Navy Vet working IT, I usually write about whatever inspires me.
Twilight's life is in danger as a secret organization aims to take the life of Celestia and Luna. After discovering the remains of the vampire Alucard, Twilight is the new leader of an old organization called Hellsing, originally established during the great war by Luna before she became Nightmare Moon. Now Twilight, the Elements of Harmony, and Alucard must face and defeat those who want the lives of the Princesses.
Page generated in 0.084 seconds
Total duration
1,068 users online
2,231,424 hits today, 2,561,572 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Wow, great story! But there is a difference between "your" and "you're". "Your" implies possession. "You're" is a contraction for "you are". Be sure to use the right one, (was tempted to say write won, LOL), but other than that good job. I love how you made Applebloom an analogue to Seras.
8916 Thanks, It's the little things that escape me
did alucard just turn applebloom into a vampire?
8944 Love a good cliff hanger, don't you?
this story is fucking AWESEOM! yes aweseom is now a word
8945 this story is now one of ma favorite stories ever!!!
I have to say I am actually surprised to see a crossover of Hellsing and MLP, you pulled it off fairly well though despite the clashing themes, I am looking forward to reading more of this one.
That is the CREEPIEST DAMN picture I have ever seen.
Where did you find it?
Twilight's a little OoC here. She's not the type to be vindictive or blood thirsty. Other than that, it's pretty good.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Alucard seems too much passive in regard of Twilight, yes he want to respect her directive but he is still a vampire, has still predatory instinct and she, for how strong, it's just another mortal; some slight show of aggressiveness from him would make the story have a greater sense of "realism", and more similar to the anime too.
Thanks for the info. We shall see what will happen. As for Twilights bloodthirst: Spoilers
duude here come the valentines!
WOAH WOAH WAIT I JUST NOTICED WERE THE HELL IS WALTER!!
9565 *sigh* you noticed. adding 8 new characters to the Hellsing series forced others into the nether. But believe me when i say, the changes are fucking amazing. in chapter 5 they will be revealed.
9566
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
My longest chapter yet! also added a few easter eggs for you to enjoy
woah didn't expect luna to be butler XD
11430 The role of the butler has been replaced by Luna, the attack method anyway, and the dialogue in order to advance the plot will be changed to the ponies present and modified in how they would come to the conclusion.
in the coming chapters I'm going to throw in several OC ponies. Don't be haten
I'll make it work out.
Why is it so hard to find crossovers that don't just have a copy&paste of the story only with the characters being ponies? I'd love to see a Hellsing crossover where one of the Hellsing characters (Alucard, maybe Seras) show up. It seems like every crossover I've seen so far is basically the original story with ponies.
Rant aside, the story is still good. I didn't notice many mistakes.
12989 it cant be a crossover if everything is original..... that's like making a Lion King crossover fic that has nothing to do with kings or lions but Fluttershy befriends a manticore by splashing water on its face and oh no i suddenly want to make that.
Overall, this was pretty good for a starting chapter. The beginning was a good blending of both shows. Although the pacing seemed a little rushed and a few parts need a little more elaboration. For example, I can understand using the Hellsing name for crossover sake, but you could have elaborated on why Luna decided to name it that. Additionally, you could have gone more in depth on the circumstances behind the eventual dismissal of the organization after Luna's banishment. Also, Bloom's sudden flashback seemed a tad too revealing. I mean if you toss all that out at once, it kinda looses some of the impact. Save for a few grammatical mistakes and the fast flow, you definitely earn the 4/5 rating.
It may seem that that I'm being critical, but I only respond because I can see so much potential in this story.
I agree with Quill&Talon. Some things need a little more explanation, such as Luna forming Hellsing. This does need to be reworked a bit, grammatical-wise. I'm personally willing to overlook the lack if indentation, but there are a number of places where there are missing commas and others where you used a comma when a period probably would have worked better. You've also forgotten (or missed) to capitalize Twilight's name at least twice as well as a few other missed capitalizations here and there. Always remember to have a new paragraph in between two different characters’ dialogue. Ellipsis have three periods (…) not two. I think in places you meant to say foals (baby horse or pony), not fouls (like a foul ball in baseball.) You have at least one instance of ‘was was.’ Some sentences do sound a little awkward but reading the story out loud can help fix that, as well as the comma problems. In fact, I think a quick read through will fix almost all of these problems, so please don’t feel that I’m being overly critical.
I know that I’m being a total grammar Nazi, but its all in the best interest of both story and author. Believe me, I’ve been there.
SHOT THROUGH THE HEART!!!
DECAPITATION!!!
---------------------------------------------------------
"How The Blood Soaked Prostantant Hell Do You Do That?"
"Fuck You That's How"
TFS FTW!
Ok, based on comments and realizing I just typed out the script of Hellsing for the last chapter, I plan on doing a "flashback" chapter about Luna, Celestia, and Discord. I hope to cover the events described in great detail, unfortunately with collage and work I have not been able to get started. But as school lets out here in two weeks I will have a full month of free time to perfect this fic. I look forward to writing this next installment of love, murder, and betrayal. Also I think I will modify the previous chapters for accuracy and punctuation. if any grammar Nazis out there see something (besides paragraph indents, that's been noted) feel free to comment or contact.
That image makes me afraid of Applebloom.
In the words of a very wise and bloodthirsty police girl, "Bitches love cannons!"
Alucard is still fucking amazing.I can't wait to see the RED EYED applebloom.Against the ghoul motherfuckers :D.
HoRY SHEEETedge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg edge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg edge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg edge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg edge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg edge.ebaumsworld.com/mediaFiles/picture/2066936/82254961.jpg
I thought the iscariot were mainly religious freaks and monster hunters..... They didn't really want hellsing dead..... Well, maxwell did, at the end.... Wait, is millennium gonna come into this at some point? Because an Alhambra would be, in a weird way, hilarious...... Kinda likd the depictions of Alucards victims in the books....
Please, be more original. No 1:1 copy from the original Hellsing
Not original at all
1550434 yea that's why I stopped writing it, and it was too late to change up he story
25929
you done goofed
why is this cancelled?
1552019 Oh, with not original at all I meant that most of sentences were copied 1:1 from the OVAs. Maybe you should consider on re-writing the story, 'cause I really like the idea of Alucard being a pony
8995It's probably because of her link to Alucard.
Why is Yahn a chic?
Get it? Because she's a griffon! Hahaha! That's funny.
The only thing I dislike about this story is Anderson. In this story he is soo backwards its ridiculous. Hellsing and Iscariot are both Christian organizations. By the logic in this story, then Iscariot worships Satan and wants to kill God himself. You may say that Isacariot has a diffrent religion, but that defeats WHY Anderson exists. Anderson is an anti-villan, he is good, not evil. Hellsing is a reversed kind of story. Alucard seems good for he sole purpose that he is the protagonist. In all reality, Alucard could and probably kill everyone on the planet should he not be restrained. Alucard is nothing but harnessed evil, like a sentient poison gas. In the end, Anderson is fighting for the freedom of humanity from the threat of vampires. A much more fitting story would be Celestia as Isacariot and Luna as Hellsing. Enemies with the same goals, diffrent views and diffrent ways of going about them.
hey mind if i adopt this story from you?
5184507 sure, toss me some credit and were good
5186346 alright just got to post the story on fanfiction.net and also I will give you credit on every chapter.