• Member Since 9th Mar, 2023
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Hope to share my skills as a writer and storyteller.

Comments ( 14 )

Amazingly well done.

Definitely top marks there.

Thanks. Glad you liked it. Hope you’ll continue to check out my work in the future.

Congrats on your first successful story. Keep up the good work.

Underexposed character, I approve!:twilightblush:

Good set-up and hot finish. All in all, a solid first story! :ajsmug:

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The teen was named Sky, as he was the caterer

I'm pretty sure you meant "and", not "as".

He could see that despite her title being a foyer

I really have no idea what you're trying to say here.
Foyer: 1. A lobby, corridor, or waiting room, used in a hotel, theater, etc.
2. The crucible or basin in a furnace which receives the molten metal.

"I'll say this, your uncle has a weird imagination," said Sky as he returned the girl the script.

So her uncle is the writer as well as the director? I mean it's not impossible, but it's not that common. Usually directors interpret a script that someone else has written.

Years of being culinary chefs were inhabited by the boy

That's a very awkward way of putting it; I think you might want to change your phrasing here.

she was one of the few hard workers who actually gave a shut about their job

Obvious typographical error.

turned the diner into a small restaurant

What's your definition of "diner" if it isn't "a small restaurant" already?

He sort didn't cut the meat through all the way. So there was a hidden bone in the serving he gave my mother.

Should be "sort of" in that first sentence, but I find myself wondering just what sort of meat he was working with. I mean, I'm no expert, but I've only ever worried about hidden bones with fish. With most of the meat I eat, the bones are pretty readily apparent.

we even have people book in advancement

The term is "in advance", and that really isn't that uncommon with restaurants.

I'm sorry, I wanted to enjoy this because I'm a sucker for girls in glasses (like Juniper), but I don't think I can finish reading it. Since I didn't read the whole story, I won't be voting either up or down on it.

Your loss.

Given your poor command of the language, I don't think it's much of a loss at all.

Nah. Still your loss.

Wow, this was so amazing! I love how you show your OC's close relationship with Juniper. Keep up the good work and I won't mind if you made a sequel to this. 10/10

Happy 1st Anniversary!

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