• Published 15th Apr 2020
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You are not going to a strip club!! - TheBronyKnight



Fluttershy heard her boyfriend Discord was going to the strip club for Spike' birthday, but she will not allow it!!

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*immediately googles the tulip* intresting information I must save it. For science if course.

10185154
The best kind of science ;)

10185172
lol! It is, to bad there a quarantine interrupting my scientific research that definitely 100% for science.

10185178
Well I am always open to sharing my "notes" with a fellow scientist. As long as you have a good "scientific method" for some accurate results.

10185193
Hahaha ur funny! Creative word play there! Of course I have a method every good scientist does. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Am I the only one that is now wanting to see Discord in a strip club now? With and/or without shenanigans ensuing :pinkiecrazy:

10187605
I would like to see it too, but Fluttershy is possessive so that won't happen ;)

Always nice to have more Fluttercord, would've love to see her go Fluttergoth on him!:rainbowwild:

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Flutterslut was fun to write, but the next Fluttercord I would make might be related to this image..

pbs.twimg.com/media/D5nGydGW4AMEPwT?format=jpg&name=large

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That could be fun, good luck with your next fic! Haven't gotten around to that episode of EQ yet, so behind there!

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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-I like 'Dissy' as a nickname.
-Typo in description.
-You are going to a strip club Dissy. -- missing not, missing comma.
-Fluttershy said as she taps -- tense slipping.
-and that’s final” Fluttershy said -- missing punctuation.
-she jiggles his breasts a bit -- well, this story just got a lot kinkier.
-Why would Discord sending her a message on every possible social media site make it any better?
-Wait, did she just lock him in the basement? A) that's extremely cruel and abusive. B) He's Discord -- he could just snap his fingers and get out.
-When they started dating 4 years ago-while she was in high school and he was a graduate going to college, -- wut?
-Bizarre choice of details to mention sometimes.
-Grammar was pretty gnarly overall.
-It's a nice, sexy solution to their relationship problem ... but it doesn't really solve their problem, does it? After everything they just did together, Discord might still want to go out with the guys.

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 60/100
Allure: 45/100
Enticement: 30/100
Immersion: 25/100
Prose Quality: 15/100
Total Score: 175/500
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“I need your cum inside of me! Get me pregnant! Breed me!!!” Fluttershy yelled in his ear as her husky voice was out of breath.

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You don't know how much goosebumps I have and how red my face is.

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Sorry if I gave you irreversible cherry face syndrome. It's a side effect to my Fluttercord fics.

10281527
It's k it's really normal

10282569
Any other ships I should try writing?

10282636
Anything u want it don't want u to be uncomfortable writing something ur uncomfortable with ^^

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