It's like they say: "Viva la Vida"
[UNDER RECONSTRUCTION]
Chrysalis, the queen of the changelings was defeated twice, the first time at the wedding of Cadance and Shining Armor and the second time in her own kingdom, suffering a historic defeat. All because of Starlight Glimmer.
Now we have to wait for the great word that all villains like to see: Revenge. Or is not it?
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Orthographically speaking, the most abundant hiccup is the lack of punctuation to separate the characters from the narrator. Yes, there are double quotes, but no commas or periods. And this is most abundant in the first half of this chapter.
There are also some lines in which I think they are missing a word, such as:
The dinner scene felt a little lacking.
Beyond that, I'm intrigued by the story you want to present.
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I'll admit that in the dinner scene I didn't have much creativity at the time I was writing it (around August), so it turned out like this, and I'm still learning to write in this form, I think I should be able to write better in the next chapter.
Thanks for reading the story!
that's the harsh truth. I mean if that magic of harmony or friendship nor an Alicorn's protection didn't aid the ponies, they know actual hard work.
Will Starlight question the Changelings that the ponies once called them monsters and freaks, maybe she'll think that's why some of the races hate ponies before friendship
Lovely story. The extensive usage of dialogues to move the story forwards is quite suffocating, and I mean it in a good way. The story itself is built on suffocating emotions, so the style is fitting.
As a fellow non-native speaker, I can definitely relate to your difficulties trying to write in English. The nuances in the delicate English vocabulary might never be fully grasped by the likes of us, but it doesn't mean we can't build a world that speaks to the readers.
If it's not too rude, I hope you could give my stories a quick visit sometime?
Edited: Oh, I finally get it. The tenth vote reveals total vote count.
I think the title of this chapter is a little inconsistent with its content. This chapter is less about “research” and more about some kind of struggle with “inner demons,” “forgotten memories,” “hallucinations,” or “ghosts of the forest.” (I still don’t know what it was.)
That's a very vague way to describe what we were shown in the comic, don't you think? Or is this one of the freedoms you took to adapt the comic and made it fit your story?
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The second one.