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You see, without Integra's leach, he'll just start killing stuff for the lulz...
....
Proceed
After you get a freakin' editor and proof reader, that is.
I already can't bear reading this... I'm sorry, but you need to proofread your work.
i enjoy this, even though i don't know the first thing about hellsing
2082042 I agree. He really needs either an editor or at least a proofreader.
Author... you need to:
1 - Space up the text-pattern and dialog, to avoid the ''Wall of Text''
2 - Spell check an make sure that you use the correct words:
-There vs Their
-Here vs Hear
-Use vs Us
-Tin vs Thin
3 - Your grammar and sentence building in general could use some help too.
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And for your enjoyment:
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It feels like I'm reading English with a Russian accent
2085087 I know, as I said before that I am a grammar nazi, and it would help if I had someone to proofreader it so if you or any person out there want to proofread any more chapters that are to come I would really appreciate it
Your spelling and grammar really needs some improvement. Your wording makes the story confusing and hard to read.
Another reason for alucard's impressive dodging is because he was trained by the patty cake champion himself
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How about an update sometime this year.
finally a good Hellsing fic
Are you ever going to update this godamn thing?
hellsing X ponies... This does not bore well. Alucard's personality can be petty much described as borderline insane.
I am going to enjoy this one very much.
I am sure alexander will bring more problems than the vampires XD, also i am really happy the whole team is coming down instead of just Allucard because as cool as he is he is fucking uninteresting..........dude is so op you just know he cant lose
OMG i knew it XD!!!
your grammar is delightfully bad.
Other than that i am really liking this, i want to see(read?) the face of the ponies when happy go lucky Seras eats
oh boy thank the lords Integra was there could you imagine the horror if Chrysalis had tried anything.......the third episode oddly springs to mind as Alucard decides to take a walk through the Hotel.........I cant wait to see there expression(especially twilights) when he starts going off
"I am the bird of Hermes...........Her standeth the Bird of Hermes eating my own wings to make me tame"
The look on everyponys face will be(audibly: gasps loudly) PRICELESS!!!!!!!!
OHHHHH I can feel it coming the final release..... The Bird of hermes shall eat his wings and become tame so that the dead can dance and all of hell will sing
then they will see the Nightmares that would make even discord go cold with fear from. No all the world wil;l learn what true fear is in the face of the Walking hell that is Dracula and his watch Guard the Vampire Seras Victoria
I love it!
Is that the abridged (TFS) Serie or the original one? Cuz i think the abridged on is better.
TheCrimsonFucker
@TheCrimsonFuckr
IT'S NAZIS. #calledit #bitcheslovecannons #fuckmotheringvampire
A Land of Magical Ponies ruled over by 'Goddesses' that raise the sun and moon?
Anderson: HEEEEAAAAATHEEEEEENNNNSSS!!!!!
Oh god Anderson on Equestria.....
Wow, holy shit you need spell check.
how could those pathetic fools defeat us!?! would have been better and less redundant
you to your. Not that glaring of an error but would be caught in even a quick proofreading
2 here. First it's 'excuses'. Second, such was used a bit redundantly here. 'from a lowly drone such as you' would flow much better.
You used two different methods of separation at the same time. Either "It was one of her royal advisors who, unlike most changelings, did not have a horn on their forehead" or "one of her royal advisors who bore no horn on his forehead unlike other changelings" Couple ways of doing this one though it does not work as well if you use several methods at once.
Sentence fragment. This should either be tacked on to another sentence as part of the description or fleshed out to a full sentence.
technically he would not be capitalized since it considered an addition to the quoted phrase denoting how he said it. the shot pain part I don't know what you mean whether it be 'pain shot to his throat', 'shot OF pain', or some other variation.
You get the idea. Try to revise and proofread some of the story or have one of the proofreaders on the site look it over and help you out.
an ork dog?
5236581 yeah I was kinda stump on what kind of voice I should have given him but playing some Warhammer 40k games i got the idea to give the diamond dogs chief an orkish voice
Oh my god Alexander would kill them so hard XD "you're telling me that I haven't been summoned by god but by a self proclaimed god horse to kill their problems? Reeks of heresy!" XD
Gentlemen! We... Are nazis!
It's the fucking/ /NAZIIIIIS!
5236581 red ones go faster
Still annoyed that theirs no Pip.
5292521 STHEL RHEN!!! also I personally dont like the lack of Alucard or Anderson fist fucking these pony heathens......that is all.
Was i the only one imaginig that as london burned the major and the letze battalion were just like "DAFAQ YA GO NIGGA?"
"Und 've, ah Nazis. Und 've want war."
if this equestria I'm guessing their fun Nazis 4194467
Welp.
I don't expected this fic to be alive after 2 years.
Pls finish it.
RUN CMC IT'S A TRAP!
5237647 Please make more