her more nervous than ever. In fact, it even went so far as to make her second-guess herself. She had just turned around to walk away from her plan when the door opened behind her. Her heart leaped from her chest as she turned around.
She didn’t expect Spike to be the one to answer.
Spiked stared at her with an open mouth expression; one which made Apple Bloom twitch nervously.
“Apple Bloom? Is that you?” Spike finally asked.
“Y… yes, it’s me,” She replied, struggling with her words. She couldn’t help but blush at the way Spike stared at her.
“What happened to you? You look… amazing!”
Apple Bloom was relieved to hear him say that. It made her smile. “You think so?”
“Most definitely! What’s the occasion?”
She braced herself for what she was about to say next. “You are,” She replied nervously.
Spike blinked at her. “I am? What do you mean?”
“I…” She breathed in deeply. This was it! The moment of truth! With ironclad resolve, she said the words that would change her life for the better, or so she hoped, “I love you!”
Spike was speechless, and Apple Bloom could only wait in agonizing suspense for him to respond.
Even though only seconds had passed, it felt like an eternity to Apple Bloom, and she was forced to break the silence by asking, “Don’t you have anything to say?”
Spike rubbed the back of his head unsurely. “I… I don’t… That is, I…” He sighed. “I just don’t feel that way about you, Apple Bloom. I’m sorry.”
Just like that, Apple Bloom’s heart shattered into a million pieces. She stood there, eyes tearing up, as the reality of the situation started to set in: The one whom she loved didn’t love her back.
“Wait, don’t cry!” Spike tried to console her.
But Apple Bloom was too far gone. She turned, tears flowing, and ran as fast as her laced hoofs would take her. Spike yelled out to her, but her profuse sobbing drowned out his words.
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She ran all the way home, stopping for none of the many ponies that tried to ask her what was wrong, and threw herself on her bed of hay to cry. She tore off all of the fancy accessories Rarity had bestowed upon her and threw them to the ground in fury. She couldn’t stand to look at them anymore, let alone wear them, as it only reminded her of her lost love. She cried and cried until she exhausted herself into a deep slumber of misery.
The next day, she awoke to find her accessories mysteriously gone, and her old bow lying next to her. She surmised that Rarity had been by since then, likely to find out how things went, and upon seeing her sad face and the careless way she had strewn about her accessories, already had her answer. Therefore, she must not have felt the need to wake her and instead collected her belongings, returned Apple Bloom’s ribbon, and left in silence.
With a sigh, she tied her bow back in her hair and decided she would go to Rarity and apologize for being so careless with all the fancy attire she had bestowed upon her. As she stepped outside, she suddenly froze in her tracks with a look of horror on her face. In front of her she saw Spike chatting with Applejack about something. She cowered back into the barn and quickly dove beneath the hay of her bed. She didn’t want to face him again after her humiliating display.
“Apple Bloom, are y’all in here?” She heard the voice of her big sister, Applejack, calling out to her. She peeked her head out of the hay – most of it sticking to her hair – and stared at her glumly.
Applejack spotted her immediately and walked over to her. “I reckon last night didn’t go so well, huh?” She asked as she sat on her haunches in front of her.
“Did Spike tell you that?” Apple Bloom asked miserably.
“He didn’t have to. I could tell when I came to check on you this morning. I’ve never seen y’all so miserable before.”
She could feel herself tearing up again as she said, “He rejected me…”
“Be that as it may, he is here to see you, so I suggest y’all talk to him.”
“No! I don’t want to see him! Tell him I’m not here!” Apple Bloom said as she ducked her head beneath the hay again.
But Applejack dug her out and picked her up by the mane with her teeth.
“Hey! Let me go!” Apple Bloom protested and struggled against her.
“You’re going to talk to him whether y’all want to or not!” Applejack said past her mane as he carried her outside.
Apple Bloom complained the whole way until Applejack dropped her off right in front of Spike.
“Now talk!” Applejack demanded as she pushed her forward with a hoof.
Apple Bloom mumbled out a protest and glanced toward Spike who was smiling at her warmly.
Despite his obvious attempt at friendliness, Apple Bloom was still quite cold towards him. “What do you want?” She asked sternly.
“I’m sorry for making you cry,” Spike said, “I didn’t realize it meant that much to you.”
Apple Bloom felt ashamed and looked away from him as she spoke, “Yeah well… It did!”
“But Apple Bloom, don’t you think we’re both a little young for such a relationship?”
Apple Bloom kicked at the ground unsurely. “I don’t know, maybe…”
Spike move to be in front of her so that they were face-to-face. “Then why don’t we just be friends for now and consider a relationship when we’re both a bit older?”
Apple Bloom pondered. Perhaps he was right. She was still just a baby-pony and him, just a baby-dragon. Perhaps she did go a little overboard sprucing herself up and declaring her love for him like that. “I… I guess that would be alright.” She said hesitantly.
Spike smiled in response. “Good. Then how about giving your friend a hug?”
A smile finally spread across Apple Bloom’s glum face and she wrapped her arms around Spike tightly.
Spike returned the gesture and they shared a long, loving embrace with each other.
“Awww, ain’t that just the cutest thing you ever saw Big Macintosh?” Applejack asked her big brother who had since joined her at his side.
“Eyup!” He agreed.
THE END
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this was gre....
wait
a
minute
Why was this story posted again.
nice job id like to see more of this type of suff from you
You get five stars for that picture alone.
Well, that was, ....not too bad, it was a bit short, but overall it was kinda cute, somehow, I don't think Spike would respond quite like that, but I'm going to say good work! I always kinda liked that pairing anyway, so I'll give you four and a half stars
of course, it comes on fimfiction RIGHT after i read it on EqD
Oh god! That picture *dies from adorableness*
That was a cute little story. I never really thought of those two as a couple before.... Well I have seen and thought of stranger things. Good work mate.
Hm. The denouement felt rushed, which weakened the ending in my opinion. The story arc up to the climax was paced reasonably well, and then all of a sudden there's an ending, complete with Spike speaking unlike himself.
Lots of grammar errors and questionable or outright wrong word choices weakened the story technically. Also overwrought, elaborate sentence construction robbed many of your sentences of their punch. Fewer words is almost always better. It's like Mark Twain said: "The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter—'tis the difference between the lightning-bug and the lightning."
Technical gripes aside, I liked the story. It was sweet and endearing, and the core concept of it was solid. With more attention paid to execution, it would have been an excellent story.
I remember reading this a while ago when it was on EqD and I really enjoyed it.
Cool story bro.
This story. I like it! Bring me another! *smashes glass on ground*
175067
Thank you for your review.
In my defense, this was my first pony-related story. Not only was I not as familiar with the characters back then, I wasn't as good a writer. I've improved considerably, which can be seen if you look at my other works. However, all but one of them are clopfiction, which you may not enjoy.
I was skeptical posting this for the longest time because of said reasons, but a little encouragement from my friends convinced me otherwise. I must say I'm... surprised, at all the mostly-positive reviews this received. Thank you all! ^_^
Big Mac. Always there to make an awesome ending. Nice story.
the picture just made me say dawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
This has to be the 500th time somebrony used that pic.
175418 What, as a story header? The second time, more like, the first being Porcelain Secrets.
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Ok, well now that you've figured out your groove, its time to rewrite this... CLOPFICTION STYLE!!!
... PS I'm kidding...
Poor Applebloom.
Awwww Applebloom looks SOOOO CUUUUTE!
EDIT: So is the story. You are amazing!
Well that was.....unexpected, well done.
5/5
175067
Unfortunately then you get into not enough description I myself feel that more description allows you to envision the story more in your mind plus I've seen worst with some ppl writing down everything about the characters as they enter as though the reader has never seen the show (understand it yes like it no) well I'm off to see the rest of his work and see how it's improved
D'aaaaaaaaaaa soo adorable. I loved it
I remember reading this story before I made my account. So glad to see it again!
5/5 and faved!
The picture was co cute!
and the story made me D'awwwww
Great work :D
This was... awesome. Well written, even though this pairing sometimes confuses me, you've made it quite endearing. 4.5 stars.
175634 Agreed; there is such a thing as too-sparse prose. But readers can be trusted to use their imagination to fill in the blanks, as long as the author suggests those blanks for them. There are many professional authors who employ flowery language; it's not inherently a sin to do so. But a sentence that's just right is more powerful than a sentence that meanders on past its purpose. In a story with only a few words like this one, it is important to get the most use out of each word. It's a stylistic preference, not a rule. But if you think of authors whose writing sticks with you, odds are good that their style is spare and incisive.
It seems I'm making a habit of quoting an author in each reply here. This is an example of the work of a great author with a style that I consider near-ideal. Note that he sets the scene and establishes the character solidly in the reader's eye while also indicating the tone of the story. This is the first paragraph of the short story "The Paladin of the Lost Hour," by Harlan Ellison:
This was an old man. Not an incredibly old man; obsolete, spavined; not as worn as the sway-backed stone steps ascending the Pyramid of the Sun to an ancient temple; not yet a relic. But even so, a very old man, this old man perched on an antique shooting stick, its handles open to form a seat, its spike thrust at an angle into the soft ground and trimmed grass of the cemetery. Gray, thin rain misted down at almost the same angle as that at which the spike pierced the ground. The winter-barren trees lay flat and black against an aluminum sky, unmoving in the chill wind. An old man sitting at the foot of a grave mound whose headstone had tilted slightly when the earth had settled; sitting in the rain and speaking to someone below.
hmm interesting... but kinda fast...
That picture is so adorable, I just can't help it sayin dawww at it, and this story is aww the same too, though a bit fast, but good job.
let's take all have a moment of silence for Applebloom, forever friendzoned
Aww, cute a little short though
This is super cute i adore this parring although it seemed a little rushed. Would love to see more stuff like this but dont be afraid to drag out the plot a little bit next time. Still all in all a great story indeed
A really cute story. I was surprised that Spike made such a mature decision and wait for them to be older before pursuing a relationship. Nicely done.
Hm. Simple...I like it.
How DARE you do that to Apple Bloom. BOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!
Short, sweet, and too the point. Nice fic.
I love it, but I hate it how everyone sees them as the same age, Spike is only a little bit younger than Twilight, who might only be around 20-24 years of age (I don't know how horses age so I am using human ages) which might bring spike around 16 or 17, while the CMC are around 10-13.
I never read something that left me feeling so satisfied at the end. You nailed it, my friend!
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Well he is a only a few years younger than Twilight as she hatched him when she was about 5 or so
That cover. Nnngh!
I can’t handle it. It’s too cute!
If I didn’t know they were both children, I would’ve thought she was gonna outright propose MARRIAGE to him.
Only thought that because usually ‘propose’ in these situations refers to marriage.