Scootaloo has dreaded this day -- the day she would have to give her Family Appreciation Day presentation.
Partially inspired by AmberWings's Final Dreams of a Filly/I couldn't wake you, because you can never wake up again... Though I don't think this is on par in terms of sadness. I don't know. You tell me.
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Decent one-shot
*Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap* Great story. Short 'n sweet
-Glassed
5 stars! Good job man!
Glad to see a Scootaloo story with a happy ending
A decent job for a one-shot. A solid 4/5 from me
Great story, but i think that the huge space between the story and the title is not such a good touch
Nice, touching story. I do have a critique, however – your first 5 or so paragraphs noticeably echo each other, and I think the story would flow better if you trim that portion to be more concise. Also, as FiMPonify pointed out, the huge gap between your author's notes and the main body of your story is distracting, and could use cropping.
Otherwise, congrats on your first pony fic!
There's nothing better than some decent Scootalove! :3 I just love reading stories exactly like this one once in a while.
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Bravo sir, bravo!
A very touching ending
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A very enjoyable story!
Hope this won't be your only story on FIMFiction. I'm looking forward to more!
that last line was AWESOME
All I can say is: DAWWWW
Great story. Bravo!
Very cute, and you did capture the feelings of somepony who lost her parents. A nice one shot, keep writing!
Ehhhhh, it is a good premise, but that ending seemed way too simple. Just like it was as simple as that. "Oh, you don't have parents? Well, now you're living with me, yay!" Way too easy. Crying one moment to happy as can be the next.
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This is quite the story my good sir please keep up the good work.
at least it had a happier ending than "I couldn't wake you up", I still bawled but they were happy tears
I wouldn't be surprised if the lesson at the end is used in the show
Very good story, looking forward to reading more from you.
beautiful.
Not sad, :I I want MORE! BWHAHAHAHA *Greedy Spike*
Nice work! That was a good story for only being one chapter!
The only thing I felt was lacking was dialogue between Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash when she found her.
Maybe not necessarily dialogue either, but some more actions and reactions. But other than that I liked the story!
4/5
Very nice!
I fully expected to cry when I heard it was a scootasad fic. Thank you for averting my expectations.
Short, sweet, and so wonderful. :D
5 stars I just wish I could actually cry
I didnt cry, but it was beautiful. Scootaloo stories can be so sad
And THIS right hereIs why we need to make a petition with the moderaters and admins that they include a HEARTWARMING TAG! I'M WITH 128740 THIS GUY RIGHT HERE! 5/5!
You sir are both a gentle colt and a scholar.
TOO SHORT!!
but still good
and then and then and then keep trying decent idea tho always enjoy scoot, dash adopt fics
I love me some Scootadopts. This has some good stuff going on, I'm not convinced Scootadopts work as a one shot because, told well they have a lot of questions that need answering. This could be a solid beginning to a story. Keep writing.