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Neutral Boy


First time of writing my own stories on here since the first episode of my little pony friendship is magic.

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The once great peace of Equestria has fallen into ruin. Several years ago, an unfortunate tragic event took place. An innocent human who has appeared in Ponyville, has snapped due to the actions of Eris and the element bearers with blood on their own hooves. When all hope is faded and Empress Jessica Wright rising in power, the former prince Dusk Shine gives his final words to Eris before pushing her into the portal. Now as the remaining sole survivor, Eris needs to make things right by learning her mistakes and making sure this whole entire mess doesn't ever happen again. However, things won't be very easy as she'll need some time of gathering all the allies in a different world in order to stop the growing invasion of Empress Jessica Wright and her tyrannic order.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 15 )

I can’t wait to see more of what this tale entails for eris

I’m in for the ride let see how it goes. This is a very strong first chapter. hope this continues and doesn’t hit a dead end

So, a opposite gender version? ( Male Main Six, Female Spike, Male Celestia, Luna, Cadence. Female Shining Armor, Female Discord, Sombra, and Tirek. Etc..)

And a female Jason Wright FINALLY have "her" revenge against the Xenophobic Ponies. She DESERVES her victory!!!! Considering the fact of the terrible and mess up Original and other side-stories and other human abuse. 😡 😠

I would have done the same thing if I were in both the original Male Jason or the female version. To torture and kill the OOC Pony A-holes and rule the world as a double middle finger to everypony/every Creature. "If the World and Fate keeps screwing with me. Then F*** both of them. And I will rule and screw them both at the same time!!!" 😈 😈 😈


And I rule it WAY better than the Ponies ever did. And I wouldn't judge the other poor Creatures by their race, but their own actions and consequences. Although, having multiple Angel/Devil Wings sounds cool. I prefer to have a Body of multiple powerful races/characters from Dragon Ball Z/GT/Super. A perfect Life Form for the Dragon Ball Series. A Cell/Android 21 + 50 Times Better. With Multiple DNA, and a LOT of Techniques and Transformations.

There are numerous spelling errors in your description. Please fix them.

In the several years passing, the end has come for both Harmony, Order, and Chaos.

That’s three.

"Eris, for once in your life, I need you to listen to me. Once you get across the portal, make sure this whole mess doesn't happen ever again and learn from your mistakes or I swear to every pony that I won't forgive you forever. This is my final orders to you as a former prince of Equestria."

Why not go with her?

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Yep, especially on seeing a different world than her current one.

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Don't worry, I won't have it on hitting a dead end.

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In my opinion, there's really no happy endings for xenophobic species in stories.

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Any specific errors in my description?

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That would work, but they would've been followed so yeah.

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True! They deserve for what they get. Their World BURN/CONQUERED by messing with the wrong person.

Wait, I’m kinda confused by this.

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Oh the voices will be the start of her nightmares and the mysteries of them later on. The second part is if you haven't notice, both her and Dusk Shine's spell has worked so she is indeed in another world.

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I thought they were trying to travel back in time.

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They did, but not the kind of time travel hop both Dusk and Eris never realized.

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I'll get it updated soon.

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