A four-way-tale through the eyes of Princess Flurry Heart, Chrysalis, Cozy Glow, and Tirek. Flurry Heart has just been passed the crown by her mother, Princess Cadance who now acts as her advisor, right before a letter arrives and a certain stone statue.
Her Aunt Twilight, Princess of Friendship has deemed her the only one able to redeem the villains from oh so long ago. Her. Little Flurry Heart. Without anything but Hope on her side, she lets them loose. Was Twilight right? Can Hope win the day when Harmony could not? Does Flurry Heart have what it takes? We can only hope.
Chapters (11)
Great start!
I like how this shows Flurry's insecurities, although one has to wonder why Twilight didn't give this task to her shortly before her crowning rather then after it. She will be quite busy balancing her job as ruler and taking care of the trio. Hopefully she'll get all the help she needs with this task.
I see the need to feed on love carried over to Chrysalis's time in stone. I liked how you showed her mindset through all of this. It makes me very interested as to what you'll come up with for the other two.
I'd assume that Chrysalis would know her as Cadenza.
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In the show, Chrysalis portrays herself as cadenza however, she is outright told she is Cadance during the whole debacle. Given the scars it would leave, that is not a name she would easily forget.
"get all the help she needs"
> The only one who can do it
>none of the others were able to accomplish the task
I'm sorry but how exactly is she supposed to get help in this scenario? The short answer is she is on her own. Why ask help from creatures who have no idea themselves? The only help she could receive would be from Chrysi, Cozy and Tirek.
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True, I suppose. I guess I was mostly thinking of advice, emotional support and resources for certain things she may need to help them with.
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The thing about hope, is it will often get much darker before the light shines again. This won't be solved by magic, this won't be solved with a song. Giving hope to another...can cause the giver to lose their own along the way. The tags may change as the tale goes on. I do hope you'll stick around.
Retconning a villain's motivations to make them look more sympathetic? How original...
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Why? She was referred to as "Cadance" many times during her masquerade.
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Nothing was retconned. The motives of Chrysalis, were never once explained directly in the show, other than trying to steal love from Cadance, and why? Why does she hate Cadance so much? we know nothing of the why or circumstances leading to it, canonically. We don't even know how or why the Changelings came to be. Thinking a bit about it, we know nothing about Changeling origins other than they eat love. We don't even know how they are born. I mean we assume chrysi is the broodmother because insect, but the hive has both males and females, unlike a real insect hive. Maybe chrysi isn't a mother but a simple queen?
This is told through her eyes and perspective of the situation. This is how I logically perceived her reasons for doing so.
I do hope you'll stay and enjoy the rest, now...Cozy Glow...that's gonna be a fun introduction to write. Though again, we know nothing about her. It is my hope that if viewed through their eyes...perhaps their actions as horrible as they were, could have been born of necessity.
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Chrysalis never showed any signs of hating Cadance in the show, or of trying to reach out to the ponies before attacking them. Cadance was captured and replaced because her impending marriage to Shining Armor provided a perfect opportunity to invade Canterlot.
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And why exactly did she invade? Why would the ruler of the Crystal Empire make a perfect target? Seems kind of odd to pick such a highly guarded, high-profile victim, don't you think? So what canon reason was there to do so? Why was she so possessive of Shining Armor especially in her words "No, I do not love the groom, in my heart, there is no room. But I want him to be all mine." since songs happen in-universe as has been shown, why did she care so much if not to attack Cadance specifically?
We can discuss our opinions all we wish but at the end of the day, neither of us has a factual clue. Though it is fine to speculate. As such this is my own speculation.
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Cadance wasn't the ruler of the Crystal Empire at that point, remember? I'd expect someone calling themselves "Loremaster" to be aware of that.
As for Shining Armor, he was essentially her power source. She'd want him nearby to keep herself charged up.
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In the end, it is all speculation. None of it is actually stated in the show. Please enjoy the story. This has been a fun discussion but honestly, this will be my last message about this to you. At least before I finish Cozy Glow's introduction chapter. The tags will definitely change once it is published. Currently halfway.
Looks like Cozy could shed a light to some social issues in Equestria with that backstory if its true. I like how easily distracted she was by the room and some tea. Very cute and childish.
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<3
Why are the chapters so short?
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They are bite-size. Why must you always find something to criticize. Every single story I write no matter what it is you always disliked and leave some question, anyway saying about how something's wrong, and then you never respond anyway. You never say anything positive, you ask questions that if you read it would be easy to figure out the answers and since you never respond to my replies, I doubt you even really care. This is my last reply to you. I've had enough. I doubt you even read the stories, to begin with.
My patience is as deep as the ocean, but even the Marianas Trench has a bottom.
Tirek is adjusting remarkably fast, I must say. Soon he'll be joining Celestia and Luna in the retirement home.
Are the trio being released separately? I assume so because they aren't acknowledging each other. I wonder how long it'll be ti'll they finally meet again.
That is quite a bit longer then I expected.
Wow, now he has at least a proper prison cell's worth of commodities!
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Actually, all at once, Cozyglow acknowledges this...however, they never really cared for each other, only the ends to which their alliance could bring them, so like the self-centered individuals they are, they are more focused on themselves and those addressing them, to talk to each other...currently anyway. No spoilers for what may be.
Appreciate your thoughts. Just wanted to clear that up.
I'm curious to ask why are are the chapters so short? With stories having an interesting concept like this, Shouldn't it be 3000 to 4000 words per chapter. You could really do so much more but that's just a suggestion my friend.
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I felt more bite-sized pieces were needed for this particular story. Especially as each covers one perspective of one of four characters on the same scenario. Normally I go 1k-4k as a guideline per chapter...but I feel this is in line with the title...after all...it is just a little hope.
Alicorn aging sure is magical. Sad that so many characters are dead at this point. It seems that Flurry took the trio to the worst places she possibly could. I'm going to guess that Cozy was a slave of some sort based on her previous description and apparent resentment of mines. Either way, I'm excited to see her new plan.
Flurry has some interesting hang out spots...
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Well, you'll have to suffer 3 chapters of their individual thoughts on those locations and events...where you may be surprised how they saw them. Then you may know her next plan. Stick around <3
Interesting way to portray Chryssie's mindset there. I interpret her to feel like she's both proud of her young but also depressed because she's now feeling useless, failed in what she tried to achieve but just wasn't able to. An interesting duality.
Seems that Chrysalis may actually be the best off of the trio. At least she's happy with how her changelings turned out.
Thorax's kid? Either Thorax was older in the show then I assume or changelings just grow up faster.
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You nailed it. It's a very bittersweet wave of emotions. She loves it, she hates it. However, for the first time in a long time, her eyes are actually opened. Though, this tale is far from over. Stick around <3
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I mean, he was a full-grown king stag(beetle), and she only showed up after that fact so...since we know nothing about changelings...we don't even know steve...I mean thorax's age...so some liberties of interpretation have been taken to fit my narrative...I will admit<3
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The only problem with your logic is the fact that Ocellus’s parents were shown multiple times in the show.
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Well, yes, but under our assumptions as to what parents mean to them. Could be a group family scenario could be a guardian scenario could be a normal scenario. Artistic interpretation has been taken and yes I admit to taking some liberties to fit my narrative, not every single detail is always going to line up...after all the show broke its own lore countless times. It is honestly just a little stand-alone story, with no ties to really any others. I'm just doing my best. Please enjoy <3
Also if it helps I'll add an alternate tag to it.
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I’m just saying.
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And you are completely right.
so far, the Chrysalis itself is interesting to watch. I hope she can find her place in this world and have a little more contact with the old hive.
P.S. I can't believe that the kingdom of the centaurs could be in ruins from some incomprehensible threat.
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I would suggest not skipping, or you might lose the plot...but, only time will tell if Chrissy...actually moves on, and what that might mean. I hope you'll stick around, though the sky is always darkest before the dawn.
^to be fair...Tirek couldn't either.
You should changed the rating and a ‘Dark Tag’ to it
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It already has a dark tag...And no reason to change the rating. Nothing explicit and no specific wording.
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Oh… sorry but I say change the rating because of Cozy getting rapped and her folks got murder
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Alright after re-visiting the ratings rules just to be sure the best I can do is a T for teen. It won't qualify for M
Edit: the rating is now T. I hope you enjoy the story. Thanks for reading. <3
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I was just letting you know, so you don’t get in trouble or your story gets revoked until you follow the rules. Words aren’t the only thing that describe your story, how the readers read it does. For example; a spear in the eye socket is T or M depending how you describe it
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It's already been changed and by the way, that's not how ratings work. Been writing a long time and have written a lot of horrifying E for everyone. Stop typing spoilers in the chat, as that's not allowed without a spoiler tag and understand it barely qualifies for a T for teen even though worded differently, it would be an M.
I grew up experiencing a scenario similiar to this. Every story I write is based on an aspect of my life. For me to read this? would be a been there done that scenario. The reader can't determine a rating because the reader is biased in their views. What determines the rating is how it is conveyed to a reader. The presentation. Not the perception.
It's fairly obvious who it was. I only wonder why he didn't bring this incident up when she was punished. They probably wouldn't've been so harsh if they knew.
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something tells me, you've figured it out. I appreciate you not outright saying it, though I do agree. Though perhaps more importantly...why did Celestia say nothing?
Surprisingly dark backstory. At least Cozy's still cute and lovable.
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<3 yus
what what, and the genocide of beggars by the guards, I could not expect to see burned.
Tirek's father got his kingdom destroyed. Question is, what happen To Scorpan?
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Because of your suggestion to change the rating...I admit, it helped me gather more views and interactions, plus you stuck around afterward meaning you really did care and weren't just being negative. I'm happy to see you again, so, I'll answer your question best as I can.
In canon, Tirek disowned Scorpan for 'loving ponies' as he put it. In that Universe, Scorpan basically "lived happily ever after" essentially dying fulfilled before Twilight's time. Life is only finite(for some) after all, and if celly and luna were both ruling when tirek and scorpan appeared, it stands to reason this was before the 1000 years on the moon. So, I would say he fell in love with and stayed in Equestria until he finally passed from old age. I like to imagine he loved, lost, and loved some more and had a job...perhaps as a blacksmith.
In my universe, the same happened, only after or may just before the 1000 years on the moon incident came to an end.
So basically, the blacksmith in ponyville was a very old centaur, while the mane 6 and starlight did their thing.
I hope this helps explain my thoughts on Scorpan's role in this AU. As this is meant to focus on Tirek 200 year later and since he disowned him originally, I didn't really consider Scorpan... so this is my best explanation.
So did Equestria and co. just genocide the centaurs? Were there no civilians or anything? Why not just take out the leadership?
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well, who do you think rallied to his cause? War is never so simple, a leader does after all...have to have those he or she leads. So yes, they stood against Equestria under his command and they paid for it.
Just as the assassination of an Archduke started a World War, that execution started a battle cry of its own. The Centaurs were primitive and completely dependant on their leader. What he commanded they did, and he declared war. So they fought until the death. And they lost.
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Wonder explanation. Thank you for answering my question.
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<3