Twilight and Celestia have been happily married for millenia at this point. Like many other families, children come into the picture. For two immortal alicorns producing mortal foals, this has some rather nasty unintended consequences.
My entry for the Thirteenth Bimonthly Twilestia Contest. The contest prompt was: nuisance.
Cover art is a combination of this image of Midnight Sparkle by MajorCooke and this image of a crying Twilight Sparkle by HSF. The two were compiled together by myself.
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Pretty sure this should be "one" instead
This is a great take on the psyche of an immortal being. Especially one that was raised with the mindset of a mortal. Celestia's reaction just goes to show the dichotomy even more.
That entirely depends on whether you feel it should or not. I don't think it necessarily needs it, though parts of the story do fall under the sad tag
in its own way its a gift to always be there for your children, for them to know they will never have to bury their parents, to watch them wither away. I watched 3 grandparents whither away to nothing and it hurts so bad. There was a japanese guy who outlived 2 generations of his kids, who all lived long healthy lives, ya it must have hurt him, but his kids never had to do what almost everybody in history has had to and bury their parents
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Oh woops! Good catch!
Doesn't she still have to raise the sun?
I know, for the story - cuddles, but still.😅
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Uh… Luna’s going to do it. It’s now officially canon that whenever Celestia doesn’t raise the sun, luna does it to make up for the 1000 years that Celestia raised the moon (it was Luna’s idea)
If you remember and equally suffer each passing of loved ones, with long enough life you would only accumulate grief up to point that you grieve all the time being completely disabled from actual life. Dullification of impact, more easy access to acceptance and forgetting previous sufferings are natural adaptation mechanism. It would be extremely foolish to blame person who lost their loved for not suffering if this is their hundreth loved, much less thousandth and even less ten thousanth. Main issue is holding ability to love after all this.
A couple grammar issues, most notably:
The story overall was good and I liked that you had Celestia state the need for a therapist, though I’m not quite sure how well this fits in with the prompt of “nuisance.”
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Oops, thanks for catching that.
The prompt ‘nuisance’ comes from how Twilight has come to feel about the deaths of her children after so many years. She feels like it’s just a minor inconvenience, or a nuisance.
For example:
Just read this. Love your unique take on the prompt! It’s a very real and very interesting exploration of continued grief and immortality.
An immortal being not caring about the deaths going on around them after a couple thousand years shouldn't be to surprising, in fact I'm surprised it took, what? About 5000 years for Twilight to get over the deaths and not care anymore and then another 1000 years to finally confess that she doesn't care about the deaths anymore?
In real life, it would probably only take 1000 years for any immortal being to stop caring about the deaths going on around them, death is apart of life and any immortal being would understand that far better than any mortal.
The concept of this story is interesting, I never read a story even close to being similar to this, very unique.
Her justification for calling herself a monster is rather ironic, and in a tragic way very Twilight.
Not being able to feel anything in that kind of situation is just another form of shutting down.
I've been thinking for a while now that for someone as high strung as Twi, immortality isn't going to work without the occasional therapy session.
In more than one way, the purple one cares too much.
Tsk Twilight.
You got 6000 years. 2 known examples to study. Vast magical power. And the resources of a nation at your command. And you still haven't cracked immortality?
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Maybe it's impossible? Unless she makes everyone an Allicorn which that would probably be a bad idea, I mean what would happen if even one of them turned evil? Wouldn't want another Nightmare Moon or a more powerful version of Sombra.
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With 100's of good alicorns, stopping a bad alicorn is probably not too hard, hopefully.
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Not unless most of them end up turning out like Blue Blood.