Late-Night Experiment

When Twilight wants to perform a late-night experiment to test out a spell she’s been working on to let ponies teleport a lot easier, her “#1 Assistant” is ready to help!

However, performing the spell has some… unforeseen consequences… ones that will make them regret ever deciding to perform the experiment…

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Flora Blossom

Flora Blossom #1 · Aug 28th, 2022 · 2 · ·

I give you a thumbs up on this for your first horror fiction it's not too bad. But it does have that pinch of creepy in it that did alright. As a horror fan of course.

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #2 · Aug 28th, 2022 · 1 · ·

I pity for their friends, family, and Celestia/Luna. Because they will probably will never know on what happened to Twilight and Spike.

Plus, this shows a harsh lesson that you shouldn't tamper with certain things and aspects, unless you want to deal with the unfortunate, and even terrifying/lethal consequences for it.

Curiosity does curb stomped the cat after all.

This reminds me of a certain fictional sci-fi space company on mars, experimenting with teleportation as well. And they made a portal to a wrong hellish dimension to link to!

And only a certain Super OP, green armored Badass has to FIX their own mess.

Mocha Star

Mocha Star #3 · Aug 29th, 2022 · 2 · ·

This was okay. You did good world building and the story was good.
The ending was a bit bland because it left me on a cliff hangar without resolution. A few things could have happened still. Twilight could have struck again. She could have teleported away and sealed the room.
It just felt like a classic fill in the ending horror fic.
But that's me and I don't speak for anyone else.
This was enjoyable to read.

Dracthul