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Charlie_K

Charlie_K #1 · Oct 12th, 2020 · 1 · ·

You genuinely make me curious what this crew of characters would do if they were tasked with going into my world of work to rectify things.

Faultless Line

Faultless Line #2 · Oct 12th, 2020 · 1 · ·

This looks like the start of something absolutely beautiful. I've always been a fan of exploration and finding precious lore for a new world (and, given the popularity of Fallout: Equestria, I'd wager that a sizeable amount of others are too), and this hits all the right spots. You have mystery, interesting mechanics unique to your story (and Narry is one of the most innovative I've seen in a while!), a well-crafted tense atmosphere, and the ever-important lack of horrible grammar.

All in all, I am really looking forward to more.

Azure Drache

Azure Drache #3 · Oct 12th, 2020 · · ·

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Funny fact, also my pre-readers and editors asked themselves what would happen if this team visist their worlds. Seems everyone is interested in that