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Love me some Ember fun.

It's unusual for spelling and grammar to improve nearer to the end of a story. I really wanted to get into this one since Ember has so few, but it kept jarring me out of my imagination. Too many examples to call out, but one is when Ember was referred to as Amber.

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I appreciate the sharp eyes of my readers. Very often these errors slip by the eyes of proofreaders, as well as spell check programs. Thank you :twilightsmile:

There wasn’t a single mare of breeding age in the Dragon Lands that wouldn’t want to breed this strong leader

"mare"?

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Thank you for the sharp eyes. It was meant to say "mate". :twilightsmile:

A few hours later, Amber heard the sound of numerous flapping wings outside her royal throne room. The males were here, and she could almost smell the desperation mixed with gems and gold that they brought. But among the dragons who were gathering into the throne room, there was one who certainly stood out. A blue and white shared dragon, with wings that seemed to be of a perpetual night sky, with stunning looking yellow horns, claws, and spikes along his body. Ember didn’t recognize this dragon, but he was certainly attractive. The only thing he lacked was any treasure in his claws.

I noticed you misspelt Ember's name in this sentence.

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Thank you, when I write this up and have a Spellcheck, it often misses some things. :twilightsmile:

This was a beyond epic story I can't wait to read the sequel.

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