• Member Since 15th Jul, 2012
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BronyDerp117


A dood from the west. I'm not a brony anymore and I haven't posted here since I was teenager, but I hope you enjoy the few stories I managed to finish back then!

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I've lived my life to it's extent. I've run my course. My friends are now gone, and I am ready to join them. But, before I leave and begin an entire new journey, there is a single lesson I must share. I spent my entire life researching friendship, but I never stopped to ask: What is friendship?

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Comments ( 48 )

Wow, what a touching story. :moustache: Have a mustache

Quite lovely. I think you used the word "leaf" exactly two times too many in the first part, and "conscious" should be "conscience", but apart from that I found nothing wrong, and especially enjoyed the Twiluna in there :twilightsmile:

an excellent idea and well written. i would rather you did not tell us all the friendship lessons in the beginning but it did not noticeable detract from the story. Good Work like fav mustache :moustache:

1427001>>1427013>>1427418 Thanks guys! :twilightsmile:

Good story mate
just like My Little Dashie you nuked my feels
have some 'staches:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

i normally don't read short stories glad i gave this one a chance off to dig through the rest of your writing and favorites.:fluttercry:

That ending. Know what it calls for? A sequel.

Definatly a great story I the only short stories I have read are one that were recommended but I am very glad that I read this it was very touching I felt that I agree with veonetric it should definatly have a sequel I am personally suprized that I didn't expect it to say that friendship is magic, please write more this was a fantastic story, very touching.

:fluttercry: this story is good

Damn, this story has the feels....

I agree with the others, a sequel is definitely called for!

1432172>>1432430>>1432469>>1432684>>1433160 Thanks guys! Glad you liked it. :twilightsmile: And by the way, I am planning on doing a sequel. It might be another one-shot, but I also have an idea for a multi-parter sequel.
1432726 I've never been featured, so it would be pretty cool to see this story featured :pinkiehappy:

1433595 I usually don't like stories like this where Twilight or any of the others die, but this one turned out to be good. I feel bad for Luna :fluttercry:

That was very good, I'm pleased i took the time to read this.

I liked the last like you added-

twilight had just ended, and it was now time to lift the moon.

- It was very well placed...

Just one correction...

Your welcome.

That should be " You're ".

1433962 Glad you liked it!
As for the correction, excuse me as I go slam my face into a wall repeatedly. :facehoof:

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Haha, the face wall, when a hoof ain't good enough :applejackunsure:

1427013 Does it sound less repetitive with the leaves now in the first paragraph?

Yes a sequel sounds great please make it more than a one shot though I believe that it would be much better with more int it your stories are fantastic so you should defiantly write more. :pinkiehappy:

This was really pretty, although the Twiluna shipping is a bit odd.... Still, nice story, though it could use a bit more feels maybe. Overall, very nice.
Sequel wanted. Who is the father? And what is dis prophecy?:pinkiegasp:

1460411 Sequel being written soon :twilightsmile:
Maybe.... :trollestia:

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You better Pinkie Promise on dat sequel!

Wow... this is some seriously deep stuff here. Nice work!

Luna turned around, and walked out of the room, for the twilight had just ended, and it was now time to lift the moon.

That was a nice touch. Can't wait for the sequel!

1466311 Glad you enjoyed it! And thanks for the favorite and watch!

maybe a little to thick on the friendship stuff... but beside that it was okay :3

That was really sad...But super well thought out. I loved the analogy with the tree and leaves... Really really good. :pinkiehappy:
I found a typo, by the way:

Friendship is comforting, warmth, companionship, passion, happiness, and many more.

(Much.)
Anyway, awesome job with this story! :twilightsheepish:

1521676 Thanks! I'll get to fixing that right away.

I am cryign a little. :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry: so deep... please gimme a sequal..... *breaks down into a ball of an emotional mess* *you dun good... you dun good*

2065309 Thanks! :twilightsmile:
The sequel might/will come...eventually...

1466348 y u so good at writing?! Are you going to make a sequel?

2544413 Maybe eventually. Not sure.

2545429 You have GOT to make a sequel. You have earned a watch, good sir.
Now you will never lose track of the time.

With the quality of this you really should make a sequel. Good luck if you decide to and an excellent story here.:derpytongue2:

This barely made it into my favourites list.
Overall a good story, but lacks depth, any real emotional impact.

"We'll see her again. In a hundred years, when the lost elements reunite and resurrect them." Celestia said with a comforting smile.

I smell a sequal.

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