Big Tits and Ectoplasm

bkam

bkam #1 · Nov 1st, 2023 · · ·

Maybe it’ll be some old perv that’ll get the kicks at seeing a young wet mare with a sparkling pair of humongous igloos with her nipples visible for all to see.

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Breathtaking Carnality #2 · Nov 1st, 2023 · 3 · ·

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Respect the igloos!

Exuno

Exuno #3 · Nov 1st, 2023 · 4 · 1 ·

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It really feels like this is mostly an excuse for you to use as many objectifying terms for breasts as you can. It's very much appreciated!

Cinnamon's got just enough spark to be fun to watch, but not enough to be sympathetic and get in the way of indulgent hot silly stuff here. Hands and groping are great, and not worrying corporeal limits and how they get around makes them extra fun. My own degenerate preferences couldn't help but wish for some of that intangible haunting to intrude inside and maybe mix up the poor slut's spirit a bit; but everything we do get is nice and fun and well balanced.

Thanks for writing!

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Breathtaking Carnality #4 · Nov 1st, 2023 · 2 · ·

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It really feels like this is mostly an excuse for you to use as many objectifying terms for breasts as you can. It's very much appreciated!

Ngl, I read that first half, and I was prepared to delete the comment lmao. Had us in the first half.

Cinnamon's got just enough spark to be fun to watch, but not enough to be sympathetic and get in the way of indulgent hot silly stuff here.

That's really interesting. I wrote this just because I thought the idea was hot, but it lack the element of my usual way of approaching clop in that the character's personality really jumps out. I find that understanding what kind of character I'm handling can make the scene so much hotter. I could have gone back and given Twist a little more personality, but I rushed the story out in time for Halloween. Still, really happy to hear that the character worked regardless!

Exuno

Exuno #5 · Nov 1st, 2023 · 3 · ·

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I've somehow dodged the rest of your work so far, and I can't comment on the specifics of how you usually do things. Well expressed and detailed characterization is great, and I definitely admire striving for it — but I think there's some things that get understated when thinking about Porn, due to the cultural stigmas and less common critical analysis of it.

Maybe the most fun and effective way that I can express it is that by not detailing other aspects of Twist much; this fic defines her 'personality' as "has a huge rack". Which isn't really a valid or acceptable answer, but that wrongness and simplicity adds to the appeal — especially in something already Non-con and fantastical anyway. The ghost (for as little motivation and depth it gets as well) doesn't care about her other than that trait, and as a reader, I don't either, and that's fun (and a bit gross — intrinsically linked.)

There's plenty of other avenues to derive sexiness from, but I think a less is more approach gets overlooked, because — as you demonstrate, it feels like lower-quality writing, or not trying as hard, and gets an implicit shame from that. But if you'd ended up putting more into all this — at what point am I not even thinking about wobbling, groped, handled boobs, but instead about the trauma this likeable innocent mare is suffering, or the dramatic origin story of how this ghost manifested these powers, or — something that feels like not the good stuff?

The idea is very hot.

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Breathtaking Carnality #6 · Nov 1st, 2023 · 2 · ·

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But if you'd ended up putting more into all this — at what point am I not even thinking about wobbling, groped, handled boobs, but instead about the trauma this likeable innocent mare is suffering, or the dramatic origin story of how this ghost manifested these powers, or — something that feels like not the good stuff?

I wasn't even thinking about it from a traumatic angle. I was thinking more like going back and making her more tsundere about the whole situation to make her cuter. Although I'll write straight-up non-con, I try to avoid depicting traumatic experiences. I did that a few time in my older fics, but even those have their own loopholes.

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