Amateur writer, will occasionally post a story
This story is a sequel to Catch Me Before I Fall
So, your willing to see her saved?
*Warning* This is a sequel, for your own enjoyment please read the original story first as you may be lost.
Note: This is only one ending of the previous story, if you’d like to see the alternate ending click here.
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Interesting beginning, now let's see if Celly is in time?
I'll tell you, two endings was not something I was expecting.
Either way, this fic (and the prequel) hit home for me. I love Luna, so seeing her be sad and succumbing to her emptiness really tore a hole in my heart.
Poor Luna...
Um...Luna sleeps during the day time.
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It was morning, technically a very early time of the day.
Both starts and the preceding fiction are good piece of work, and I enjoyed reading them both. I'll be following this one to see how it turns out, and probably check the other one once it is done. I think I wanna hear the good news first on that one
technically the prequel is already a "sad ending". It creates such a hopeless situation that I do not understand why an alternative "sad" sequel is needed.
Personally, I am interested in how it will work out here to fix it until it is too late.
Can't wait for the next chapter
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Oh. I see.
The theme to this and the previous story
https://youtu.be/5gyANphz_Kk
Well its totally up to you but I'd like to see a therapy session. But like I said, up to you
A good therapy session then maybe a time jump to when Luna is doing better for this one!
I’d like to see the sisters in therapy but also have Celestia figure out she’s not giving her sister enough attention. I could have smacked her in the forehead in the last chapter where she just dismissed Luna odd behavior. Like hello baby sister giving away her prized things doesn’t ring any bells!
A therapy for an immortal alicorn do seems like an interesting premise. I believe it deserve another chapter, but you do you first, no need to force it !
There is room for another chapter, should you choose to write it. If you don't want to research therapy or jump to the happy ending, consider the following.
I see that Celestia has chosen her career over her sister's life twice now. What happens if she decides to retire now?
Why does it fell to me like Celestia is just shoveing her problems on somepony else? Only seeking the problem with Luna, never considering that she may have made mistakes of her own.
Not really feeling this one lets try the alternate!
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If Luna had been giving them out one by one, Celestia may have viewed them as a series of surprises and not connected the dots. Even immortal sun goddesses aren't immune from being so busy with their own lives they don't notice the odd behavior of others. It's both freeing and terrifying. No one pays that much attention, you can do what you want. No one pays close attention, no one is there to ask you not to leave just yet.
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If the story gets additional chapters, I hope that this gets touched on. Celestia having the answers isn't immersion-breaking because she has a millennium more life experience than mortal ponies. I won't criticize her for being too flawless just yet, as we've only had two short chapters (but your viewpoint is quite reasonable).
This is a good place to end if that is what you feel like doing, but there is definitely room in this story for some more chapters. Both Luna and Celestia can probably use therapy, and then there is the recovery that can be covered if that produces any story ideas for you. Still, it is as you feel best.
although I like that there is a good ending, but my realistic view can not believe that this happened. In the prequel, the situation was so dangerous and hopeless that Celestia could hardly make it. How did Celestia know exactly where Luna would fall? How long did it take Luna to jump if Celestia managed to find and catch her? For this to happen, Celestia needs to read the letter no later than 10 minutes after Luna left the castle, otherwise there would be too little time.
If there aren’t any ideas left you could branch off into slice of life, wholesome cute kind of chapters.
Please make a few more chapters. It's a great story and I would like it to continue for a little longer and not have it end on a cliffhanger.
I think you should mark this as complete.
Good ending. Adding on more like how Luna feels about therapy might be good, but the story feels good here.
Fine how it is, worth a sequel with luna in therapy tough, as it can be good for lore and worldbuilding
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How many could use this as there theme. I know I could.
That was a good story.
Your trying to make everyone reading this story cry as hard as they can aren't you?
There could be another sequel where Luna does get help, maybe Luna and Twilight can spend some time together? Twilight admires the night sky I believe, maybe Twilight can help her, make Luna realize that she Is important to everypony.