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what... that's it?!?! WTF?!?!?!
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There will be more, I assure you. I may even add to this little tale specifically. Not to mention, she isn't the only one that is going to be interviewed. It was a 60 minute writing prompt, so I only wrote that much.
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Ah, but I like to use those terms. I feel in my fanon that they are, in some way, evolved from ponies... it's in their culture and nature. Something like that. A unicorn did it. In addition, those who prefer to enjoy their ... ah... clop... to involve ponies- they likely can mostly imagine them as such if that is their thing. I want everyone to enjoy what I'd done; if that helps, that would be great.
I was curious if anyone could tell me why the like/dislike ratio on this is so... close to even. I'm new here... I can't imagine what I've done is too bad, since this story has more favorites than likes... but my experience online indicates to me that at people will thumbs things up about 90% of the time... when things are close to even, that's usually kinda bad.
Interesting start, I can't wait to read more...
Umm.....wings DO in fact have bones, just saying
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Yes, that is true. But the wing bones are not alterations of bone systems in the human anatomy... more of an addition. There might be some... slight alteration... shoulder blade maybe. But if you amputated a pegasus' wings, (my story's pegasus, that is), it would just be like the earth sort. If you removed the beak from a anthropomorphised griffin... that would be something really horrifying. Think the spitter from L4D2.
hm... go on...
I sense potential of a great story.
1571050. OH, ok I was a little confused, and great story so far
So....Pinkamena Diane Pie is the "insane evil genius" side of Pinkie Pie. If you can somehow get the full story on Pinkamena's sex life without her baking you into some delicious gale-wind cupcakes, you are best pony.
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While I find some bits of the Cupcake story interesting... most definitively a comic 'sequel' I read on derpiboo.ru involving Twilight, I do not interpret that side of her as such. It is my thinking that Pinkie is bipolar. "Pinkamena" is not a split personality in any sense; it is just when she is depressed. There are certain signs of schizophrenia that pop up (especially the paranoid type), but nothing abnormal for a sufferer of bipoloar I that is manic heavy. The greater the mania (and let's face it, she is manic 24/7) the harder the crash. She has a vivid fantasy life as well... so things like her inanimate party guests are not surprising. I have not decided on a story exactly... but those who are diagnosed as Bipolar I often spend both ends of the spectrum making poor decisions... sex is often at the top of the list of such bad decisions. In a manic state, sufferers feel invincible; unprotected sex, wild consumption of drugs including alcohol (which leads to sex), making commitments you can't live up to. I feel she has learned to channel this energy though, and so she lives quite happily in her near perpetual state of mania. It's when this crashes that life goes bad for her. Poor decisions made in depression are ones of desperation. Falling into abusive relationships, getting into dangerous situations; it's all a matter of lowered self-worth. Her mania is fueled by the happiness of those around her... I think the story about Pinkamena will center on that need... and perhaps how she is degraded and humiliated in what she ends up doing.
But, that's just my first brain storming on the subject.
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To answer your question on the like/dislike ratio, I think what's going on here is that you're writing for a very specific niche audience. (I'm within that niche, so I don't say that as a criticism.) There are some factors you've got working against you here:
1) Near as I can determine, the readers who click on stories labeled with "Sex" are doing so in order to find masturbation material. Your story requires that you use that categorization, but you're not actually writing clop. To quote Swiper from comments of your other story: "the essential idea is unique enough: that somepony wants an Equestrian version of the Kinsey reports." The interview format that develops your story and characters are at odds with the cut-straight-to-graphic-physical-descriptions that the average reader expects. The downvotes, in this case, can be read as a sort of ragequit meter from people forced to adjust their expectations. Possibly, clearer labeling in the summary could help here. Possibly not (and Swiper's point about the summary already being seriously tl;dr should be factored in).
2) Stories giving any sort of nod to sexual ethics, and similarly stories about sexual relationships in the meta sense, are horribly underrepresented in clop (as they are in porn generally). This makes me sad, but it's a fact. Fortunately, the fandom does have Romance Reports as a sort of gold standard in the latter category, and some other authors like Chuckfinley, Norsepony, etc who wrap their heads regularly around SSC. I'm still trying to figure out where the niche actually is here for that; I just stumble across it occasionally and bookmark and share.
3) You're also writing humanized pony -- which I suspect is a knee-jerk downvote magnet, though not to the extent of #1 -- with an odd set of strict rules that doesn't seem to actually make much difference to the plot of your story. I don't know a good way to ask this so I guess I'll just come straight out: are there comfort-zone issues here with writing about pony sex? You could change virtually nothing in your story and drop the anthro descriptors entirely, so I'm not certain why it is you've made that choice (other than "that's how it is in my head", which is legitimate; it's only an issue since you're so explicit about specifying it in an otherwise ambiguous story that's mostly conversation anyway).
On an unrelated note, I'd like to state my opinion as a reader that the series feels like it would be better served as a single story with multiple chapters, so that you could cross-link all the material and present it in a more cohesive format. I can see meta-reasons against that (my limited experience is that the exposure of a new story is higher than a new chapter of a little-read story)* but I think treating this as a single project would also give you the opportunity to develop it over time, and let a plot fall into place. If you as author treat each story as self-contained, then the only meat to each story is the interview conversation itself, and I think that as long as you're trying to make serious points about pony sex, you should double down and see how that exploration develops as part of a single continuity.
Either way, I do hope you continue, and will be tracking and watching.
(Here via the Serious Stories submission. Which ... is awkward, because it doesn't actually meet the posting criteria as listed, so I do have to agree that you need to withdraw it or talk to a group moderator. However, I'm glad that you did post it, because otherwise I wouldn't have seen it. If there are other groups where these stories' submission has been more well-received, let me know so I can add myself there as well.)
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* Note: Site rules do prohibit submitting submitting new chapters of existing stories as stories unto themselves. I seriously doubt you're running afoul of this if each interview is meant to be self-contained, but see my point about the benefits of folding them together.
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Quick response; the intro is now changed. Follow the links in it to my blog entrees which may answer a few more questions. Any other questions, feel free to repeat them. I'm going back to writing the start of the interview for Pinkie.
Thanks for the response... I'll give a better reply later.
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It's interesting that you talk about putting them together... I've honestly felt like splitting them apart. Each character will have at least three, if not more like six to eight, stories to tell. That's not including the pre-interview and post-interview phases. The two stories I've put up are shorter than I mean them to be, and will be edited to beef them up into fuller stories. Mostly towards the end of the stories, where I rushed. Flutter Shy's story didn't even conclude properly. Thing is... each of these stories have different characters. Fluttershy's character list doesn't expand much beyond what you've seen here; Twilight's list is fairly short, but a bit longer, and AJ's is slightly longer than that. But Rarity, Dash and Pinkie all have very long lists... as does Celestia (Luna not so much) and so does the CMC. As for who directly shows up in the stories, it's only just Gale Wind and whomever he is interviewing. But there will be important characters in each chapter that may only show up in their chapter.
Perhaps I am getting a bit too... tied into the character part of things... but, it is worth noting. I suppose the way I will be writing the CMC story is similar to what you are talking about. It will be the trickiest story to construct, I am certain. The stories do not have huge overlaps, though. Of the characters being interviewed, excluding the CMC, only two will overlap heavily. Hmm... well, I suppose Celestia and Luna do... but not for romantic/sexual reason; it's only because they are sisters and of course important parts of each other's lives.
This is my defense of my position. But, I am new here... perhaps I am viewing this in a way that is not effective for the audience. As such, I look forward to a rebuttal, and I am still open to the idea.
that is kinda disturbing on a very mild level of mildness.....IM OKAY WITH IT
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If I aim to disturb at all, I aim to disturb because it is entirely believable. There is nothing extreme here, considering other things that have been created among the cloppers. But if I'm doing things right, you'll go 'That's kinda disturbing... because she might just really do that.'.
1579116okay then, thanks for clearing that up
*enthusiaticness*
so good
keep up the good work x3
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pinkie...pie?
my pinkie D':
nuuuuu
</3
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I'm a bit surprised that this seems so shocking for Pinkie Pie. This is a bit of an extreme moment, but still, I feel like it is fairly consistent. Pinkie loves to make people happy, and loves to have fun. To her, sex could be an easy way to accomplish that. Of everyone in the Mane Six, she is by far the least likely to be selective about friends. Especially after 'Too Many Pinkie Pies' (though I wrote this before it aired) we can see that she hates to choose between friends. She is constantly conflicted about the idea that if she gives to one she can't give to another. I imagine if she abstained from sexual relations, she'd be fine... but once she started, she'd want to experience it all- everyone, everyway.
I think in a way I'd hope you'd not see Pinkie as lesser in some way due to this, but better understand those who act like her in real life. If this encourages one person to stop and go 'I won't think of this person as a slut because Pinkie Pie in the real world might do the same thing and she is pretty awesome'... I can know I've made a difference with what I've written. It's a pretty crazy hope, I know.
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yeah well it's true. she IS the party pony
it's just, never thought of THAT kind of party or atleast not THAT bad.
i had no problem until i heard about her taking it up the ass in the mouth by two blind folded stallions...
it makes sense, but hard to swallow.
I take your response a bit as a compliment. Not that I intended to write something for your precise reaction... but clearly you saw the Pinkie I wrote very much the same as the one you know. You could only be shocked if it felt like the Pinkie I wrote was the same character.
this... i approve
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Yes, it was. I am reorganizing. The problem with writing a story that can be written out of order and in fact is written out of order... and then publishing it out of order... is that the chapters get messed up. Especially when I realize I need to add chapters in before something. There is actually a whole new chapter in there, not yet published.
Title of the chapter is '...And Eat It Too'.
There is also going to be massive editing going on. Masquerade may be nearly rewritten. Blog post saying all this soon.
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That is all.
1736037 I was listening to this when I looked at your .gif. Fits perfectly.
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Listening to what?
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Hmmm... It seems that the link didn't appear...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wk0V9Aufrpg
Let's see if that worked.
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2642872 !!!
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Punctuation is certainly exciting, but was there a real comment to be made?
2647632 ?!?!
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So.... Best. Fic. Ever?
2654595 No.
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I don't think so either, but I'd like to know what you think for real, though.
2670654 The ellipse was a 'kinda weird, but I like it, keep going' sort of ellipse. &_& I thought that was obvious.
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Not really. I thought it might be a 'I don't even know what to say. This is crazy and stupid, don't know which more.' But wasn't sure. I think it is time to get writing again...
2671254 I was being sarcstic. I guess tone doesn't really come across as well if you're not verbally saying it.
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It is difficult to say the least. But, glad to see it wasn't so bad.