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When Twilight goes to show Princess Celestia and Luna her original spell, what happens when one of smallest of things is off by a few strokes of a brush?

Why, Time is turned back for the two Princesses. And Twilight, being the royal student and by ancient and outdated laws dug up by a book keeper, has to help the now young Princesses rule while they wait for the spell to wear off.

Or will it be too late, and a Certain upstart Prince get his hoof in the door, and take over canterlot?

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Comments ( 18 )

Oh god this sounds so hilarious and exiting! This sounds like it has EPIC levels of potential so you better not "The Element of Chaos" us on this one!

Bahahahaha. That is just a perfect set up.

i have been waiting for a story like this for ages, please update soon

Not bad and looking to be quite entertaining. My only complaint is that some of the writing seems to be redundant. Things like mentioning the table needing to be in the center with the fossil on it in the center just reads a bit off to me.

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If your talking about the...non-updating schedual.
My problem about it is I have very little inspiration as of late for and I'm trying to find time to think of exactly How I'd like to go with it.
Don't worry, It'll come. Eventually...:twilightsheepish:

One question:
"Why, Time is turned back for the two Princesses. And Twilight, being the royal student and by ancient and outdated laws dug up by a book keeper, has to help the now young Princesses rule while they wait for the spell to wear off."

She's... what? Is there something missing here?

Also: Fingers crossed for this not being just a good versus evil story!

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...I'm afraid I don't see the problem. Perhaps point it out?

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It's this part:
"And Twilight, being the royal student and by ancient and outdated laws dug up by a book keeper,"

Maybe I'm simply experiencing a massive reading failure, but is seems to me that there's something missing. Did the book keeper dig something up about Twilight, or is Twilight the book keeper because of ancient laws dug up?

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A yet unnamed book keeper dug up a set of old and 'outdated' laws that are still in effect.

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Ah, I see it now! Thanks for clearing that up!

Also: Feel free to delete the mess my comments made if you like; I feel bad for cluttering up your comments box like this!

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No problem at all.
I most likely won't delete them in case another person has the same question. They can just look to this and go 'Oh, hey that's why.'

Puting this in my read later also don't let the new epasode bother you it dose not halve to affect the story if you don't want it to.

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Haven't seen it yet.
I'm actually watching it at the moment. And knowing me, it'll probably have little to do with it.

If I was interested in more Blueblood hate, I'd read My Little Alicorn again. Which actually is pretty much this exact concept, except without Luna. I think I'll pass on this one.

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First.
I'd love to have a proof reader, Batman.
Second: The second chapter is almost done Morbo.
Third: It's fine fluttershy.

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Your free to your opinions.
Thank you for stopping by.

I didn't sleep last night and I have to stay up until at least a half hour after midnight due to New Years.

Hopefully, this isn't too similar to that wondrous tale, My Little Alicorn which along with its sequel have caused this.
Y' know, Twilight took it better than I expected. I expected a hair strand to stick up, her eyes to twitch, and mental insanity. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm tracking this:pinkiehappy:

Oh and there's one little problem. Officially, Apple Bloom is two words.

Also,

The other filly was a bit bigger, only a bit bigger than Applebloom by Twilight’s guess, she was a creamy white. A long Cotton Candy mane sat upon her head that seemed to float above her back, showing off a small pair of white wings while a longer and sharper horn sat on the Filly’s head.

Why are "cotton candy" and "filly" capitalized

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