They'd finally found out... Scoots had always hoped this day would never come, but somehow knew that it had to. She hadn't made any plans though, because she wasn't able to imagine the crusaders' reaction in the past. But now she had to come up with something, and she had to be fast.
This is my first story, so please be gentle, but still critical. I'm always looking forward to hear wether you liked it or if you know what I could make better. However, I will try to upload a chapter weekly, but I still ask you to forgive me if I can't catch the deadline. I'm sorry for any grammatical and/or spelling mistakes, I'm no native, but I tried my best. I hope you enjoy this story, and wish to thank you for reading it.
Sequel: Outcast
Thanks to capekall for editing this.
I like where this is going and I'll give you a fave and an upvote, but two things:
1. New paragraphs for new speakers. Having multiple speakers in the same paragraph is considered bad form and is confusing for readers.
2. AB and SB seem out of character. I have a hard time imagining they'd turn on Scootaloo like that - sure, I'd be pissed if I found out a friend had been stealing food from me, and my parents would be too. If I subsequently found out my friend was homeless and couldn't get a job? I'd be a lot more understanding. Honestly, I can see AJ being less accepting than AB or SB in this situation, given her whole 'Honesty' thing. I'm still interested to see where exactly this goes, but I really think it would be more of a:
"Scootaloo! You stole from us? Why would you do such a thing?"
"Because I'm starving and homeless, and I never took more than I needed to just barely survive."
"... well why didn't you tell us that from the beginning? We're more than willing to let you live with us!"
But yeah, you have my interest :)
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First of all, thank you.
Now that you pointed it out to me, I have noticed, that I didn't really show the reason why she didn't tell their friends she was homeless and all. And thanks, that you want to keep track on the story, I really appreciate it. I will do my best to make it worth it :)
In the next chapters I will fix your paragraph, too, thanks for telling me about this :)
ok huh? why are they overreacting so badly? where is dash and good work so far .
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Thanks
Dash may or may not appear in a later chapter, you will see
So far so good, can't really give it too much of a critique if it's so short (That's what she said). You got my interest, don't lose it.
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Thank you, I'm really gonna try not to lose your interest :)
2200867 Seems you won't. I'm a sucker for sad Scoots stories.
Once again, please remember, new paragraphs for new speakers. Separating paragraphs every time a different character opens their mouth makes it a lot easier to read.
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Sorry. A friend of mine uploaded this because I had to stay in a hospital (without any internetconnection, sadly) and I forgot to tell him to do it. Gonna edit it out right now :)
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Much better, far easier to read now. Thanks!
Well that escalated quickly
good still cant see where this is going tho
I have a bad feeling about that soup...
MORE!!!!
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Will be coming soon, of course
I get the Rainbow Factory reference... Aurora and Orion. Very well played.
nice story i love scootaloo stories
great way to bring rainbow into the story
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Thanks
oooh, this is an interesting turn of events.
Knew it. Somehow I knew.
Great story so far.
MOAR!
O shit. Rainbow Bash is the daughter of Rainbow Dash damn
I sence 
was at work here.
I hope this has a happy ending...
Getting better or worse? hmmm... Only time will tell.
This story reminds me of this song.
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Not sure if I should take this as a compliment, but thanks anyways
Poor Scoot, her first kiss is now her sister. Love the chapter can't wait for more
that was an Awsome chapter
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This is like, the most unfinished seeming, most in need of a sequel story i´ve ever seen.
It´s not bad it just seems cut off in the middle
this story was Awsome
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I told you I was gonna continue the story
This is how far I had planned the story, I will link part 2 in the description of this one. But the story title wouldn't fit anymore if I'd continue it now and I need some time to think about what exactly I'll do. Thanks, though
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Thanks to you, too
squid?
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Curse TBCs
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That was, okay. Everything just kinda happened with no real purpose. It could be good, but I just don't see it.
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Much better now everything's broken up
. Can't wait to read the following chapters.
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freaking awesome. Dashie was given a good intro. Thank you for fixing it up, it was well worth the wait.
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Fixed it
2622021 Don't worry, bash can compete with sweetie bell.
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Anyone see a rocket launch? Oh, nevermind it's just the story.