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A Private Nightmare Night

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Boof Man

Boof Man #1 · May 26th, 2021 · · ·

Gotta address some issues here
Primarily the stiff dialogue and poor grammar.

If you had a conversation with anyone irl, it would not go as follows, even if both only knew broken English. Numerous times I noted the wrong word, or words, being used to describe something as well. I'm personally not an expert in diagnosing everything wrong with how stories are written, but I recommend finding an editor that can help touch up a few mistakes.

This group would be a good starting point. https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors

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