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A Moose with a crippling math addiction.


Twilight and Celestia have been happily married for millenia at this point. Like many other families, children come into the picture. For two immortal alicorns producing mortal foals, this has some rather nasty unintended consequences.

My entry for the Thirteenth Bimonthly Twilestia Contest. The contest prompt was: nuisance.

Cover art is a combination of this image of Midnight Sparkle by MajorCooke and this image of a crying Twilight Sparkle by HSF. The two were compiled together by myself.

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So the two alicorns laid together on the bed, once sobbing uncontrollably from feelings bottled up for far too long, and the other content to be her wife’s shoulder to cry on, gently rubbing her back with her foreleg in hopes of alleviating some of the pain her wife was feeling.

Pretty sure this should be "one" instead

This is a great take on the psyche of an immortal being. Especially one that was raised with the mindset of a mortal. Celestia's reaction just goes to show the dichotomy even more.

Also, I couldn’t decide whether or not to add the “sad” tag to the story. Should I?

That entirely depends on whether you feel it should or not. I don't think it necessarily needs it, though parts of the story do fall under the sad tag

in its own way its a gift to always be there for your children, for them to know they will never have to bury their parents, to watch them wither away. I watched 3 grandparents whither away to nothing and it hurts so bad. There was a japanese guy who outlived 2 generations of his kids, who all lived long healthy lives, ya it must have hurt him, but his kids never had to do what almost everybody in history has had to and bury their parents

Oh woops! Good catch!

Doesn't she still have to raise the sun?

I know, for the story - cuddles, but still.😅

Uh… Luna’s going to do it. It’s now officially canon that whenever Celestia doesn’t raise the sun, luna does it to make up for the 1000 years that Celestia raised the moon (it was Luna’s idea)

If you remember and equally suffer each passing of loved ones, with long enough life you would only accumulate grief up to point that you grieve all the time being completely disabled from actual life. Dullification of impact, more easy access to acceptance and forgetting previous sufferings are natural adaptation mechanism. It would be extremely foolish to blame person who lost their loved for not suffering if this is their hundreth loved, much less thousandth and even less ten thousanth. Main issue is holding ability to love after all this.

A couple grammar issues, most notably:

They didn't slow down when Celestia wrapped all of her limbs around her wife's body brought Twilight's face into her chest.

The story overall was good and I liked that you had Celestia state the need for a therapist, though I’m not quite sure how well this fits in with the prompt of “nuisance.”

Oops, thanks for catching that.

The prompt ‘nuisance’ comes from how Twilight has come to feel about the deaths of her children after so many years. She feels like it’s just a minor inconvenience, or a nuisance.

For example:

”What kind of pony goes through an event so horribly traumatic that it causes many to shut down completely, and yet she sees it as no worse than as if she accidentally dropped her quill?"

"At Autumn Breeze's funeral. I wasn't sad. All I could think was 'Well that's inconvenient. Welp, onto the next one.'”

Just read this. Love your unique take on the prompt! It’s a very real and very interesting exploration of continued grief and immortality.

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